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Review of chapter "Graduation" from (Current Donor)Listener
This was a pretty good story. I don't spend a lot of time in the Marauders era, but I totally bought into most of the characterizations and the plot. It was a "soft" story, but given that there are two more, stuff will get real, I'm sure. I'm looking forward to the next one.
Review By [(Current Donor)Listener] • Date [2 Jan 13] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Innocence" from LovelyLucy

This is the second time I've read this all the way through. Its aaaamazing and well written. I love the detail and how much thought you've put behind the characters. Mandy and Sam don't feel like OCs, more like another piece of the puzzle. I love reading others' interpretations of how the Marauders were in school. I adored the proposal, it was so cute and, well, James-like. I could go on and on about what I liked, but I'm not going to bore you too much.

One question though, have you gone back and changed the chapter art? I swear, the last time I read this, the art was different. I think I would remember you having Karen Gillan (or however her name is spelled) playing Lily.

Well, I'm going to move on to Carnage now...

Comments from author:
Hi! I'm so glad you like the story enough to read it twice! And it means a lot to me that you think both Mandy and Samantha are well-developed: my worst fear was that they wouldn't feel like 'real' people. I loved writing the proposal and don't worry about boring me! The longer reviews the better, I always say! As for the chapter art - yes, I have changed it, actually! I decided to switch out some of the actors that felt 'too old' compared to some of the others and the age they're playing. Lily, Peter and Sirius all have new actors and therefore new art - I hope you don't mind!
Review By [LovelyLucy] • Date [3 Nov 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Graduation" from Mierke
This really was an extraordinary story. I especially liked the Hogwarts-feeling of all of this, how you've managed to put Buffy in a world that seems so familiar, even though it's years before the Hogwarts we know.
Comments from author:
Thank you very much - I'm very glad you liked it!
Review By [Mierke] • Date [7 Oct 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Graduation" from Ansku
Brilliant :) Although I hope you really do plan to re-write their destinies, your writing is so intense I might not survive as depressing ends for them as the canon gave!
Comments from author:
Thank you very much! As for my plans - I won't tell, but I take your comments about my writing as intense as a compliment. Personally, whatever the fates of the characters end up being, I hope you survive! ;)
Review By [Ansku] • Date [31 Aug 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Graduation" from (Past Donor)Flint
You have written a great story and I thank you for sharing it with us.

Especially the end makes me want to read the next part now.

One little point I would have liked to see is some sort of message from TPTB, if Buffy is allowed to stay or has to go back.
Comments from author:
Hi and thank you very much! I hope you keep reading and that you like the sequel. As for the PTB - they will be back in the story - eventually. ;)
Review By [(Past Donor)Flint] • Date [26 Aug 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Graduation" from TheEmpressOfJohoho
I don't know what to say, honestly. I loved it, from beginning to end.
The last paragraph, from Samantha, made tears form in my eyes. I hate endings, and changes, so for me, the graduation, was heartbreaking.
I'm going to read the sequel, and I hope Peter isn't going to turn out to be the guy he is in the books. He should be happy!

Well, apparently I DID know what to say :)

Loved it!
Comments from author:
Thank you so much! I (almost) made you speechless! Personally, I both love and hate endings and changes, depending on what sort they are of course. As for Peter, I can't make any promises, but I hope you find what I choose to do with him realistic.
Review By [TheEmpressOfJohoho] • Date [6 Apr 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Graduation" from PhoenixRe
Bravo, this was an amazing piece of work. There were moments that I felt were a little weak or there wasn't enough build up but only a few. Overall, I believe that you did a great job of merging the characters and creating a few of your own. There was logical evolution in them and plenty of realistic events/consequences/effects...
Above all I must congratulate you on the closing/interlude with which you guide us to your next work (which I will try to read after it is done, most likely a lost cause :D )
I always liked these kind of endings and interludes (time skip, reminiscent, kind of an older person telling a story to young-uns in front of a fire place)
Comments from author:
Thank you for your nice comments! I am especially pleased you like my characterizations and the teaser at the end. Your take on how reminiscent they are is exactly how I feel as well - your comment about the fireplace made me laugh.
Review By [PhoenixRe] • Date [24 Mar 10] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Graduation" from Swordstress
That's a wonderful ending! I kept wondering how James was going to propose, but doing so in front of the school like that is so him!

Samantha's teasing ending is very interesting. I assume she's talking about Peter's betrayal. Poor Samantha...Poor all of them.

Looking forward to reading about Buffy developing as an adult, and growing into her role of a slayer/fighter of evil.
Comments from author:
Thank you! And I have to agree, doing it in front of everyone is so him, as is Sirius' fireworks. I did waver between making it a romantic one in private, and what I eventually wrote, since James has grown up a lot during the course of this story. But in the end, I figured an attention-grabbing proposal would work best: A final marauding act before Graduation. And Samantha's little cliffhanger thoughts are definitely meant to be foreshadowing... Buffy will play a lot bigger part, and there will be character development in everyone, I hope. :D
Review By [Swordstress] • Date [11 Feb 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Graduation" from nightshadowlife
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Review By [nightshadowlife] • Date [10 Feb 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Graduation" from (Recent Donor)GothTroubleMaker
Love it! i'll be looking for Road of Carnage!
Comments from author:
Thank you! It will be up soon!
Review By [(Recent Donor)GothTroubleMaker] • Date [10 Feb 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Graduation" from eliseth
I love this whole story.
I don't really know what to say, just that I love it :)
I can't wait to read the next one.
Comments from author:
Thank you very much! And you don't need to say much else, just that you love it is more than enough!
Review By [eliseth] • Date [10 Feb 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Graduation" from Keshkreature
Wow. Excellent story. I will definately be looking for your sequel :)
Comments from author:
Thank you!
Review By [Keshkreature] • Date [10 Feb 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Graduation" from (Recent Donor)Luna
I'm not quite sure what to say. This chapter is bittersweet- we all know what levels of badness is going to enter their lives now.

But there were a lot of cute parts in this chapter and I think you wrote them very well. I enjoyed all the reminiscing and the candles on the lake.

“Seven years of Hogwarts,” Lily mused. “Now awaits the rest of our lives.”-- Ah, to have Lily say this... How sad.

I loved that you had a short note from Samantha at the end- I think that sets up things well for the sequel.

Even though Buffy was in the background and even though I didn't always agree with this Buffy (b/c of how she wasn't fighting the baddies) I definitely loved this story. You did a wonderful job and I cannot wait to read your sequel. Too bad we have to wait a whole month!!

Buen trabajo!
Comments from author:
I agree that it is bittersweet - it was sort of what I wanted it to be, and throughout the happiness that this story mostly has been, I've tried to do a little foreshadowing. I am glad the bitter didn't overwhelm the sweet, cute parts though!

And it is sad, and the candles on the lake in the shape of a Phoenix that then goes out leaving them in darkness was also really symbolic for me, and a lot of it, like Samantha's note, put me in the right mood for the sequel. I hope it will be well-liked, even though it is rather depressing at times, and Buffy will play a larger part. And there aren't many days left now! :D
Review By [(Recent Donor)Luna] • Date [9 Feb 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Graduation" from AllenPitt
congrats on completing the story... Buffy did kind of recede into the background a bit, but the whole story of the Marauders would crowd anybody out, and now she 'fits' into it very well. So far she hasn't really changed very much of course, but it's still early. is a 'god mother' title in her future for HP? That would be neat...
Still thinking she should show up back in her world if only briefly....
Comments from author:
Thank you! I'm glad I managed to get Buffy well-established as part of the gang, even if her characterization didn't end up what I had hoped for, but now I have a steady base for her with place to grow, like you say. It wasn't really until after season three she did in the Buffy-verse. And speaking of Buffy-verse...we will see a glimpse of it, don't worry - but that's not going to happen until the story that takes place after the soon-to-be-published sequel. Sorry! And as for the Godmother lips are sealed.
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [9 Feb 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Graduation" from Iceflame
Well done. Here's looking forward to the next adventure :-D!
Comments from author:
Cheers! It's going to be a long road...
Review By [Iceflame] • Date [9 Feb 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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