Review of chapter "'Her new toy comes with knives AND a temper'" from InsanitySorrow
Bitchy Buffy are actually fun to read. Its true that how Buffy treat some of them are not really necessary and make me feel sorry for them ( probably because of my almost Faith- personality that liking anything that interest or amused me) but again the word Bitch covered a lot of ground including unnecessary thing. Love Buffy/Faith pairing and I found that it going to be hilarious if all the 'mean' thing Buffy do end leaning to favor her instead. Maybe not...well in Joe fic maybe.
Review By [InsanitySorrow
] • Date [10 Oct 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "'Her new toy comes with knives AND a temper'" from Whimsicality
Loving it so far, very entertaining, can't wait to read the next chapter.
Review By [Whimsicality
] • Date [13 Jun 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "'Her new toy comes with knives AND a temper'" from ForSpite
Hm... Missed the existence of this chapter for a bit, somehow.
Let's see. Buffy enjoying Faith and Force Field's fight seemed in character... mildly evil. Especially once she started 'helping', which was amusing. Affably evil is a character persona that can easily enlist fans regardless of what the character is actually doing. I really like Mayor Wilkins after all.
That said, it's a good thing she got Faith to back off once the poor girl was in tears. There's fine lines to be walked here and you're mostly pulling it off.
Still, Buffy's moment of worry about Faith during the fight reveals the real problem at this school. These kids have no restraint.
They have all these neat abilities and they want to show them off (as witnessed repeatedly, from Faith to Xander) because most of them are new at this and haven't really seen the full implications. The twins are a special case, since their mindset is alien for different reasons. Buffy's cleverer than the others (for example, she knows that if Faith tried to rob banks, she'd probably just get shot sooner or later) but she's still suffering from the same problems (I'll note that she very likely put Peeper in traction since she doesn't know he's got any superhuman durability) and so she doesn't think about the idea things might take a bad turn until she sees Faith almost get injured.
Her comparison to a schoolyard brawl between hotheaded jocks is a good one, things can go wrong there too, it's just far easier now that most of the 'jocks' are effectively constantly armed.
Ideally a school like this is here to knock enough sense into the kids to cut down on exactly this kind of thing. Except... I don't know that this one will. Or rather, if they do it will only be to make more successful tools who don't fly off the handle all the time.
If they are being observed, Buffy's attitude toward violence, manipulations, and ability to stop when she might be upsetting the administration will probably make her a favorite of the people running the place. (Hellfire Club? Secret Government agency? One of those two probably).
Anyway, to get back to the actual chapter, it works but hopefully Faith's trying extra hard because they just met, rather than going to be attacking everyone who makes an unfortunate comment. Or at least not attacking them all with potentially lethal force.
Also: Nice establishment of both Buffy's potential reciprocation of Faith's feelings and hesitance. But I notice that most of the latter is phrased as if temporary. She doesn't need that kind of extra burden when she's establishing herself and thoughts like that imply that she will one day be strong enough to deal with the consequences of being in that relationship.
EDIT: By the way, when I say 'what's wrong with this school' I don't necessarily mean morally. Like I said, you've mostly been successful there. I mean efficiency. At some point, the people running things need to stop everything devolving into superpowers fights if they want to get anything done. At all. The problem is not just time wasted on the fights themselves, but clean up and healing the participants. And what if someone you had plans for accidentally dies?
Review By [ForSpite
] • Date [30 Apr 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "'Her new toy comes with knives AND a temper'" from Gideon
Wow, I think I have to agree with Buffy - she enjoyed that way too much! If she didn't obviously care about Faith I would have to label her a psychopath. It is almost surprising that she saved anyone at her old school and didn't just let them all die painfully because it would be more fun.
I hope Buffy eventually shows some compassion for someone who can't immediately repay her.
Review By [Gideon
] • Date [17 Apr 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "'Her new toy comes with knives AND a temper'" from Revello
One of the first reviews (possibly The First) I read had a very harsh critique concerning Faith's character-- to which I just had to pop in and say my piece.
I think I understand where you're going with Faith here. Wild/Abused animal. You kick it and you beat it enough, you teach it that there is only violence. It's fun, it's sex, it's rage-- the anger and pain becomes their default behaviour. Beneath that though is still the girl. The soft gooey and all to human center that when it feels safe or wants something enough to brave what the past has always taught them will bring pain, comes out.
To me, that is far harder to write than some middle of the road or one extreme or the other character. In my opinion you've master walking that particular razors edge.
Review By [Revello
] • Date [16 Apr 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "'Her new toy comes with knives AND a temper'" from Lupo
Nice to see you back! I like the way this is developing.....
Any chance you'll get back to "Happy Bedtime Story"?
Review By [Lupo
] • Date [16 Apr 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "'Three Mean Girls'" from Meneldur
A very interesting take and story. Still, I'm not sure how much I like it. Xander's hormones are a bit excessive, true, but eviscerating him for that every time? I'm sure all the boys stare at Buffy's butt for at least part of the time, just like they stare at Faith's cleavage. It's no justification for eviscerating someone - which even if it doesn't kill them, must be painful and uncomfortable. Yes, it's true that this is Faith doing this, but you'd think she'd be moderated - if not by Buffy (which is another whole issue) then by the school. Evisceration is at least as bad as punching someone (and probably much worse, even with Xander's healing) and all the teachers can say is "Faith, please try not to do this every time?" To me, this seems completely ridiculous.
Yeah, I think that's the Xander issue. Faith is just weird. Yes, we know she's had a hard life, blah blah blah, she may even have been born with psychosis for all I care. It's not a reason for constantly bullying people by causing them great pain. It's a justification, an excuse. I'd be able to be somewhat sympathetic to Faith if not for that (and her complete blood-lust with no show of the slightest remorse). I don't object to psychotic/violent characters (I worship Azula, for example), but I think they should have some redeeming qualities and a real explanation for what they do - and extreme jealousy/possessiveness is simply not good enough.
Buffy... well, we knew she was kind of bitch before Sunnydale, and like I said, I have no objection to that. But just as I can't accept Faith's actions, I can't accept Buffy letting Faith do so and only barely restraining her, especially when it's done on Buffy's behalf. I'm not saying Buffy should accept sexual harassment and objectification, but she allows other guys to do so, and centering on Xander is not right.
Willow... that was really disturbing. Mind rape often bothers me more than actual rape, and in that chapter, both things happened/nearly happened. What's even more disturbing is that it shows how far Willow is going to go when her friends are hurt. True, she really wasn't thinking things through, especially not the ramifications and consequences of her action, but that makes it even worse. If Willow was willing to be that coldly calculating despite the general whimsicality of her plan, what will she do if Xander/Jesse get more seriously hurt, or she herself is the target? Darth Willow is often considered the strongest villain of all seasons (discounting the First), and her varied mutant ability (magic) is the one that can do the most damage - as we've seen, Faith had no defense against it, and if it had worked properly, Buffy would have been mind-raped and physically raped (even if it was consensual at the time, it's basically a date-rape drug). Admittedly, Willow's been really warned off by how it went wrong, but what if it hadn't? Or what if it simply hadn't worked, and she wasn't almost raped by Faith? How much will it take for her to be pushed to this again, now knowing the danger and consequences? Willow has the potential to be the most detrimental to Buffy and Faith. She knows of Faith's interest in Buffy, and her powers pose the greatest threat as well. Even if she decides not to do evil (as it seems she will), she may easily figure out a defensive spell that will shock Faith every time she tries to attack Xander. Willow was brilliant at magic when doing it alone with barely any guidance - how much more now, when she's actually learning it?
I think that's all I've got for now. Like Is aid, I like the premise, but I have a big problem with the characters, most notably Buffy and Faith, but Xander and Willow as well. It may be yet too early to tell, but it bothers me a lot. Last comment - I loved Willow's thoughts on Tessa's approach to magic. I think Willow's certainly right, and after what happened with the spell, her belief in Wicca and that what she's doing is magic has probably rocketed.
Hoping for answers, Meneldur.
Review By [Meneldur
] • Date [16 Apr 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "'It's all about Manners... and also Violence'" from TwilightDragon
It's interesting how it's essentially taken you years to write out Buffy's first day at school. Obviously our resident blonde superhero/villain/just-plain-adorable-bitch is simply too awesome to describe in just two or three chapters. :P
But don't mind me and my sardonic musings, your story is brilliant. Almost as brilliant as Buffy herself, I daresay. (Yes, I have a rather (un)healthy obsession with Buffy. That's okay, I'm sure Attention-Whore!Buffy surely doesn't mind, even if Looking-is-Okay-Pervy-Looking-is-Not!Buffy does. :D) In any case, I'm one of those readers who were around several years ago, though I hadn't registered at the time and thus couldn't review it. Nevertheless, I'm here now, and I'll say this: no matter what I said earlier, take your time with your writing. I, personally, prefer quality over quantity, and I'm sure many of your other readers would agree. If it takes you forever to finish, then forever it shall be- your writing, while not the best quality I've ever come across, comes very close, and your style is one of my favorite kinds- humorous and serious in turns, enough detail to tantalize but not so much it gets boring, and my favorite of all, original and creative. Who else has written Buffy going to an X-Men-esque mutant school as an actual mutant? (Well, okay, there are other authors who have written that, but they either made her way too overpowered or just wrote her wrong.) While I remember noticing a few grammar/spelling mistakes when I last read your story, which was a long time ago (months at the very least), I can't seem to find them now, so who cares? :P
Eagerly awaiting the next chapter of this and many of your other stories (but not holding my breath ;D).
P.S. Because I'm lazy and don't quite feel like fully reviewing the other story just yet, I'd just like to add a little tidbit for your 'Faerie Dust' story- a marvelous creation, I love the flow, and the little narrative breaks (not sure what to call them? But I'm sure you know what I'm talking about) would make me swoon, if I were inclined to do such things. :D Honestly, if I were to have a choice (and I don't, but I'm just putting it out there) I'd rather you update 'Faerie Dust' than 'Heroes and Villains', as you left that story on such a cliffhanger that I'm more eager to see what happens next in that one than this one- not only that, but it might just be the best story in your entire arsenal. Were it not so squicky to some people, I suspect it would've won awards merely for the unique narration, excellent characterization, and lovely plot line. Sometimes I don't understand why people are like that about these things- cold-blooded murder, for example, is so much more ghastly and terrible, and yet we see that all the time in literature. Incest (the voluntary kind, at least) is always more something in the background, implied, if mentioned at all, like for some reason it's more forbidden to sleep with your sister than it is to slip into her bedroom and slit her throat as she sleeps.
Ah, but I digress, and I'm getting too serious about it on top of it. To put it all in a nutshell: Your stories are wonderful. Keep it up, but don't work too hard- authors need time off too, no matter what some inconsiderate people might say. Let's see them try to write, eh? See how it works out for them. >:)
Comments from author:
Sorry it took so long to get back to you; I was struck down by evil spirits (or a horrific back injury) and was completely out of commission for two weeks, there.
Years to write a span of a day? Standard operating procedure for me, unfortunately. Of course, going two years between chapters doesn't help any either. Trying very hard to shake that habit (next chapter being Beta'd at this moment). I DO tend to focus a little too closely on every small detail, though, which is another habit I need to break, at least occasionally.
::Yes, I have a rather (un)healthy obsession with Buffy::
Well, Conceited!Buffy would just look at you and say 'How could you NOT be obsessed?'
::your writing, while not the best quality I've ever come across, comes very close::
Ack! I feel vaguely insulted and at the same time somewhat flattered--an interesting sensation :-P
::your style is one of my favorite kinds- humorous and serious in turns, enough detail to tantalize but not so much it gets boring, and my favorite of all, original and creative::
Ah, okay then, so it's mostly a positive thing; dizziness fading, I feel better now, I'm good.
::While I remember noticing a few grammar/spelling mistakes when I last read your story, which was a long time ago (months at the very least), I can't seem to find them now, so who cares?::
Those accursed mistakes are the bane of my existence. Seriously, I proofread, and spellcheck, and proofread and edit, and they still slip through. I usually end up catching them even as I'm doing the html to post them. Sometimes I'll see one when I'm rereading a story on the site, and It will bug me enough to go back in and edit it.
::Eagerly awaiting the next chapter of this and many of your other stories (but not holding my breath ;D)::
Probably a good idea, but I really am trying to update in a fairly timely manner. We'll see how that goes.
I love that story too, and I will get to it fairly soon.
I agree that the 'squick' of Buffy/Dawn probably hurts it in some ways, and I also agree that it's kind of sad that such a thing, with an unconventional but very real and beautiful love is somehow less tolerable than stories dealing with savage murder and random brutality. That's just the way things are, unfortunately. And I've been pleased, gratified, and somewhat surprised, actually, by the total lack of hate mail on this story. As far as I can recall, every single comment I've gotten, both here and on FF.net has been positive, often very much so.
As an author, I can't ask for much more than for people who actually read the story to love the story.
(well, actually I guess I could ask for people to Recommend and Review the stories they love? On the actual story page? :-P )
Thank you for the interesting review!
Review By [TwilightDragon
] • Date [9 Apr 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "'It's all about Manners... and also Violence'" from ForSpite
Wow, it's an unexpected pleasure to see more of this.
And I see you've learned your lesson about using even more despicable people to make the main character look better.
Weirdly, while Buffy has met plenty of mutants that aren't jerks so far, it seems like all of the male ones are (Xander, Tank, Peeper). That's almost certainly accidental but you might want to at least have a background character say a couple lines just to end that trend.
Peeper had a unique design. Detachable eyes is actually a kind of interesting power and he has some sort of mental ability to back it up, so he's not completely useless in combat... against people with poor psychic defenses anyway.
This really was a fun chapter. Hyper-violence is nearly always fun and I'd say learning that was the start of her trip to the dark side but as an amoral cheerleader she was already on that road. Instead, I'll just say it's something to bond with Faith over. Buffy acknowledging the power trip she's on with a giggle and a skip was pretty good, though Merrie's reaction was probably the funniest part.
Actually, her growing love of semi-justified violence is character development, really, given her relatively shallow pre-story self. Who knows, maybe this school will even help her become slightly less manipulative (or less petty about her manipulations)? ... Or maybe not. Either outcome is fine, really, as long as she doesn't end up doing anything too unsympathetic and I'm not particularly looking for her to turn into a hero or even a very nice person.
Comments from author:
Sorry, I would have gotten to this sooner, but I was abruptly bedridden for about two weeks there (which kind of sucked).
::Weirdly, while Buffy has met plenty of mutants that aren't jerks so far, it seems like all of the male ones are::
You're absolutely right. I HAD noticed this, yep. Definitely will be dealt with, in the chapter after next.
As for despicable people making Bitchy!Buffy look better by comparison... I guess so? I actually kind of hope she's not so awful that it takes a truly horrible person to contrast with her, but then I'm smitten by her just like Faith, so I'm biased.
Being a hero (excuse me, a 'hero') is probably too much to ask of Buffy, here, but you never know. I guess it depends on who she goes up against.
Thank you for commenting! Nice to hear from you again.
Review By [ForSpite
] • Date [5 Apr 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "'It's all about Manners... and also Violence'" from rpgwarrior
I knew if I just kept the faith, you would eventually update this story again! I'm so glad to see you back to writing.
After rereading this I think Buffy might mellow out a bit if the people around her would stop pissing her off for more than a five minute stretch. Practically everyone she has come across aside from Faith has either done something stupid or weirded her out to varying degrees. Kudos for consistently creating interesting mutants so far, I can't wait to see what you do with the ones that Buffy actually ends up recruiting.
I like how Faith's idea of romance is offering to hurt things for Buffy. I'm sure Xander will continue to give Faith plenty of opportunities to woo Buffy.
When you consider what Buffy just said about manners, the line "I'm sure somebody down this way will have an opening, especially if we ask them politely." must have sounded incredibly threatening when announced to the hallway.
Also, I saw what you did there with Marcie. I got a kick out of the fact that her roommate caught her doing something. Hopefully the poor girl will end up with more control this time around.
I think the line about how Buffy is still the same girl as she was three months ago really sums up this story. So far it doesn't seem like anything has pushed her so far out of her comfort zone that she has to change the way she acts. Unless the fate of the world lands on her shoulders again, she doesn't really HAVE to become her normal selfless hero either. Even if the fate of the world DID end up resting on her shoulders, I still wouldn't expect her to end up more like a normal Buffy at this point. The support structure for that seems doesn't seem like it will be showing up.
Finally, just a few random thoughts I had when I reread this story. I really like that in the first chapter Joyce is clearly trying, but isn't the perfect mom that so many stories end up trying to portray her as. I'm also wondering if Buffy's ability to learn weapons incredibly fast will lead to the school arming her to the teeth and having her test it with every weapon type they can think of. Finally, the twins seemed to really piss Kimura off when they caused property damage, so I wonder if she is gonna show up at Buffy's door any time soon over the steel door getting knocked off its hinges.
Also, I am still available for pre-reading, assuming you still need it.
Comments from author:
I'm happy to see another long-time reader/all-around supportive person checking in!
::I knew if I just kept the faith, you would eventually update this story again! I'm so glad to see you back to writing::
Yep, I'll always get back to writing... eventually. It's just that the timescale is ridiculous, sometimes.
::Practically everyone she has come across aside from Faith has either done something stupid or weirded her out to varying degrees. Kudos for consistently creating interesting mutants so far, I can't wait to see what you do with the ones that Buffy actually ends up recruiting::
I'm actually trying not to make every single mutant an asshole or total freakshow... but on the other hand Buffy is having a very strange day, and she's feeling cranky, so right now the threshold for annoying her/freaking her out is pretty low. Still, she's slowly climbing the tolerance curve, I think, and will be adjusting a bit.
The mutants that Buffy will end up liking and/or recruiting... believe me, I'm giving that a lot of thought. Some of them are original characters, some of them are among my favorites from the Marvel 'verse (though perhaps tweaked slightly).
::I like how Faith's idea of romance is offering to hurt things for Buffy. I'm sure Xander will continue to give Faith plenty of opportunities to woo Buffy::
Well, to be fair, Faith likes to hurt things in general, but it's also true that Faith, like a lot of us, love to play the part of the strong protector. You don't often go wrong when you trounce the thuggish troll who's just insulted your girl's honor... or peeked up her skirt.
And Xander isn't the only one who'll be insulting Buffy's honor, or just plain insulting her. One of the great side-effects of having a Bitchy Buffy is that she's going to have lots and lots of ememies that need smacking around.
:: "I'm sure somebody down this way will have an opening, especially if we ask them politely." must have sounded incredibly threatening when announced to the hallway::
(No, seriously, I lol'd ^_^)
This is very true. Darn, now I wish I'd had some of the bystanders register that.
::Also, I saw what you did there with Marcie::
::I think the line about how Buffy is still the same girl as she was three months ago really sums up this story (....) Even if the fate of the world DID end up resting on her shoulders, I still wouldn't expect her to end up more like a normal Buffy at this point::
I agree... mostly. I mean, yes, she's still at full-strength selfish/shallow/vain pre-Sunnydale levels, absolutely. But I don't know if 'classic Buffy' or 'Hero Buffy' was entirely a result of a support structure, so much as some really intense pressure that was applied to her. She's sixteen, her friends die, she's confronted with this authority figure (well, two of them, Merrick and then Giles) who tells her she's trapped in a Destiny she never asked for, and never agreed to, she's put in situations where she MUST submit to that destiny or yet more people will die, the first Watcher dies in a way that's plausibly her fault, adding that guilt to the mix, her new set of friends not only jump right in to reinforce all of this by going along with Giles but set themselves up as serial victims that constantly force her to act the hero in order to keep them alive (lest the guilt over 'letting them die' be multiplied a hundred times over), her new boyfriend also lives to 'fight the good fight', thus ensuring that darn near every aspect of her entire life (other than Joyce) is wrapped up in the Doomed Hero thing....
My god, people trapped in cults have a better chance of resisting their indoctrination that this girl had!
That really is a huge part of this story for me. Not just the chance to write a bitchier Buffy, but the chance to write a Buffy who is free to be whatever she wants to be. And yes, the girl she chooses to be isn't the nicest one imaginable, but damn it, it's HER choice to make, and if anyone around her doesn't like it, they can... get thoroughly trashed by a vengeful Faith. Or something.
::(Your closing, random thoughts)::
I was never much impressed with Joyce, actually. On ANY level, parenting skills included. I am, however, going to try and give her a fair shake in this story... if only to provide some balance to Mean Buffy.
Buffy's weapons Talent: Absolutely. I love this series to death, obviously, but WOW did it always annoy me that a Slayer, any Slayer, would simply walk into a situation where she knew there would be a battle, with either nothing at all or just a little sliver of wood? Ugh! All I can figure is that Joss was bending over backwards to avoid comparisons to Xena? Otherwise she absolutely should have had a favorite sword, instead of 'mr. Pointy'. She should have had wood-inlaid knives, a protective collar made of fine-mesh chainmaille, or even a very fine shirt to wear under her clothes, similar to shark maille. Not only would that have made a huge amount of sense, but that crap can be made to look fantastic! (I know this because I make chainmaille). Think of the awesome legacy weapons and armor Giles could have presented to her, or that she could have gone 'questing' for.... Why oh why was it only the bad guys who kept stumbling over cool and useful magical objects and weapons?
Faith was the only one who ever had a signature weapon, and it was absolutely badass.
So, in case that didn't come through, yes, absolutely, Buffy will interact with weapons in this one. Because weapons WORK.
Buffy vs. the Property Damage: That... is a very good point. Okay, consider that noted!
::Also, I am still available for pre-reading, assuming you still need it::
Dude, I was hoping you'd say that.
Okay, look for a new chapter of this in your mailbox within a few days.
And, btw, thanks for the in-depth comments on what was really just a filler chapter. The next one will be a lot more substantial in terms of plot and emotion (and probably word-count).
Review By [rpgwarrior
] • Date [26 Mar 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "'It's all about Manners... and also Violence'" from Gideon
And you are back! Great chapter, it is like you never left - Buffy is still the completely self centred girl that occasionally dishes out well justified violence (and occasional unjustified violence) I can't wait to see how she will rule the school with her faithful sidekick Faith.
I kinda hope she will learn a little better eventually though, maybe once she figures out what is going on with the school? I hope to see many more chapters from you - I know you can do it! (and maybe we will see mini-faith again sometime?)
Review By [Gideon
] • Date [22 Mar 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "'It's all about Manners... and also Violence'" from laoshi
Okay I need to take a moment to spaz out.
OMG YOU'RE BACK!!!! YOU UPDATED HEROES AND VILLAINS!!!! WOO-HOO!!! (DOES HAPPY DANCE)
Ok moment over maturity regained.
I'm gonna skip right over the you've been gone thing and just focus on the new content. Peeper is a fascinatingly perverse creation. One of the things I enjoy about this story is your continued inventiveness in creating mutants. It's a great way to play off the part of Buffy's personality that is too focused on appearances.
A brief note on Buffy's character. It seems to me that your Buffy has remained consistent since you introduced this version of her character at the beginning of the story. She's the Cordeliaesque cheerleader from the movie combined with the we're slayers we can do anything we want moment she and Faith had before it all ended in tears with the murder of the deputy mayor. The self sacrificing hero who saves the world still exists as potential inside this Buffy but without the sacred calling people will die if I don't help them she's had no reason to emerge.
We should give all of these characters the benefit of the doubt they don't give each other. I'm sure peepers has had more than one I'm a freak don't look a me moment and while his behaviour is unacceptable by adult standards most teenage boys would look up a girls skirt if they thought they could get away with it.
I'm still hopeful over the general direction of the story. The only other fic in this series basically seems to suggest that Buffy and Faith belong together no matter what and without the history between them they have a real chance of making their relationship work. I hope that Buffy realizes that we're all heroes and villains. Hopefully the events of the story will make her grow up a little, give her the impetus to develop into a hero, and that her relationship with Faith does what love should do: make both of them stronger better people. But Faith can make all the possessive growly comments she wants.
I agree with you the artwork is amazing please convey my appreciation to the artist.
Great to have you back mate.
Comments from author:
::OMG YOU'RE BACK!!!! YOU UPDATED HEROES AND VILLAINS!!!! WOO-HOO!!! (DOES HAPPY DANCE)::
Hey there, nice to see you too.
::(the various creepy mutants are) a great way to play off the part of Buffy's personality that is too focused on appearances::
Well, this IS her in full-on Spordelia mode, after all. Actually, even selfless and heroic Buffy was very quick to judge on appearances, though she worked at giving people (and 'things') the benefit of the doubt in later seasons of the show. Maybe she'll become more open-mnded after some exposure to some of the more unfortunate students, provided she finds some who have better personalities.
::The self sacrificing hero who saves the world still exists as potential inside this Buffy but without the sacred calling people will die if I don't help them she's had no reason to emerge::
I agree. There are good aspects to this girl, the strengths are there. Given some time we'll see some of them... though without the world-save-age, they're probably just going to temper the bitchiness, instead of displacing it. Which I'm fine with, 'cause Bitchy Buffy is pretty nifty.
::(Peeper isn't THAT far removed from your typical Teenage Boy)::
Hey, it's a fact that a lot of people are assholes; an unfortunate number of them, actually. Granted, for someone like Peters (Peeper) it's probably at least partially a defense mechanism, like Xander's self-depreciating humor, but at the end of the day he's still a creep, and certain actions have consequences.::
::(Faith and Buffy will hopefully Learn and Change and Share and Grow)::
Mmmm, not sure. Wait, I'm sure, but in a qualified sort of way.
Okay, not really sure. Buffy will change, but I don't think she's going to end up landing in the Buffy-shaped outline of 'HERO' as described by the series. Which is not to say that she won't find ways to express kindness, and warmth, and loyalty, and even love... it's just that she's probably going to express those things very much on her own terms, without having the Scooby Gang, or the watchers, or her Mom, or anyone else dictate those terms for her.
You should prepare yourself for the possibility that Buffy will NOT end up as the good guy, here, but might end up as someone on the wrong side of things.
While hopefully still having qualities that readers can relate to, and be able to care about her, even though it might be difficult for some of the people in her world to live around her.
As always, thank you for the serious reviewage!
More stuff soon.
Review By [laoshi
] • Date [22 Mar 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "'It's all about Manners... and also Violence'" from LunasMeow
DreamSmith! You're finally back! Yes!!!! I'm on vacation in Idaho visiting my cousin and this was a great treat. I got something to read while she was at work today. Now if only you could get a new chapter of Harmony out... I need me some Enchantress!
But I've been reading the other reviews you get for this fic (a weird habit of mine when I like an author's stories) and don't worry about these guys who are talking crap about how bitchy Buffy is and whatnot. It's refreshing, and it's certainly more like how she'd be if she was a real person and not a character in a tv show. She was a cheerleader! And if that wasn't bad enough we all know that power corrupts. People already treat others like shit, especially in high-school! It's nothing but little gangs that hate each other, with a few gangs that can get along with select other gangs. (Like the cheerleader gang getting along with the jock gang.) Then there are the few people that have no gang, and even fewer that (like I did) somehow manage to mingle with all the gangs.
Basically, the people who are complaining want a story with an (ultimately) incorruptible hero, who although they may falter at times, they always redeem themselves. This fic is the most realistic of all. It's human nature at its worst. Even the "school" is probably some government project to find strong mutants for some kind of special ops group. That's why they want them to fight each other (with as little property damage as possible) so that they can get field experience fighting enemy mutants. Nothing is free in reality, and a "school" for the "gifted" wouldn't be either. So ignore the people trying to escape from reality by reading, and let them read something else. You've got plenty of fics that suit them, and so do other authors. People who just enjoy reading? They'll appreciate the ingenuity and originality you've brought to this fic with this particular crossover. My only hope is that this one doesn't end up like most of your other Buffy/Faith fics where Faith is left in the cold. Although that is realistic for those fics, I can easily see them working out here. Mostly because Buffy is more human and isn't on her high horse. Well, thanks again for a nice read, and don't you ever dare to take so long to update again! :D
Comments from author:
Don't worry, more Harmony/Enchantress will be forthcoming. I really just started with this one because it's the easiest one of my ongoing stories to write for, and I wanted to get back up to speed before doing the more challenging Harmony story.
The 'bad' reviews for this fic... meh, they're really not that bad. Nearly all of the 'negative' reviews are people expressing dislike for the bitchy version of Buffy, which I can completely understand, so it doesn't bother me very much. Now, if they were hammering me with complaints about how I can't write, and only have lame ideas, and stuff like that, then yes, I would go hide in the corner and cry.
I basically agree with you, though, on why some people don't like this Buffy; she's a fair bit removed from the (mostly) selfless hero they're familiar with from the show and from most of the fic they read.
And, like you, I feel that if they'd rather read about that girl some more, then cool, they have lots of other options. Like I've pointed out to other reviewers, pretty much every other story I've done has been about super-selfless-uber-heroic Buffy... and I just wanted to do something different, here.
Now, on the other hand, I AM sensitive to the fact that this girl still has to be someone that people like, and can stand to read about. I hope I'm still on the positive side of that line, but I confess to having a very strong urge to edge a little closer to it in coming chapters.... The situation she's in, and the people around her... I just see lots of pressure on B to be selfish and snarky and not at all heroic, and not much pressure at all for her to be sweet and nice and good.
On yet another hand, nobody is a complete and total bitch ALL of he time (well, almost nobody), so some glimpses of sweetness will peek out on occasion.
Well, I could keep going, but basically it's all just more 'I hear you, I basically agree, I regret that not everyone loves this story but that's just how it is,' Etc, etc, etc. And, well, it really does seem to me, going by the feedback, that while some people hate this thing, the people who love it seem to REALLY love it... which is pretty neat.
A semi-famous, professional writer once said "If you're not offending anyone with what you write, then you're not going far enough".
So this story is my testbed for that concept.
Oh, and the Faith/Buffy relationship thing. Don't worry about it. As you said, in this place, with these people, and in this situation, the odds are more in favor of things between them working out. Not because Buffy is less moral, necessarily, but more because a lot of the things that made her hesitate/shut down/turn away in the original timeline are not present here. No Xander/Willow/Giles to judge her, No Angel destiny/soulmate/crap to get in the way, no television network terrified of showing two teenage girls in love.... So yeah, chances are very good that the Fuffy will be strong and will grow and all that good stuff.
Not, however, without certain setbacks and issues that have to be resolved first, starting with the next chapter. So don't freak out on that account when bad things happen. That's just some of that 'conflict' thing we writers like to throw in there; it's perfectly normal, and it will make things even better when our girls manage to overcome and persevere and basically get to the other side.
Okay, gotta go catch some sleep, so I can get up and work on the next part. Which, I think it's safe to say, will be posted in something LESS than two years.
Seriously, though, thanks for the long-term support. It's hugely appreciated.
Review By [LunasMeow
] • Date [22 Mar 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "'It's my way or... actually there's *only* my way'" from LunasMeow
Well! You've certainly 99% confirmed what I suspected about the twins. Could've only made it clearer if you came out and said they were together or wrote a scene about it. And then you gave Buffy a chance to join them! A little nervous about that, wasn't she? But see, if she's going to have trouble keeping up with Faith, how's she gonna handle her and the twins? I just don't see it. Unless, she uses them to make Faith jealous sometime? Maybe when she finds out Faith is sleeping with some girl she can't stand? Someone she DEMANDS Faith stays away from, but Faith doesn't listen? Hmm. Maybe. It's certianly possible. It might even be, probable. ^_^.
But shame on you for getting rid of Merrie! She's great! Could you imaging her as a villian? Getting her hands on some blood from every superhero/villian and making miniatures of them? With their powers? Only under her control, unlike Mini-Faith? But as she is, she's so nice that we don't want her gone. Maybe her and Harmony could room together? (Harmony WAS the UV girl right?)
I loved how Mini-Faith wouldn't let go of Buffy, or listen to Merrie. And I could just see Buffy teasing Faith after she got Mini-F down as if it was really happening. And the knives were a nice touch. I just KNEW you were gonna do that. I could FEEL it. When she was running away. Before the other dolls came out after her.
Well, can't wait for an update, obviously, seeing as I almost always give you nice long reviews, but don't you dare forget about my Harmony/Enchantress fic! That's right! MINE! I claim it!
---Ok, not really. But still, much as I love my Fuffy, especially when it's being written by as talented a writer as you, I need more Harmony! And that's all YOUR fault you know.
Review By [LunasMeow
] • Date [22 Mar 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "'It's all about Manners... and also Violence'" from Millaros
Dayuuum. I really hate to complain, but this has been a loong time you have gone without updating.
Anyways, splendid chapter you have here; though the idea of that "Peeper" guy just freaked me out... Any chance we get to see more of violent!Buffy?
Comments from author:
I know, it's been a stupid-long time.
Next chapter is underway and will show up much, much more quickly.
thank you for commenting.
Review By [Millaros
] • Date [22 Mar 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]