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Review of chapter "Vengeance" from BuffyKaibaHunt
Review:
Very neat and awesome so far! :) I like it. Very brilliant and creative, too.
Review By [BuffyKaibaHunt] • Date [1 Jul 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Vengeance" from Bobboky
Review:
cool
Comments from author:
Thanks.
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [11 May 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Vengeance" from missinglink
Review:
Solid story. Am interested in the progression beyond what is written as a next step is left completely up in the air and exactly what strife beyond finding out why he (Xander) has become the host to Judas and just how much of Xander remains either in competition or cooperation with Judas now that they have finished Radu off.

Don't know if you plan more, as the stopping point you have now is a decent one. Will keep my eyes open in case there is more, but again, thanks for the interesting take.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review, there will be more but my little bro is coming home from the hospital for the first time and I don't have much time to write.
Review By [missinglink] • Date [3 Dec 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Vengeance" from JediKnight
Review:
Good job on this new story, I hope I can add more soon.
Any way I can help with your writer's block?
Any story in particular you are trying to work on?
In "No Fate", see about dropping Xander in to "Terminator: The Sarah Connor Chronicles".
Comments from author:
Ideas about new plot twists on my stories would help. Just suggestions that can give me hints or ideas about what to do. *Shrugs* Sometimes I just run dry.

ALL.

Nah, not that. Nice idea but it's been done.
Review By [JediKnight] • Date [15 Nov 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Vengeance" from lorwen
Review:
pretty good.
looking forward to seeing more.
Comments from author:
Thanks.
Review By [lorwen] • Date [12 Nov 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Vengeance" from Loatroll
Review:
Interesting stuff!
I'm personally hoping for a "good" ending, with "Xander"/Mary ;-P
With a large bit of Xander in him, Judas(Dracula) would be more human no?

Anyway it doesn't matter much, I'm sure I'll enjoy whatever you write :-P
Thanks for the great read!
Comments from author:
The story of Dracula is never ending, he is at constant battle with his hatred and his love. It's what makes him such a seductive character, he is both good and evil. He sees himself as betrayed because of his destiny and thus hates to help any higher power and would rather still the things they care about most away. For Radu, he took his handsome features and pride while making him have flashbacks to both his brother and the Sultan.
Review By [Loatroll] • Date [11 Nov 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Vengeance" from speakerforthesilent
Review:
When I first clicked on this story, I had visions of seeing Xander as Illidan. This was, quite possibly better. I would suggest, though, that you get a beta reader for the story, or proofread it yourself before you post. There are a number of incidents where you use the wrong word for example, chard instead of charred. If I recall correctly, the first is a fish while the latter refers to something that has been burnt.

In any case still an interesting fic.
Comments from author:
Thanks. I try to proof read it, but after I finish a chapter I am just so tired that I decide to just correct the mistakes as I go.
Review By [speakerforthesilent] • Date [10 Nov 08] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Vengeance" from BlueGold
Review:
I really like this and how the story is turning out. I also greatly approve of the Buffy Drac being Radu. He was perfect for buffy but so untrue to what he should be. I really look forward to where this story is going.
Comments from author:
Thank you. I liked that twist too.
Review By [BlueGold] • Date [9 Nov 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Rebirth" from (Current Donor)dogbertcarroll
Review:
Never saw it coming. Nice work.
Comments from author:
I'm glad that I didn't disappoint.
Review By [(Current Donor)dogbertcarroll] • Date [9 Nov 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Vengeance" from eriktheviking
Review:
Very well written and imagined, thanks. Also, I apologize about my confusion from the first chapter.
Comments from author:
It's alright.
Review By [eriktheviking] • Date [9 Nov 08] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Vengeance" from VillageOrchid
Review:
Interesting.... but so far Xander hasn't bretrayed his own...Judas, yes... but somehow a measure of Janus has merged them. Looking forward to seeing where you take the story.
Comments from author:
He will.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [9 Nov 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Vengeance" from JediClaire
Review:
Wow. I know it is Judas and he is a bit angry at being reborn again as a vampire, but I want to know, why did he kill the people on the plane? I thought he was going to try to be good for a while.
Comments from author:
Not good. He looks at mankind as trophies against God, but there are those in the world that he loves and that's why he wants the world to keep turning.
Review By [JediClaire] • Date [9 Nov 08] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Vengeance" from Weaver
Review:
Wow. I know I said that I hoped Radu's end was a... creative one but that was even more graphic then I imagined. I don't know whether I'm scared or impressed *grin* After that little demonstration of vengence I think it's safe to say that Drac is most definitly back.
Comments from author:
Yes, he's back. I hope you enjoyed it as I worked hard to find a proper torture from Vlad's arsenal. He used this against the nobles who buried his father alive.
Review By [Weaver] • Date [9 Nov 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Rebirth" from JediClaire
Review:
I hope you write more, and I hope that Xander/Dracula/Judas gains forgiveness from God.
Comments from author:
Maybe he will. I remember reading one of the Dante books. Michael asked Lucifer when he would forgive God and the Devil said when God forgives him. Michael then comments that God said the same thing. That's what I'm going for here.
Review By [JediClaire] • Date [8 Nov 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Rebirth" from Hecatonchires
Review:
Interesting. Let's see where u go.
Comments from author:
Working on the next chapter as we speak.
Review By [Hecatonchires] • Date [8 Nov 08] • Not Rated
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