Review of chapter "Chapter TwentyNine - Borrowed Time" from Blackett
Review By [Blackett
] • Date [28 Jun 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter TwentyNine - Borrowed Time" from draconis
WARNING: ENDING SPOILER BELOW.
Would have rated higher, but the ending was just too abrupt and Syl's fate actually one of two most likely outcomes the moment Willow mentioned the 'Master' situation.
The "one last party" was a nice sentiment, but it just didn't work for me. Otherwise, this was on its way to becoming a favorite.
I also have to question the designation of Syl as a 'Champion' as her ability to be Champion-y is a one-shot deal...and now she's just a 'messenger' to the PTB. Again, nice sentiment, but it just doesn't really work. All other Champions in BVS/ATS worked long and hard at it, and more often than not suffered grievously and overcame tremendous challenges during their stints as Champions. Not saying Syl didn't have some grief in her life, but I think her experiences in the story up to that point were pretty lightweight compared to most Champions.
One also is left wondering what will be the effect on the world of The First Evil being trapped? After all, that's about as huge as it gets! Is it still able to exert any influence at all? Is mankind about to embark on a new golden age? Will all 'bad' demons have to leave the world of man? etc.
But overall, a very good story and quite well written. Enjoyable and well worth reading.
Review By [draconis
] • Date [20 Apr 10] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter TwentyThree - Moving" from Terapsina
Even though this chapter is kinda short you wrote in enough Max and Logan for us to be happy for some chapters onwards, so it was still very nice.
I like the moment were Jam Pony head heard that Max was back, it was very funny and completely in character.
The only thing that's still making me sad is the fact that Original Cindy probably wont be seen anymore. I really liked her.
Review By [Terapsina
] • Date [8 Dec 09] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter TwentyTwo - Getting Comfortable" from Terapsina
I have three things that I want to tell you... so I will ;)
1) I like how you made Willow here, I don't think that I have ever read a fic where she's blind. Gotta say it's an interesting concept.
2) So is Max Faith's daughter? Because by the X5's reaction to Faiths name it seems to be something along those lines.
3) Great work and cant wait to see more, but you should really think about advancing Syl as a character, I mean she is the actual Slayer.
Comments from author:
Syl definitely shines in this one later on. Max right now is the only one who's aware that Faith is there, mostly because she was the one in Manticore. She's not Faith's daughter, though. Thanks for the review!
Review By [Terapsina
] • Date [12 Nov 09] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter TwentyOne - Left In This City" from supernaturalfanatic
Oh no! How does she know about Willow?! Just who was Renfro before she came into this position? And damnit, Max, tell the others who you keep seeing before it's too late!
Review By [supernaturalfanatic
] • Date [22 Oct 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Nineteen - It Cannot Be Stopped" from lovinTiva
Excellent. I really hope that they are able to escape and that Max is alright. Please update soon!
Review By [lovinTiva
] • Date [8 Sep 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Fourteen - Mirror Images" from draconis
Excellent last few chapters. Really like the directions you take this story.
I'm hoping Max's "Faith"/"Max" visitor was a Slayer connection and not the First Evil. Didn't seem like its style...trying to give Max hope and all (even if Max now thinks she's going nuts).
Really looking forward to what happens with Renfro.
Krit's revelation about "The Initiative" is intriguing. Just how much does he REALLY know?
Review By [draconis
] • Date [22 Jun 09] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Nine - To Hunt the Vampires" from fanofkali
Interesting premise for this story. Looking forward to seeing were it is going.
Review By [fanofkali
] • Date [26 Apr 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Seven - One Born" from CPTSkip
I am quite enjoying your story. Nice job with everyones' characters and I look forward to more. I am a bit bothered by Tara not being there. But I guess we just have to wait to find out where she is. I'm going to be optimistic and hope she is home taking care of Willow's and her kids. Lol!
Review By [CPTSkip
] • Date [8 Apr 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Prologue - Jail" from MaraLiz
Interesting premise, I'm looking forward to your next chapter. Take care.
Review By [MaraLiz
] • Date [27 Jan 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Prologue - Jail" from LovinXovers
Review By [LovinXovers
] • Date [24 Jan 09] • Not Rated