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Review of chapter "The End Of One Life" from bradsan
Review:
why don't you update. you starts and then stops. Please try to update, please.

Your beginning is really good.
Review By [bradsan] • Date [5 Jan 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The End Of One Life" from Vickzie
Review:
Good start
Review By [Vickzie] • Date [24 Oct 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The End Of One Life" from bradsan
Review:
OK now I am curious. Why donĀ“t you update. This is a good start.
Review By [bradsan] • Date [30 May 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The End Of One Life" from darkplayer
Review:
Interesting start. It has potential. Please update soon.
Review By [darkplayer] • Date [19 Mar 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The End Of One Life" from serenityselena
Review:
oh my .... how unfortunate for our heroes ...
hope you`ll continue the story ^__^
Review By [serenityselena] • Date [19 Mar 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The End Of One Life" from Gideon
Review:
Now that is a sad start :( I wonder if they could get someone to take all three of them. They would probably want to stay together if they could but taking on three kids at once is a big ask.
Review By [Gideon] • Date [11 Oct 10] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The End Of One Life" from (Past Donor)Dianasis
Review:
ok, brownie points for the abrupt kick-off into AU with definite need for new parental figures.

Other than that . . . it's a little choppy. Try to smooth it out a bit, don't be afraid to add more narrative or descriptive details.

Keep it up.
Review By [(Past Donor)Dianasis] • Date [24 Jul 09] • Rating [4 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The End Of One Life" from MiraniEmrysAnduin
Review:
OMG! This is a great idea!!!!! I LOVE Stargate/Buffy fics! THe idea of Buffy being Jack's kid has been used before but this is completely unique! When'll you update again? I REALLY wanna know what's gunna happen next and I can't know taht untill you update as I'm not a mind reader so PLEASE update soon!!!!!!!!! Pretty plwase with sugar, ice-cream, chocolate, strawberries and sprinkles on top!!!!!!!!! I'll even add twinkies if it helps!!!!! PLEASE UPDATE!!!!!
Review By [MiraniEmrysAnduin] • Date [10 Jun 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The End Of One Life" from spring
Review:
This is a very very good way to start this so far wonderful fic. I am extremely eager for more hopefully soon?
Review By [spring] • Date [23 Feb 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The End Of One Life" from herbsandlemons
Review:
Though a little short it was very good, no bad grammar or spelling. Please are you going to update I want to see what you do with this challenge.
Review By [herbsandlemons] • Date [21 Feb 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The End Of One Life" from Nomma
Review:
Good so far. Hope to see more.
Review By [Nomma] • Date [7 Feb 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The End Of One Life" from (Past Donor)Fritolays
Review:
Good start to the story. Can't wait to see where you go with this and what happens next :)
Review By [(Past Donor)Fritolays] • Date [6 Jan 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The End Of One Life" from cflat
Review:
Good start. It would be nice to see more.
Review By [cflat] • Date [2 Jan 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The End Of One Life" from AllenPitt
Review:
Bullets? So it wasn't vampires? An actual real gang on PCP? Hm... I have the feeling Giles won't make it to their house; even if they have next of kin in Denver (SGC?) he'd act & the council would support him, to keep the slayer in Sunnydale. As is, if he's gone, then they might end up there before the council can react.
* Though eventually the council would find her and at least try to take her away, I think....
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [22 Dec 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The End Of One Life" from Trace
Review:
Good start so far.

Some of the punctuation seems to be wonky, like TTH formatting isn't reading it right & is turning it into little boxes, but other than that, pretty spiffy.

TTH formatting might also be what's scrunching your paragraphs together; there should be separate paragraphs when action/speech changes from one character to another.

If that's not TTH's fault, you might want to watch that. Having it separated would make the story flow easier and make it simpler to read without back-tracking to figure out who said/did what.

All in all, good job. I hope you continue it.
Review By [Trace] • Date [17 Dec 08] • Rating [6 out of 10]
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