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Review of chapter "Chapter One: First hand" from Zarthrax
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Seems a little short, but I can't fault you for a Deadlands crossover. Wouldn't mind seeing a few more chapters...lol
Review By [Zarthrax] • Date [3 Jun 13] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One: First hand" from Robby
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MMMmm, neat idea!
Review By [Robby] • Date [23 Oct 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One: First hand" from Bluesnowman
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Wonderful story so far keep it up.
Review By [Bluesnowman] • Date [17 Mar 09] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One: First hand" from Nomma
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As the man said, "Sweeeeeet."
Review By [Nomma] • Date [6 Feb 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One: First hand" from merlinherk
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I am very trilled to read this always liked the mix of old west and magic. To find some that does is a delight. Please update soon and often
Review By [merlinherk] • Date [29 Jan 09] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One: First hand" from Bobboky
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very cool
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [28 Jan 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One: First hand" from war
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good story hope you continue.
Review By [war] • Date [28 Jan 09] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One: First hand" from mithrilandtj
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Interesting. Not familiar with the costume though.
Review By [mithrilandtj] • Date [28 Jan 09] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One: First hand" from CPTSkip
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Very nice job. There were a few misspellings, but I liked your story and it is nice to see a more obscure RPG being used as a Helloween costume. I look forward to more.
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [28 Jan 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One: First hand" from Mystikal
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New idea using the same old, read reliable, tricks lol. Your speech patterns are a tad stiff and lifeless. My idea would be to write it as people would talk. I know that's not how they say to do it , but it reads a hell of a lot better that way.

Ok that's mostly that bad out of the way. I like this idea and I don't think i've ever seen anything like it. I would say that means you have half the battle won. So good work. Just reread what you have so far and see how you could change the wording in a few places to make it seem more real life in the conversations.
Review By [Mystikal] • Date [28 Jan 09] • Rating [5 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One: First hand" from Ladegard
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Not bad. I like the idea of using Deadlands. You need to brush up your sentence construction and punctuation a bit, but a promising idea.
Review By [Ladegard] • Date [28 Jan 09] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One: First hand" from Marcel
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Interesting start. The writing has some problems (it helps to pay attention to form... compare "No longer hard to read he found the book to be filled with information on a kind of magic." to "No longer hard to read, he found the book to be filled with information on a kind of magic.") but it's not bad either, I've definitely read worse. Tracking.
Review By [Marcel] • Date [28 Jan 09] • Not Rated
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