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Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from eriktheviking
Review:
Cracking good story, thanks.
Review By [eriktheviking] • Date [15 Sep 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from (Recent Donor)tammin
Review:
Looking good so far. Just remember to try and keep the character reactions, backgrounds, and personalities straight. One more thing "while the third oddly enough was dressed as a town sheriff, from Eureka, California of all places." Eureka is in Washington State not California (yes I know that all of the other details are from Oregon like the state flag, maps, etc., etc, etc.).
Review By [(Recent Donor)tammin] • Date [15 Sep 09] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from grd
Review:
Thank you thank you. I have dreamt of this type if fanfic ever since I saw the movie so long ago. Eager to see what you have planned.
Review By [grd] • Date [15 Sep 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from theunixer
Review:
I like this story. As others have written earlier, it has real potential.

I do have some comments/advice (butting in?).

1. PLEASE add chapters much more frequently (like once a week at least). Six months is way WAY too long.

2. You put in too many people. 5 million? The US military is under 3 million and that includes reserve and National Guard (who are under State control).

3. You seem to be also recapitulating 'The Axis Of Time' trilogy ('Weapons Of Choice', 'Designated Targets', and 'Final Impact') by John Birmingham. In it, in 2021 a multinational taskforce ends up just prior to the Battle of Midway, preventing it from happening while sustaining much damage. They change things by their presence (like the war ending in 1944 via multiple nukes, which none of the ships in the taskforce carried). It is a new timeline that branches off from theirs (martered Hillary Clinton was President of the US before 2021).

4. Privately, many physicists admit to believing in the 'Many Worlds' theory of the Universe. That means there are multiple timelines, the multiverse really does exist. While the original timeline ('The Final Countdown' one) CAN'T be changed, as was explained in the movie (and the novel by Martin Caidin - yes, I did read it, it's even better than the movie), it does allow you to actually change history in your story. How all that future technology affects things (all those startup companies created by the 21st century crew [and ex-crew] members recaptitulating Silicon Valley) during the war (and a sequal for after the war ends? - Supersonic Gound Effect Vehicles [see Net Assets, by Karl Bussjaeger, available for free downloading at http://www.bussjaeger.org ] as a first stage of REALLY cheap Space Mini-shuttles perhaps).


5. And why a Non-Buffy story anyway? Why couldn't the new Watchers Council (by whatever name you want it to be) having a team (3 or better 5 Slayers for this one, Watcher, Mage and/or Witch, and Tech people) as part of it, by Presidential order? The Council wants a team because of Slayer Dreams giving a (cryptic of course) warning.

Again, I like your story. Please continue it.
Comments from author:
Trying to answer some of your points.
1. Will try but with much research into modern militaries and equipment for accuracy may take longer add to that the possible course of events things could take. I need an aspirin.
2. Maybe. I'll probably now have to lower it.
3. Never heard of it. It won't be that easy.
4. The axis now also have forces in the past. Going to be using only equipment that actually is in use.
5. Well I could include Angel and Spike, maybe Darla and Dru but I didn't want to.
Review By [theunixer] • Date [29 Apr 09] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from CPTSkip
Review:
I've got to say, your story has much potential. But I don't know if it is good potential or disaster potential. Lol! I do look forward to seeing just who this powerful force will be attacking. With that much advanced military power, I'm not sure Imperial Japan will last more than a month or so and the Nazis not much longer. Well they will have to move the fleet through the Canal to attack the Nazi forces in Europe. And I wonder what the presence of all this military force will do for Uncle Joe Stalin's state of mind. Lol! And what will be the effects of all the multiracial crew have on 1940's US military and political leadership? As I said, so much potential.

I do hope there are some Australian Navy and maybe even New Zealand forces attached. Now I really look forward to seeing What Happens Next.
Comments from author:
Well let's see . . . not to give away too much, but you will have noticed that the modern day German, Italian and Japanese have contibuted a 'small' military force to the exercise. It seems to me that everyone forgets about the Imperial Japanese Naval Aviator that was killed in the Nimitz's sick bay. I wonder what ever happened to him? I wonder if he had any surviving family?
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [29 Apr 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from djhardim
Review:
Glad to see more of this story. I think I understand the how and why of this story. To the older Tideman, the events unfolding in this story have already happened. He knows who needed to go back as well as what ships.

I know you answered my question before, but I want to be sure. Are the older Tidemans still alive in 2004, or have they passed on?
Comments from author:
For the purposes of this story they've died. Not to say they didn't have children and grand children. One or more of which just might have joined the Navy. But of course in 1941 both Miss Scott (Mrs. Tideman) and now LT(USN) Tideman are alive and well and it has been for them only approx. 20 days since the Nimitz left.

How I hate time travel, all those paradoxes. Ugh.
Review By [djhardim] • Date [29 Apr 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Moderator)Saturn
Review:
Interesting. The de-aging confuses me though. Did that happen in the movie too?
Comments from author:
No I just did that. I figured since he'd thru twice already third times a charm. As is the case with the rest of the crew how was with him twenty five years ago.
Review By [(Moderator)Saturn] • Date [30 Oct 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from djhardim
Review:
Interesting. I always enjoyed that movie, especially the dogfight.

I suppose that Yelland's regression in age is due to his previous trip in time. I don't know about his wife though.

Wasn't Walker an army vet?

Are the Tidemans still around?
Comments from author:
Yes ADM Yelland's regression is due to that. Walker was with Force Marine RECON in 'NAM. The Tideman's (CDR Richard T. Owens and Laurel Scott) are of course still around. Infact I do believe Mr 'Tideman' is flying with CDR Wade McClusky off the USS Enterprise CV-6 which is by the way patroling off Haaii at this moment in history.
Review By [djhardim] • Date [30 Oct 08] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Recent Donor)faithfan
Review:
I always liked the movie "Final Countdown", you just have to continue this story, at least until we find out who Admiral Yellan is.
Comments from author:
Look up the Kirk Douglas character. It is after all twenty five years and four stars later.
Review By [(Recent Donor)faithfan] • Date [30 Oct 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from CPTSkip
Review:
OK, all I can say is there had BETTER be more to this story. What happened? Please, more?
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [30 Oct 08] • Not Rated
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