So I have a big question. Is this story up for adoption? or is it abandoned? I really like the story line and I hate to see it die. they're are just not enough Harry Potter/BTVS/NCIS stories out there. :(
Review By [nicktorilove] • Date [13 Apr 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Hmm, not a bad start to a story. A few of the standard cliches and some of your cross over borders are a little abrupt to the point of almost seeming forced.
I personally would have loved a better explanation of Xander's insertion with maybe a couple memories of Salem (considering some grave humor I can so see little 9 and 10 year olds being sorted by being made to sit in one of the old style witness boxes with access to the school being through carriages that take students under water to get to I mean it is Salem right?) and maybe a little more effort needed to claim Harry with more retribution done to the Dursleys and even just the other residents of Privet Drive...
Hmm I wonder, what are the chances that part of Haley's magic disabled Arabella Figg somehow? Like at the same time Xander appeared on the street she suffers a stroke so that she can't report to Dumbledore? And the wards could be anchored to Harry instead of number 4 so as long as he is with blood then they read as stable so Dumbles has no reason to investigate.
Personally I would love to see Harry start at Salem a year or 2 before he would have started at Hogwarts so that he has a very strong foundation when he is forced to go there as well as already having some friends his own age so that he is much better prepared for social interaction as well as magic.
Also considering that Sirius only inherited because there were no more Blacks is it possible that Xander is now Lord Black consider Sirius supposedly was disinherited?
I hope that you might have a little more to give with this story, ~Reflections
I just found this story and wanted to let you know how much I like what you have written so far. You have taken a very unique stance on the whole Xander finds his real family theme. I wish that you would decide to pick this story back up. I would love to read more.
Please write more soon.
Review By [malchance] • Date [11 Jun 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
I know over a year old but it's cute! I love it when Xander becomes all protective. Especially when it comes to Harry. It's great. He knows what it's like to be neglected. Not to that extent but he knows.
Review By [DarkFaerieYumi] • Date [12 Dec 10] • Not Rated
ok this one really threw me for a loop seeing as it is all three of my favorite x-overs in one. I can't wait to find out all the logistics and how Cordy takes the m-preg. Also love Xander being Harry's white knight really cute and really Xander-ish.
Review By [TeriBlack] • Date [25 Jun 09] • Not Rated
This is very good!. I've read CSI/NCIS crossovers with the buffyverse, but not one that had Xander coming from the Potter-verse. Like the idea of him being Harry's cousin. How did he get all his credentials & skill so fast? was that part of Halfrek's wish? If Cordy comes over, who would she be paired with? can you picture herry calling her Auntie Cordie? Would love to see the fight between Queen C and some of the wizarding world once she finds out about Dumbledore leaving harry with the dursleys and the prophecy. or her vs Snape! and if she stays in that dimension will she have her seer abilities? Please update soonest and keep up the good work!
Review By [Silver] • Date [12 Apr 09] • Rating [9 out of 10]