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Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from DieselDriver
It's about time someone thought of Ethan...
Comments from author:
Yeah, and that's not gonna be a good thing for him, when they find him. ;-)
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [19 Dec 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from DieselDriver
This name "Nyeun Chun Ti", who I'm completely unfamiliar with, reminded me of "Chiun" in "The Destroyer". So, another idea for a story/crossover. Xander dresses as Remo Williams and someone, Giles maybe??? dresses as Chiun. That would be hilarious. Especially so, when they both revert most of the way back, appearance wise, while, since it's only training, they both retain the entirety of the capabilities. What a rude shock for Spike and also for Deadboy.
Comments from author:
Yeah, that could be a fun story, but I did a crossover with the Destroyed series in my story, "What I Did On My Summer Vacation", which is posted on this site.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [19 Dec 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from TharzZzDunN
Huh, so we're looking at a rising chance of the origin plane going bye-bye once that rift plucks the Hellmouth too strongly and it fluxes in response. So a possible scattering of characters across the realms to keep the story going maybe?

Comments from author:
Well, Ethan's manage to screw things up royally, on a MUCH larger scale than he's ever managed to do, previously. ;-)
Review By [TharzZzDunN] • Date [10 Nov 13] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from (Current Donor)Ironbear
Good to see a Greywizard story update drop in above my Hell-er-nator update. ;)

Gotta admit, I'm a bit lost on who all the characters are and who went as what. I may not yet be awake enough to have been reading this. I'm also not familiar with even half of the crossovers involved, which doesn't help.

Otherwise, it's well written and up to your usual standards of plot and dialogue. Nice.
Comments from author:
Thanks, buddy, I really appreciate any time a fellow author reviews and comments. ;-)

And I will probably add a 'Who's Who' listing of the characters in the next chapter, to help people keep everyone straight.
Review By [(Current Donor)Ironbear] • Date [31 Oct 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from KrisB
Hmm. I hate to say it, but other than the time stop stasis field, the best thing to do with Doomsday would be to toss him through that portal to the Dark Dimension and let the real Dormammu try to handle him.

I'd think that the real Dormammu wouldn't be setting by and just watching. He should be taking note that there looks to be an easier Earth to take over and sending things across.

I'm not really a fan of the concept that the spell would just run forever. I'm more along the lines that the spell should run for a day or so as that's about all Janus really puts into these things unless his worshipper puts up some type of serious stakes to power it. I've always been of the opinion that the spell would last to morning if it wasn't interrupted. I'm actually curious on how your theft of the stature wiill turn out. Basically that looks like some one wanted to keep this going.

You'll also have two future teams trying to find Ethan's to stop this mess. I don't actually think that I caught what Buffy was wearing this time around. I've noticed Willow, Joyce, and Xander as well as Jono and Andrew, but that's about it.

Here is a question. Can the blue lantern rings open dimensional portals and get people home? This new Xander will actually be rather scary when you think about it if he survives. That Ring will mainly be used as a general utility tool to create the normal tools/weapons that he is used to or requires. That would normally be very interesting by itself, but they are in the middle of a crisis so he won't be thinking along those lines until a week or two when things settle down some what.

On to Willow, my favorite opinion of what happened was Slayer Willow is now bonded to her alt as that missing third piece. It wouldn't have happened if anyone else had touched her, but since she is a version of Willow and you could say something along the lines of souls being multiversal or something and just connecting up. They will be having to difficult time un bonding their Willow to the native Willow. Won't they be surprised upon meeting Buffy. ;)

I'm actually curious on your alt Buffy, Xander, & Bree folks. That one looks slayer, high tech warrior, magic user. They will be headed towards Ethan's and I can't wait for them to run into local Xander. Apparently Bree is a replacement / sub for Willow. Willow might not have stuck around or been a statistic in that universe. I'm actually looking forward to your meet and greet.

Xander knows what's going on, Willow is stunned, Joyce is in full costume, but handling things. I'm not sure where/who Buffy was though. Hmm, you should likely have Buffy meet up with the slayer Willow group. They would likely not recongize her. Buffy could have died pre Sunnydale or Master's cave there. I'd rather alt Xander die going to save alt Buffy from the Master's cave rather than being turned during his first vamp fight. That's just me though.

I've got to comment that Ethan was utterly stupid here. I can see not putting in a Super man if you are just going to have lots of normal costume bad guys. If you are tossing out a genocidical planet killer that actually took down Super man? To have any brains, you'd have some one or a couple of some ones to balance him off or being able to handle him. I'm going to say that Ethan is just stupid for not knowing what the costume's do except in the most basic way and unleashed two super villians by accident. I hope.

You mentioned that you had plans for the PTB to bite the dust. Other than Strange and Dormammu taking them out by accident, I just am not seeing anyone locally on that power level or able to ascend to those power levels. Of course, you could just say that the PTBs are lower power but having seer power and a limited ability to influence/empower folks on this plane. Strange might be able to cut their ties to that plane or call in some real "Good Gods" for divine back up.
Comments from author:
Well, reading your comments made me wonder if you've been peeking over my shoulder at some of my notes about this story. And I really appreciate your reviewing and commenting on the story so far. ;-)

As far as Dormammu is concerned, depending upon how it's interpreted (and magic has its own rules, remember), his own vow not to invade Earth could/would pretty much preclude him from invading any Earth, so all he is likely doing at the moment is waiting to see how he can take advantage of the situation, when event allow him to do so.

And no, the spell will not run indefinitely. However, events are not proceeding the way Ethan wanted them to go, either.

The parameters of a blue lantern ring's capability are going to be addressed in the next couple chapters, and I will note that its native power source (so to speak) differs from a green lantern ring, by being Hope, and not Willpower.

You make an interesting observation about Willow's situation, and one which will be addressed in an upcoming chapter. ;-)

The Buffy/Xander/Bree team has some additional aspects to it that will be revealed in the next several chapters, and will show where some of the branchings occurred.

Native Buffy did not dress as any recognizable fictional or historical character and she merged with an NPC I made up a while back for an RPG game plot which ended up never getting used. I decided to recycle Siobhan because she's just too interesting, at least to me, to let fade into obscurity. And she's going to be meeting up with several more groups before the story is finished. ;-)

Native Xander is *not* *at* *all* pleased about what's going on in town, and he's going to be expressing his displeasure any number of ways. Having the ring is going to allow him to make sure those responsible are definitely aware of that fact. ;-(

You're completely correct about Ethan being quite stupid about the exact parameters of the costumes he enchanted, but considering the blasé attitude he displayed in the episode, it seems to me to be totally in character for the person shown.

And as far as the capabilities of the PTB, I wold think that if Vocah,a character in Angel's series, was capable of killing the Oracles - who appeared to be similar to, if not the same as the PTB - then any high-level character armed with the appropriate weapons and a sufficient level of determination cold succeed, too.

Thanks for reviewing. I really enjoyed your analysis of the story, so far. ;-)
Review By [KrisB] • Date [31 Oct 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from Riniko
Looking like Ethan will be getting his deserved beating, but the spell will not be ending as soon as it should.
Comments from author:
Ethan most certainly deserves a *lot* more than a beating, and things are developing in ways he did not anticipate. ;-(
Review By [Riniko] • Date [31 Oct 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from Riniko
Well, I'm hopeful that Willow will have gained what she needed to survive this lost without seriously injuring her counterpart. Xander is going to come out of this to the good. But, that last bit with the bust being taken is troublesome, as it could lead to this lasting longer and more dying.
Comments from author:
Things are definitely getting more chaotic in town - even more so than Ethan had originally anticipated.

How things are going to develop is still a very fluid situation, since more players are still showing up.
Review By [Riniko] • Date [31 Oct 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from Riniko
That was a horrible loss to poor Willow, losing a third of herself. I do hope that when the spell ends she is healed, or this could lead to a faster slide to the dark side to regain that lost part of herself. Saddened to see Harmony as Power Girl die, if she lived she could have changed for the better, but at least she went out a hero.
Comments from author:
Yes, losing one third of one's self would be extremely painful and damaging.

And Harmony - at least this particular incarnation of her - did die as a hero.
Review By [Riniko] • Date [31 Oct 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Riniko
Well that was interesting, I was correct on my guess on Dormammu, the Eternal Sersi, but was off on Willow. Always liked seeing Rouge, but she and Warbird would not get along if they meet.
Comments from author:
Glad you enjoyed the chapter, but Rogue hasn't shown up in this story. Yet, at least. ;-)

And no, she and Carol Danvers would not get along well, at all. ;-(
Review By [Riniko] • Date [31 Oct 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from (Recent Donor)nerfherder
Aaah, come on! It was just getting really interesting. Have a heart?!?
Comments from author:
Not to worry; there's much more to come on this one! ;-)
Review By [(Recent Donor)nerfherder] • Date [8 Jan 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from (Recent Donor)nerfherder
Your most elaborate attempt so far read! Please continue!
Comments from author:
Definitely continuing. Just need to find time for the next chapter
Review By [(Recent Donor)nerfherder] • Date [6 Aug 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from SamDragon
Very good.
Comments from author:
Thanks. Much more to come on this one. ;-)
Review By [SamDragon] • Date [6 Dec 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from athanor
Action-packed and thrilling as always, but like with most massive-multiplayer crossovers I'm starting to get confused by who dressed as what. Any chance for a dramatis personae?
Comments from author:
That's a reasonable request, so I'll add an update to the next chapter.
Review By [athanor] • Date [4 Dec 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from CrystalBlaze
Okay, I think I have a few questions.

Given that a third of Willow's persona and life force is gone/dead/kaput, what takes its place in the rather power-soaked and chaotic terrain?

Slayer Willow basically had a spaz attack on touching one of the remaining sections, so I have a serious worry about what comes next..

Next up, is the dimensional fracturing getting worse? Dormitory Boy (Dormammu Lite) opened a gateway to the Dark Dimension and unleashed some of the Mindless Ones.

What is the actual Dormammu's take on this? (aside from possibly conjuring a bucket of popcorn and taking notes for his next battle with the genuine Strange, I mean..)

And what are the Powers' emergancy plans for the collapse of the Hellmouth? I can already tell you that the First will be trying desperately to get out while he can, and already would have done so except he hasn't had the head start he did after the re-Calling of Buffy Summers in canon.
Comments from author:
Al I can say at the moment is that things are just getting started. ;-)

I really like your nickname for Andrew, aka Dormammu Lite, and I agree that the real Dormammu is probably sitting back and munching on a bucket of popcorn.

And the Powers are sitting on their asses, trying to figure out how they can take the most advantage of the situation, and they're going to find out, firsthand, how the sabre-toothed tiger and the dinosaurs feel soon enough. ;-)
Review By [CrystalBlaze] • Date [4 Dec 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from (Past Donor)Skyefather
ok I'm starting to feel like someone slipped some LSD in my jack & coke love all the action but having a hard time following the plot line (is there one???) or is this just your imagination given free raine. please update soon and what happened to Xander in the Willow the slayer verse did Willow or Jess stake a vampire Xander or is he a torchered soul leaden zombie?? the possiablly are to many and to much fun to think about. see I can use my imagination too.

love it so far keep it going.
Comments from author:
There actually is a plot line, but but it's hiding in the background to avoid being noticed by all the monsters swarming through the town at the moment. ;-)

The fate of Wilow the Vampire Slayer's Xander is currently unrevealed and may or may not have a bearing on what's coming up in future chapters.

Glad you're enjoying the story.
Review By [(Past Donor)Skyefather] • Date [20 Jan 09] • Rating [9 out of 10]
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