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Review of chapter "Chapt 20. A new normal" from Rune
Review:
I'll give you a ten on completion.

Its a great story, yes Willow is dark, but dark is not evil.

The NID needs to be gutted, preferably by Willow as a vengeance demon. Lots of death and screams.

Kinsey needs to be thrown into hell, after he has had all his secrets revealed on national tv.

Willow/Spike can be fun, Willow/Angel takes skill to write well, Willow/Angelus is near imposible to do.

Willow/Other however is where the real fun is.

Look for the fic "Sire" by Knightmare24 on ffn.

I hope I remembered the authors name right.

Thanks for writing.
Comments from author:
Thank you for taking the time to review!
Appreciate the rating, I'll keep working for that 10, lol.
I'm very sorry for the lack of updates but I've been very busy - school, work (got a job again, yeah!) and then had to have heart surgery on top of it all! 2012 was a busy year for me... I've got the writing bug still but my adviser keeps cornering me about publishing for school so its been a challenge to get away from all that.
Now, that being said, I have a lot to do for this story still and I promise to finish it. Sooner rather than later as well.
Thanks for your notes on Willow, the NID and Kinsey - I appreciated all of them and they made me feel like I'm getting the right tone across in the story from what I had planned out.
Thank you also for the comments related with the other character pairings - I agree with you on all of those points although I must admit being a complete "sucker" for a good Willow/Spike fic.
But like you said, Willow/Other really throws out something very different and that's where my passion lies usually. I am familiar with the fic "Sire" on FFN; it has sadly been awhile since I read it but I did very much enjoy it. I read it a few times I believe and had a couple parts that I'd go back to it was so good... Hopefully I'll get a chance to again soon but first I owe a few chapters here!
Thanks again for your comments and taking time to review. That really gave me a kick in the pants so that perhaps I can get fired up to tell my professors I've got plans to write something else before that next paper for publishing... :)
Review By [Rune] • Date [12 Jan 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapt 20. A new normal" from draconis
Review:
Thanks for another update! The twists keep coming.

I'm very curious to know the identity of the entity that sent the horrific vision to Willow (PTB's, Oma, Hoffy?). Hope we find out at some point in time.

It's a bit hard to believe that Teal'c didn't notice ANY of the Janet/Willow interactions during that meeting.

Isn't the list of addresses just about THE most valuable thing the SGC has? Or, am I thinking about later in the series? Seems they'd have been much more difficult to persuade to share it with Willow.
Review By [draconis] • Date [29 Aug 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapt 20. A new normal" from Zealot
Review:
Interesting. Hope to see more updates soon!
Comments from author:
Thanks for taking the time read and comment.

I'm working hard on getting my updates to be quicker; dang term and research papers keep getting in the way! :(

Hope to do better this fall since my classes are techie stuff now.

Thanks again for reading and posting a comment!
Review By [Zealot] • Date [28 Aug 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapt 20. A new normal" from MarcusSLazarus
Review:
Still a bit ambiguous about the Buffy/Tara elements- a part of me is still expecting that to turn out to be the result of stress on the part of at least one or both of them; I just don't see Buffy as gay-, but things with Willow and the SGC are definitely interesting, Willow bonding with SG-1 even if she still has some doubts about the SGC as a whole in a very effective manner, to say nothing of D'Hoffryn's continued talk of 'the beast' and Anubis as separate entities making it clear that something else is going on...

Nice touch with Willow's speculations that the Goa'uld and the gods she's encountered are different entities- I wonder if the Goa'uld even know that they were actually 'trading on the reputations' of genuine beings or just thought they were exploiting superstitions before they came to believe their own hype?-, and with her and Janet now living together, I look forward to seeing how she interacts with Cassie when they finally meet.

One simple question; is 'the beast' something we've seen before- whether already encountered in the show at this point or something they'd have faced in the future in canon before Willow discoveed Asharah-, or is it a completely original threat (Both would be cool, but I'd just like to know one way or the other)?

Hope you update soon; this story just continues to intrigue...
Comments from author:
Thanks for taking the time to read and offer great comments. It is much appreciated!

Without giving too much away on the Buffy/Tara element I have planned I want to offer that I agree with both of your comments. That said I would never offer out the label of "gay" but always saw Buffy having a strong potential to be 'bi-' in canon and not just because of the obvious issues earlier with Faith. Really for me some people's sexuality can ebb and flow depending who they are with - it was the environment I grew up in that the identification of gay, straight, bi- or whatever kinda didn't apply. She likes girls now too but dates guys she likes also, he likes girls mostly but currently has a boyfriend, etc... So I saw a seriously interesting potential plot point here with Tara/Buffy so I wanted to explore it some. Now I've noted it fits well since Buffy is feeling very needy right now for home support. Tara in my view is a great provider of "love/strength"; she may not be swinging an axe at the bad guys head but she can provide strong support to one who does. And except for her issues with Willow, Tara's great, lol...

Janet standing by SG-1 meant a lot to Willow and she realizes now she needs SG-1 as much as they might need her. I use might because Willow is still full of self-doubt and tries to put on the brave face for everyone since she still feels hopelessly under-informed about what she has gotten herself into... Glad you liked her speculations on the Goa'uld; that part is far from over as Asharah is not ready to accept anything yet.

I wanted to save a scene with Cassie and Willow for a later chapter than this one as I want to really take my time with it. It likely will be broken up into a few parts since there is a lot of potential there. Additionally there is the whole "OMG, my mom is dating you??? Mom, why didn't you tell me???" issue hanging out there. That's got lots of possibilities to hang on, lol.

Your question on the "beast" - more details to come but it is from canon, you have seen it before. I sat and thought about a proper reference for it from a fellow "dark sider" perspective (D'Hoffryn and company) and came up with that. It was better than a few other ideas I had and the "evil annoying thing that should not be named because it is the competition" was just too long to type out each time... :) I hope I don't disappoint you when it is revealed!

Thanks again for reading, reviewing and your great comments. They are always very helpful!
Review By [MarcusSLazarus] • Date [28 Aug 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapt 20. A new normal" from (Current Donor)JanessaRavenwood
Review:
Well, I certainly hope Willow gets her soul back at some point...and then goes on rule the world with Janet at her side as her dark queen. All hail Dark Willow. :-)
Comments from author:
Thanks for reading and the comments!

I would also like to add a +1 since I loved your comment and a nice evil Dark Willow "Muhahahaha" laugh too, lol!

I loved the comment, it really made me "lol". Now, will it come true as you hope.... Hmmm, more to come on that and I will try to make it sooner to find out since my classes right now are depressingly boring and I should have more time to edit and make updates.

Thanks again for taking time to read and review!
Review By [(Current Donor)JanessaRavenwood] • Date [28 Aug 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapt 19. Secrets my gods never told me…" from CageFire
Review:
Hmm, finally finished it. I had to take a break for a while from reading this, as the whole dark willow thing was getting to be a little too much. This story has been really dark so far, well, except for the parts involving the SGC. The rest has been almost depressing to read. I'm hoping that it'll be somewhat less so in the future, as I'm not sure I want to continue reading this if the rest is going to be this dark. I mean you did warn at the beginning that the first part was going to be dark, but well, this first part has been dragged out quite a bit.
Comments from author:
Thank you very much for taking time to read and write a review.

As you stated, I wanted this to be a really dark story and I put out the warning at the beginning. I'm sorry you find it almost depressing to read but considering how season 6 went for BtVS I consider my story no less depressing... But just my view, lol!

I don't believe I can properly carry the story to the next level without stripping away at some of the issues that the characters have. As I've said in other review responses I wanted to explore the guilt, the evil and the motivating factors there at the base before carrying them over to their next level. If I had the free time I would write up a whole add-on to season 6 to explore Willow's deceitful acts that get her in so much trouble with the others later on... She has such potential as a bad seed just as she does as a good egg, lol.

So, will it get darker? Maybe... Will things look up soon? Maybe... But likely, for some. Ah but will there be more hope crushing darkness and defeat? Yes, for some... For others there will be the spoils of victory. But victory at what cost? :)

Thanks for taking the time to read at least and add a review. That is much appreciated...
I'm working hard to get an update out soon, my break between classes hits shortly so I'll be done with papers for a little while at least and be able to concentrate on my stories again.
Review By [CageFire] • Date [31 Jul 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapt 19. Secrets my gods never told me…" from maxthehobbit
Review:
Wow, this is one epic Willow story. I'm enjoying her thoughts and feelings. I haven't seen all the Buffy episodes, but I have seen most of them. I find this very interesting ... so interesting I stayed all night and a good portion of the morning reading this. It's so fascinating I just couldn't stop reading it. Every chapter brought new surprises.

I've often thought that Willow bringing Buffy back from the dead was too simple, too easy and not costly enough. For Willow to give up her soul to bring Buffy back makes sense to me ... a life for a life.

The priestess in her head is also interesting and original. I wonder what she's going to do when they find that SG1 did kill Ra, once they research or whatever to validate what was found in the book.

Makes me think ... she could go all black magic and become a heartless killer, but it's more likely she'll come to her senses and go back to the good side, but will she do it on her own or will the Scooby gang help her, or for that matter, even Angel or Janet.

Looking forward to an update. Obviously you're not going to abandon this story since you've been updating for four years. Outstanding writing, some of the best on any site.
Comments from author:
Thank you kindly for the great review and I'm very happy to hear you enjoyed the story so much so far. I must apologize for the delays in getting updates out, my muse takes a holiday when my night college work gets too heavy after long days at work. But I've got some vacation time coming up soon to finish my summer midterms so after they are done I'll push hard to polish up the next chapter. I promise! :)

I'm glad you are enjoying the story so far - I really wanted to explore not only Willow's dark side possibilities but the costs of bringing Buffy back. Willow and the entire Scooby Gang for that matter have paid a serious price; the wounds are just more obvious in some than in others. And of course Buffy already paid her dues in life yet here she is back in "Sunny-hell" getting punished again... So there is plenty of drama and pain to go around; I want to really open up those wounds and explore the damage inside all of them.

Also glad to hear you like Ashara, I have plenty more surprises to spring with her, lol...

I actually have a good portion of the ending mapped out, it's getting everyone there to where things go to critical mass that is the challenge for me right now. I want improve the story each chapter as we go... Your reviews and comments challenge me to do better and to work harder so thanks for that!
Thanks again for taking the time to comment and review...
Review By [maxthehobbit] • Date [25 Jun 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapt 19. Secrets my gods never told me…" from JonnWolfe
Review:
Really love this story. Got to the boat late, but I read it all in one go. Great concept, and I hope it continues soon.
Comments from author:
Thank you very much for adding a review and I'm glad you're enjoying it. I'm most impressed you read it all in one go, I'm glad you enjoyed it that much!
I'm trying hard to get the next chapter out, just a lot of real world stuff going on right now with work and school for me... Hope for a late June, early July update if my professor cuts me some slack.

Thanks again for reading and reviewing!
Review By [JonnWolfe] • Date [10 Jun 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapt 19. Secrets my gods never told me…" from goldengeisha
Review:
Oh this is absolutely fabulous and reads like a movie. You have the characterization down! Although Spike in my opinion is more complex than portrayed so far.

I love your OC Ashara--I wonder how that relationship will pan out. What side will she ultimately choose? Poor Amy and Andrew and Jonathan. Who took Sam Finn? How will the L.A. gang tie in to this? Oh all the twists and turns. Vamp!Willow/Anubis. Very original.

The ascended must be trying to teach both of them a lesson by combining them this way. This is very well-developed and it became more and more engrossing after the first few chapters. I am glad I came back to this.

I loved that scene with Xander leaving the group because Buffy so folded too easily. She sold her friend out so fast people who have spilled blood for her and helped her so she can have a good time after just asking her to hack for her. Hypocrisy! Xander and Willow have given her a second and third chance at life and this is how she repays it. They do everything but pay her bills. I may like my Spuffy but that girl is weak and spoiled and so is Dawn. Dawn needs to do some juvie time for real. ( I usually like Dawn) I can go on and on about the Summer's hypocrisy but I'm not.

Usually I am not a big fan of Xander and Willlow's behavior in later seasons but in the contexts of this story, Buffy is supremely self-centered and has a severe "Daddy's Princess " complex. Anyhow Willow was low for making more trouble with social services.

As for the rest of the story Willow was justified in protecting herself but went overboard with the scale of her payback. Your characterization of Willow really showcases the ways in which she is emotionally immature and stunted (Her parents are a mess!) and how this impacts her thought processes and her motivations, gols and belief systems. I can go on but that would take a while. The Finns are a nasty couple (I never liked Riley)and I don't trust Graham either. This is how they repay someone that saved lives.

Anyway this is a great story and mirrors some of the problems in today's society.

Looking forward to more. Please!
Comments from author:
Thank you kindly for the long and detailed review, it is most appreciated!
I'm very happy to hear you are enjoying the madness that my brain has created with this story. I've found that as I've gone back over seasons 5, 6 & a bit of 7 in BtVS that all the characters had great & bad behavior moments that could be picked apart more. I've tried to do that a bit in this crossover...

I too was not happy with Xander or Willow's behavior in the later seasons as well as Buffy's. But it made sense in a way that was drawn in the show to me.

Buffy slays, its what she does and I could see her just dropping the rest of life into a convience store bag if she could to make it neat, tidy and simple for her after she was brought back. I've had friends do that after a death in the family or close friend and I can't hate them for it, its a way to help them cope with disasters in their lives. So Buffy might be seen here as self-centered but she needs solutions, fast, in this situation. I put her into a corner I built with Willow's and Dawn's actions and then I gave her an out with the FBI. In this situation I think it makes sense to her - Willow will have to answer for her actions (in Buffy's mind) but to someone else, Dawn is saved and Buffy doesn't have to be the bad guy for a change... Again in her mind and I've seen people do this before to cope with difficult situations. However it can blow up in their face as it ruined her friendship with Xander but that was something that often seemed on the edge to me in the later seasons of the show. I get mad at Buffy sometimes during these seasons but dang, she got boxed into corners so many times that I can't stay mad at her for taking an easy out.

There is a lot of hidden guilt with Buffy, Willow and Tara that I wanted to tap into here. Willow covers it up then it explodes in major depression moments; Buffy and Tara are just opening up to each other about theirs.

Willow here is immature, angry, hurt, often emotionally lost and in critical need of understanding, comfort and snuggles. As I need her to be for this crossover as well as a bit of how I saw her in the later seasons of the show. I always wondered what could have happened during the weeks when Buffy was gone, the transition from season 5 to 6. So I wanted to push that aspect with Willow here. What happens when a brilliant but emotionally damaged and immature girl is put in charge of this group and not allows herself to grieve? I've always been angry that Willow did certain things in season 6 to Tara but then Tara did the totally wrong thing by walking out on her. Willow needed help and support, not friends and loved ones walking out on her. Tara needed Willow to grieve and trust that she would support her no matter what but our red head took the easy way out fixing arguments with magic. So add self-loathing and notch up the anger and the red head makes a perfect target for exploitation in my mind. So part of Willow hates herself for her past and recent actions but her mental "lapse" has been exploited by Ashara to take her down the path to further power and trouble. So the bad parts of these two feed off each other in every tense situation. I like to think of this as two pissed off young girls on a rampage after a bad breakup or emotional breakdown. The trouble I've seen happen with situations like that has been epic, lol. Course my two girls here are armed to the teeth and certainly have a long list of issues that should have them both in therapy for the rest of their unnatural lives but no big deal, lol.

I saw Janet as a way to tap back into the "good" Willow, as a lifeline the girl needs to bring her back from the edge. Will it work? We'll see, but I seriously wanted Janet to live in SG-1 so it was perfect for me to bring them together...

I'm glad you like my take on the Finns here - wanted to put them in an evil light just for fun!

Thanks for all your comments and support here. I love long and short reviews, I just love reviews and comments period! So thanks for taking that time here...

I've had some writer's block issues and lots of jobs going lately so the next two chapters are a bit messy but coming together. There will be more chapters coming, I promise!
Thanks again...
Review By [goldengeisha] • Date [30 May 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapt 19. Secrets my gods never told me…" from RocksandGlass
Review:
Lots and lots going on here. Still really enjoying the story, and you're writing style is really enhancing that. Good writing or a good plot idea can make up for a lot of defects in the other, but the combo always makes for a great read. looking forward to more.
Comments from author:
Thanks so much for the review and I'm very happy to hear you are enjoying it. I'm learning a lot on writing styles so I'm trying to improve each chapter; very glad to hear that the effort is working. There is certainly more drama, destruction and bad behavior on the way... I feel way bad about my previous slow updates but I just have so much research work to run through on my desk, lol. Just need to get through the next few weeks of research paper due dates and I'll be back to writing each night on a regular basis.

Thanks again for taking time to read and review!
Review By [RocksandGlass] • Date [6 Mar 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapt 19. Secrets my gods never told me…" from Zealot
Review:
Nice chapter, hope to see more updates soon!
Comments from author:
Thanks for the comment and glad you liked this chapter. I'm trying to get better on updates, might still be a few weeks for the next one however as I've got a couple research papers due this month... Yuck!!!

Thanks again for reading and leaving a review...
Review By [Zealot] • Date [5 Mar 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapt 19. Secrets my gods never told me…" from MarcusSLazarus
Review:
Well, on the one hand, at least Asharah seems to be 'coping' with the revelation about Ra's true nature- she's not trying to use Willow to immediately go off and kill Jack and Daniel for blowing up her god, as an example-, but that 'vision' of the future certainly isn't exactly encouraging, no matter where it came from or what it really means...
Comments from author:
Thanks for the comments!

I'd like to call Asharah's immediate reaction as one of total disbelief and doubt; that immediate thought set you have right after your significant other just told you they bought that beach front property in Death Valley...

Willow's immediate actions and reply were really set as a distraction to avert a blow out just like you mentioned. Course Willow had also hoped she would have time to get answers together on a lot of things before meeting with the SGC; so much for that plan, lol... There will be plenty of future chances for Asharah to bellow out "Off with their head's!" at Jack and Daniel, trust me! ;)

Glad Willow's dream/vision of the future left a bleak view out there for you. Its certainly the eerie feel I'm trying for as she stumbles forward with her decisions; Willow will have to make some drastic future choices that will impact many people in the coming chapters...

Thanks again for reading and leaving comments, it is much appreciated!
Review By [MarcusSLazarus] • Date [4 Mar 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 18. Damaged goods..." from RocksandGlass
Review:
This is really good. I've been meaning to read it for ages, then it popped up under updated and I'm really really glad I did. You've done a brilliant job with Willow, from dark breakdown, to deceptively, mostly normal and then bang, reminder that this is really neither willow nor a normal power level.
Basically, I'm pretty sure you're writing and characterization has just gotten stronger as you go on.
Looking forward to more.
Comments from author:
Thanks so much for taking the time to read and review my story.

I appreciate your kind words on my efforts and I'm trying very hard to improve my work on all the characters but I'll admit to being big on giving my best efforts to Willow...

Working hard on new chapters and I promise the next update will not take anywhere as long as the last two.

Thanks again for the great review!
Review By [RocksandGlass] • Date [17 Dec 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 18. Damaged goods..." from MarcusSLazarus
Review:
Hoo boy...

Not only have BOTH Willows made disturbing deals with 'higher powers' (Anubis is part-Ascended; he might not be on a higher plane, but he's getting there) to get additional power, but add in the fact that Kinsey's out for Willow for his own agenda, and I DEFINITELY stand by my past assessment that Willow can only really depend on SG-1 now; things with the Scoobies are just coming apart where she's concerned...

On that topic, nice touch with your take on Spike; I might have liked the guy on "Angel" when he had to develop his own role, but right now he's just the screwed-up 'neutered' vampire getting his metaphorical jollies the only way he can- you're definitely exploring the distinction between his later soulled self and this one-, and if that doesn't come back to haunt everyone later I'll be very surprised.

Oh, and interesting touch with the Tara-as-demon reference, on that topic; her intentions might have just been based on fear, but the lack of faith she had in the others DOES raise a few question-marks...

Sorry to hear about your other problems, BTW; hope things are better now.
Comments from author:
Thanks so much for reading and reviewing. I hope it was an enjoyable chapter for you and others.

Yes, the two Willows have both got themselves mixed up with higher powers and power players. And the plot pot will be stirred up a few more times when it comes to these players in the next few chapters as I have it planned out now, glad you are enjoying things as they have gone along. Kinsey and the Scoobies will still be throwing things into the mix as well...

Thanks for the comment on Spike in this chapter. Honestly, I do like the character in both BtVS and Angel but as you stated in this season he is out for his own goals and 'jollies'. He will use his many talents to get what he wants; he is still an un-souled vampire after all...

The Tara-as-demon reference was very much a manipulation of events by Asharah with an emotionally damaged Willow. Tara is very much human in my view here and is very much a victim of circumstances that she had no control over. Here I see her only fault as not seeing how damaged Willow is; emotional and sanity-wise. But everyone makes mistakes, right? Just here my view is to see how a series of those mistakes will roll out of everyones' control and a lot of people will get hurt by them.
Asharah in certain ways is like Spike, she will use whatever talents she has or circumstances that occur to her advantage. And to maintain control of her status with Willow...

Thanks for sticking with the story and for the vote of support! Vision issues just making it difficult to spend time on the old PC and crank out updates... Everything else is a time management issue and writer's block; I'll do better once I add about 2 more hours to my 27 hour day...
Review By [MarcusSLazarus] • Date [12 Dec 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 17. The devil you think you know" from MarcusSLazarus
Review:
Hoo boy...

You may not have specifically stated who the 'beast' is that D'Hoffryn is manipulating Willow and Asharah to go after, but none of the obvious candidates present an encouraging picture for what's coming up, even without D'Hoffryn's OTHER goals to take into account.

Add in the fact that Asharah's probably coming ever closer to learning the truth about her 'god', and I have a feeling that it's going to take a lot more than just SG-1 and Janet's influence (Since the Scoobies have no real idea what Willow's doing at this point they can't have any impact on her actions themselves) to calm Willow and her 'partner' down when things get ugly...

Keep up the great work!
Comments from author:
Thanks for the great review and for sticking with me on this...
Working hard to keep it interesting without getting too crazy. Hoping to get some free time to work on the next chapters with the upcoming July 4th holiday break.

Thanks again for your interest and support!
Review By [MarcusSLazarus] • Date [6 Jun 11] • Not Rated
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