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Review of chapter "Chapter One" from BrownFinderth
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So, what will Dawn be doing with the news about Ari being called a terrorist?! And congratulations on her baby daughter!!!
Review By [BrownFinderth] • Date [29 Jun 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from LeaFairy
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Fabulous fic! I simply loved how Dawn matured through out this small story-- from being in-love with Ari, her first love, to realizing she had to leave him for her own sake, no matter how heartbreaking, to becoming a mature woman and mother, who can see what a monster he has become... Just brilliant writing! *claps*

I really look forward to your main fic with NCIS!!
Review By [LeaFairy] • Date [8 Aug 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from RevDorothyL
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Sorry to have waited so long to read and review, but the title made me think I should wait for more to be posted before getting too attached.

Dawn having a child with Ari is an unusual idea, but you really sold it, managing to make it believable that Dawn would fall for him, and that she would also realize in time that she needed to leave him, and would recognize the emptiness beneath the sweet exterior and kind eyes even before she found out about his terrorist activities.
Review By [RevDorothyL] • Date [4 May 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Past Donor)Joyful
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I desperately want more of this!
Review By [(Past Donor)Joyful] • Date [27 Mar 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from daydreamer
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I love this story. Most people wouldn't even think about writing Ari's character yet you did and you made it work.
Review By [daydreamer] • Date [15 Feb 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Waverly
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This is the best crossover with NCIS I've ever read, and I look forward to you continuing it. Excellent job. :D
Review By [Waverly] • Date [13 Feb 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Lyd
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This is a truly fabulous beginning. I have always felt similar to Dawn, that Ari's and Ziva's dad screwed them over. I mean they reacted differently but they both have major Daddy issues. I can not wait for the continuation of this.
Review By [Lyd] • Date [11 Feb 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Xayian
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Very nice. I really liked how you blended the two worlds in a subtle way instead of an in your face kind of way. :) I'm looking forward to the next story. :D

Ria
Review By [Xayian] • Date [10 Feb 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Hermionetobe
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Okay you have definitely got my interest sev.

I can't wait for the main fic to go up.
Review By [Hermionetobe] • Date [25 Jan 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from AngelBlack
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Way too good. That's basically all I can say, because now I'm sad.
*sad*
Review By [AngelBlack] • Date [18 Jan 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Janai
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I love all your fic and obsessively check everyday to see if you've updated. This fic seems great. I love your take on Dawn in all your fics and I love NCIS. Are you going to use Kate or Ziva or both in your fic? Any way you do it though, it is bound to be great!
Review By [Janai] • Date [13 Jan 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from juliiwolfe
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Hey, I just wanted to let you know that I liked this premise and the way you managed to make Dawn's character evolve over so short a story. I'll be interested to see where this goes, as I do so love the Dawn fic.

Thanks for writing!
Review By [juliiwolfe] • Date [13 Jan 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from spring
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This is wonderful so far. I am very eager to see how dawn gets together with NCIS it should be rather interesting. More soon of this wonderful fic please.
Review By [spring] • Date [10 Jan 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from spk
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Great one-shot. Can't wait to read the full fic. :)
Review By [spk] • Date [9 Jan 09] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from PackHero
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Hey, I was so glad to see a story by you pop up in my tracked stories. I was starting to go into serious Sevangel with-drawl. This story was a great starting point that I can't wait to see where you go with it. I can't wait to see Dawn interaction with the NCIS. Please don't leave us hanging for long.
Review By [PackHero] • Date [9 Jan 09] • Not Rated
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