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Review of chapter "Chapter Twelve: Theories and Trials" from DesitaniaF
Review:
I find it amusing that Peter now has a daughter who is older than he is, and there are hints that Caspian is in love with an older woman. I would love it if you picked this story up again soon.
Comments from author:
Thank you so much for your kind words. I haven't given up on this story, in fact it has 20 additional chapters posted on my user name at fanfiction.net. I stopped posting it here because I didn't want to go past the allotted balance between non-Buffy stories and Buffy-stories. But the story is under the same title at fanfiction.net, and my screen-name there is phoenixqueen as well (not to be confused with two others who have purloined my name and just slapped numbers on the end). But thank you again, and I hope you consider wandering over to see the rest of the story. It is unfinished, but real life has kept me from wanting to do a lot of writing lately, and I have 4 big stories in the work in three different fandoms. I do fully intend to go back to it once summer rolls around and I no longer have to teach.
Review By [DesitaniaF] • Date [7 May 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Twelve: Theories and Trials" from Netchka
Review:
Love the story. I hope that you will be continuing it at some point in the futuee or sooner? Thanks.
Comments from author:
There is more to the story posted on my account at Fanfiction.net, under the name phoenixqueen. I always intended to put the full story here, I've just gotten lazy and haven't done so yet. If you like this story, I highly encourage you to check out the rest at the other site. It's still not finished, and I don't know when it will be, but there's 20 more chapters posted there.

But thank you for the review. I always appreciate it, and I'm glad that this story has caught your attention on this site, since it's a non-Buffy crossover on a site that's mostly intended for crossovers.
Review By [Netchka] • Date [7 Sep 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Twelve: Theories and Trials" from Bobboky
Review:
awesome
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [14 Jul 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Twelve: Theories and Trials" from robertlisle
Review:
Good chapter, nice development between Lucy and Aislynn. The secret Lucy now holds will be interesting once it has been revealed to all. The meeting between Kings was also well played. Keep up the great work.
Review By [robertlisle] • Date [13 Jul 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 11: Aslan's How" from Bobboky
Review:
very good
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [25 May 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Ten: "...what dreams may come?"" from Bobboky
Review:
excellent
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [7 May 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Nine: Emotions" from Bobboky
Review:
excellent work, though I keep expecting a BtVS tie in.

very excellent. I do like how smoothly you changed it from thousands of years to just 20+ that the kings and queens were gone.
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [9 Apr 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Nine: Emotions" from robertlisle
Review:
Much better chapter. You've fleshed out Kris now that she seems less perfect. You have added a touch of mystery to the storyline as well, hope you continue your story. I look forward to the awkward meeting that is sure to come and the mystery of what happened to Peter's son.
Review By [robertlisle] • Date [9 Apr 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eight: Fortunate Encounters" from Orion
Review:
Ah, i did wonder how you were going to deal with how the 'time difference' . . . you minimized it. Interesting.

Still good. Still reading.
Comments from author:
*smiles* I'm glad that you're still enjoying the story. I love seeing reviews, so thank you so much for taking the time to leave me one. Now we're going to get into the 'meat' of the story, so to say. Be prepared for some pretty interesting twists from here!
Review By [Orion] • Date [16 Mar 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Seven: First Meetings" from (Past Donor)JamieT
Review:
Delightful

Very interesting. I always wanted to see someone do something like this. The movies tried, but they could never really put a handle on it. 32 and a king to 16 and a school boy, of course they're going to be different!

Might i enquire to what extent you are following canon here? Is this prince caspian they've fallen into again or....? something different.

Whatever you do, excellent, absolutely excellent. I would however appreciate if they act less like teenagers as they did in the movie, and more like experienced and wise kings and queens as they were in reality!

Keep up the good work!
Comments from author:
Thank you so much for taking the time to leave me a review. I'm glad that you are enjoying the story thus far.

To be honest, this was not solely my idea. I was talking with a girl I beta for on another site about one of her stories, and the topic of marriage in Narnia came up. The next thing I know, the entire prologue, most of the story outline, and several random scenes popped into my head!

I agree with your opinion of the movies. The Pevensies did grow up, and yes, they returned to being children, but I don't think that all their experiences, memories, and newly acquired skills would have left them. I do understand the conflict that the director was going for with Peter's character in Prince Caspian. Narnia was his home and he was pulled away from it. He's angry, bitter, frustrated, and feels like he should hide the part of him that is a King so he can fit into England's society. His temper is going to erupt in odd ways. I was sort of going for that with Peter, but make it more about what he lost, than his struggle to regain what he was.

As far as the other three, I think they were closer to being their royal selves than Peter in the movie, but I have tried to make them more compassionate and understanding than they were in the movie, and also more believing towards Lucy. I always saw them as having a very tight bond, and I wanted that to shine through for them. Trumpkin, I think, would be the most skeptical, just because of everything he's gone through.

A great deal of this story is going to follow the Prince Caspian movie, but there will be twists, turns, and changes to the timeline that are purely mine. And there will be a lot more of the Pevensies acting as Kings and Queens, and not teenagers, which you'll see as we go along (especially Peter)! Look for a new chapter soon!
Review By [(Past Donor)JamieT] • Date [6 Mar 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Five: Family Pressure" from Orion
Review:
This is good, but a bit more angst-ridden then what I normally read. I do hope you are going somewhere with this. I have have to assume that there is a point, that She will be back in his life again - and that you didn't just invent her then have Peter never see her or their child again just to add more pain to his life.

I will be rather disseminated if she exists only in his past and not his future. Either way, I will continue reading to find out.
Comments from author:
Thanks for taking the time to review. I always enjoy hearing from my readers.

Have no worries, Kris and the child will be making an appearance back in his life. I love Peter's character so I couldn't do something so evil to him as having him married, tossing him out of Narnia, and then bringing him back only to find out that his wife and child have been dead for 1300 years. You'll be seeing where I am going with this shortly, and there will be changes to the established canon timeline so that Peter will get a chance to be reunited with his wife and child. That's where the whole idea for the story title comes from. Just be patient, because from this point on, the pace is going to be picking up, as will the action.
Review By [Orion] • Date [14 Feb 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four: Painful Despair" from crystal
Review:
I JUST LOVE THIS STORY!! I CANT WAIT TO READ MORE!!
Comments from author:
Thanks! I'm glad that you like it.
Review By [crystal] • Date [6 Feb 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three: First Aid" from robertlisle
Review:
So a case of mistaken identity or was it? Nice chapter, I like how you separate out the Narnian memories with bold and italics. Lucy finding the drawings brings back memories of The Magician's Nephew. Keep up the great writing.
Comments from author:
Thanks! Glad that you enjoyed it, and I hope you keep reading and reviewing, because the twists are just beginning!
Review By [robertlisle] • Date [3 Feb 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three: First Aid" from Orion
Review:
Interesting concept. I look forward to seeing where you take this.
Comments from author:
Thanks! I'm not even sure where this story came from myself. I was just talking to one of my friends that I beta for about one of her stories, the topic of marriage in Narnia came up, and the next thing I know, the entire prologue popped into my head (along with quite a bit more)! Thanks for taking the time to read and review, and I hope you continue to follow. I have several more chapters already finished, I'm just pacing out the updates so that people don't have to wait as long between chapters.
Review By [Orion] • Date [3 Feb 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two: Haunting Memories" from robertlisle
Review:
It is heart wrenching to have been ripped out of Narnia at a such a time. You have done a beautiful job of describing Peter's feelings of loss and sadness. I sense there is more to the story, Peter's discovery of the portrait points to that and look forward to reading how you develop it.
Comments from author:
Thank you so much for your review. I love hearing what people think about my writing, especially since this is the first time that I have tried to write romance (at least that I've ever let anyone read before).

Heart-wrenching is a good choice of words, because that's exactly what I was going for. Peter is the High King, so as such he has to be the strong one. He's helped raise his siblings, so they're used to seeing him as strong and unshakable, but now he's faced with his worst nightmare, so it becomes a huge role-reversal, which you'll see in later chapters.

I already have several more chapters written, and I plan to post another one probably today. I hope you continue reading and reviewing, since I do love feedback. Thank you for taking the time to review.
Review By [robertlisle] • Date [2 Feb 09] • Not Rated
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