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Review of chapter "Chapter 6" from WolfWriter
Review:
This story is very good. It has it's problems; mostly it jumps around in the narrative a bit too much, and there's not really enough exposition as to how Xavier got his hands on Xander in the first place, or what happened to him, but other than that, it's very good.

I should think that Giles, now being one of the heads of the Council, would have access to documents that ordinary Watchers don't, and be able to verify what the Colonials are saying about the origins of mankind.

Kennedy, who is the nastiest piece of work next to Iblis (is she his kid by any chance? She certainly acts like it.), needs a good kick in the head, as kicking her in the a** would only cause brain damage. I never understood what Willow saw in her, except for being a rebound relationship.

BTW, what happened to all of the Colonials sent planetside that were killed by vampires? Were they turned? That would be a nightmare, as they would be a threat to their own people, and look to make two legged Happy meals of them.
Comments from author:
You know, this is exactly why I haven't done anything with this story recently. What happened was simple, I wrote out the plot, planned it out and then, while writing, changed the whole thing.

Giles was going to originally have some information, a couple of legends and a story or two but that got lost in the shuffle. My big problem is I could see him and Adama hitting it off. Both are the older mentor to each respective group and Adama's Winston Churchill like reputation would be recognised and respected by the watcher. In the same way Giles Warrior-Scholar personality makes him exactly the sort of man that would make a good Colonial Warrior. The fact is those two would just hit it off.

As for Kennedy, I never liked the relationship they tried to invent between her and Willow. There was no chemistry between them and it DID feel like a rebound relationship, that they are still together in the comics is just one of many problems with "season eight". First of all she was two dimensional character, a stuck up rich brat that always seemed to be on the verge of Cordelia like "oh my daddy bought it for me" out bursts. She was greedy, stupid and didn't seem to have one good character trait. I somehow got the feeling that her Homosexuality was more of a rebellion rather than a sincere development. The relationship between Willow and Tara was, in my opinion, the best in the show. Not only did we see both of them grow because of it, but it wasn't gratuitous. Nine times out of ten a relationship like that is used for shock purposes, but not there and it was a tough development to follow.

The problem is I dislike Kennedy so much I rewrote her. Amplifying her least desirable characteristics and changing things. You were actually right about her connection to Ibis. She was going to be working for him, a mole in the Slayer organisation. When they found out there was going to be a dust up between Xander and Willow. The problem was I'd made her too much of a bitch. I couldn't see Willow ever siding against Xander, even after his secret.

I had planned a info dump of sorts between Buffy and Jamie. About who Xaviar is, what he does and why. but I just never got around to it. too much was happening and my plan had long gone out of the window.

Originally I wanted to do a sort of training sequence in the first few chapters. Showing Xander's trip to Oxnard and then further up into space, but something got in the way. My hatred of the comics. I have yet to meet anyone who likes these things. Everything they could do wrong they do, and do it epically. The whole point of this story was to fix the so called Eighth Season and I failed.

For example take Dawn. You just know that as soon as Dawn was getting serious about a guy at college Buffy would have told her about Parker. Now Dawn ain't a fool and she would hold back, if what's-his-name pushed she'd leave him. It might break her heart but that's it. She wouldn't jump the bones of his roommate for no adequate reason.

So here I rewrote it, had it so Dawn wasn't serious about the relationship, but the roommate made a move. Drugging her and taking advantage, it was dark but to me made a heck of a lot more sense than "I slept with him because I wasn't ready to sleep with my actual Boyfriend" That ties me into so many logical knots I won't get untangled for weeks. Amusingly the way I had for her to shrink (apologise to what's-his-name) was used by the comic. When my cheap, not to mention hack, way out precedes the official reason I despair.

Buffy's experimenting with homosexuality is again a miss step from the comics I wanted to correct. Basically by erasing it. There wasn't any really reason for it, other than to show Buffy was lost. I can think of about a hundred better ways to show that that doesn't cheapen everything. Eventually there were so many of these miss steps I just threw my hands in the air and stopped writing.

The original plan was long gone, the comics were just piling more crap on top of me and I had other things to finish. Put simply my muse for this one died unlamented and under reviewed.

I've ranted for a while here and I'm sorry. I hope I've answered some of the questions you raised, and a bit more. At the moment I'm working on a much bigger story but when I've finished that I plan to come back to some of my older ones, including this. Tweaking, changing and perhaps outright re-doing the whole shebang

Thanks for the Review
Thomas
AKA Mountain King

PS oh the idea of vampire colonials, Xander was supposed to have an aside to his abbreviated training, where they lost contact with Hector Elonzo's farm (co-owned by Troy and Dillan, used to re-stock the fleet's supplies, long story if you don't know the show). Xander was supposed to volunteer along with his brother and sister. The three of them were going to have a chapter devoted to the whole thing, but my rant about Season Eight got in the way... and how!
Review By [WolfWriter] • Date [6 Dec 10] • Rating [6 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 6" from Harry
Review:
*Takes glove and SLAPS Kennedy with it* Stop with the pain in the rear stuff Kennedy! Or are you really Iblis or one of his agents, trying to much things up? Either way, you are VERY close to getting your body broken by both Dawn Patrol and B! And I don't think B is going to complain too much if that happens!
Review By [Harry] • Date [14 Sep 09] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 5" from Harry
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well, Adama is spelling it out for them. The question is, will they listen to it. At least Faith is getting a great ride out of this situation.
Review By [Harry] • Date [14 Sep 09] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 4" from Harry
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LOL! Faith asked for proof and she got it! And Johnathan, passing, out, PRICELESS!
Review By [Harry] • Date [14 Sep 09] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from Harry
Review:
*AND SO IT BEGINS* Sorry for the Kosh impersonation, but with what Adama is about to tell everyone it fits. And boy are the Slayers and Watchers going to be in for a surprise!
Review By [Harry] • Date [14 Sep 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from Harry
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X-Man, its time to come clean. Time to tell them about Galactica and who Iblis REALLY IS!
Review By [Harry] • Date [14 Sep 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 1" from Harry
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IBLIS! That FRACKING piece of slime is NIGHTMARE! Curse him to the far ends of the Galaxy! Its time to start organizing things to take care of this problem. And its going to take a mixture of Slayer and Colonial abilites to stop him!
Review By [Harry] • Date [14 Sep 09] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 1" from Harry
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IBLIS! That FRACKING piece of slime is NIGHTMARE! Curse him to the far ends of the Galaxy! Its time to start organizing things to take care of this problem. And its going to take a mixture of Slayer and Colonial abilites to stop him!
Review By [Harry] • Date [14 Sep 09] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Teaser" from Harry
Review:
Galactica 1980. UGH! Never cared for it myself. But it DOES sound interesting. Now, get your Fracking keister back in gear and GET TO WORK ON THIS TALE!
Review By [Harry] • Date [13 Sep 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 6" from Jhawksun
Review:
please continue soon.
Review By [Jhawksun] • Date [26 Jun 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 6" from grd
Review:
No wonder Kennedy is so up tight, she's got something stuck so far up her ass, nothing can give her pleasure and she's always constipated. Hope someone comes along and b*tch slaps her. Slap to the back of Giles head in passing too please. Love how Buffy, Dawn and Faith came to X's defense.
Comments from author:
Can you tell I dislike Kennedy?
Willow/Tara worked because we had time to watch it develop, we believed that those two could fall completely in love. Kennedy just comes over as a pampered brat who wants to "roll in the hay" with Willow for kicks. It cheapens all three characters (Willow, Tara and Kennedy).
If when we had jumped to several years later, in the comic, the two were friends but had grown apart it would have saved the situation. Instead they've somehow made it worse. So with this story I'm making it my mission to write Kennedy as I see her. Spoilt, scheming, underhanded, jealous, power hungry, greedy and arrogant. To name a few

Thanks for the review
Review By [grd] • Date [14 Feb 09] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 1" from burmafrdnow
Review:
Just a suggestion that comes too late I know.

Joss is not god he made a lot of mistakes and so called Season 8 frankly may be his worst.
Totally agree with you about the New BSG. Frankly in many ways more unbelievable then the original. And I did like the original.

I would have dumped season 8 and gone AU.
I would have reworked BSG and maybe kept a couple of parts of BSG 80 but kept the original cast just moved it along 10 years.

To me fanfiction should ignore canon when canon is all screwed up.
Comments from author:
The only thing better than totally ignoring the comics is taking them apart. This story will.
Review By [burmafrdnow] • Date [13 Feb 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 6" from Fyrloche
Review:
I like it. I agree with you that Galactica 1980 wasn't that good but I'm still a huge fan of the original show. (Loved the theme music) The new show is good but I still get ticked that they made Boomer into a Cylon and Colonel Tigh into a drunk. (Haven't seen the last season, but I have heard things about the other Cylons hidden amoungst the Colonials. The show is just a little to soap opera like.) I'm disappointed in Giles. He's kept secrets all his life that he didn't tell because he thought that others either didn't need to know or weren't his to tell.
Review By [Fyrloche] • Date [13 Feb 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 6" from FireWolfe
Review:
Hi,
I really like the concept of this story. I think it is a very good start. Let me begin by saying I am a very big fan of TOS BSG. I loathe the new series with a passion. While 1980 was not the same quality as the original it had potential. The only problem I am having is the gaps in the story. We seem to be jumping around with no realyc connection between Xander and his family. I would love to see background filled in more. I would also like to see more of how the Galacticans learned about the supernatural and I would like to see them prove that they have been helping Earth.
Please do not take this as a slam to the story. Like I said I like it. I just think it cold be smoothed a bit and filled in more.

Thanks for writing this and I do hope you add more soon. It would be great if you would post it on some of the BSG sites. We always look for interesting fic.

Lisa
Fire Wolfe
Comments from author:
Yes there's a lot of things happening in this story, and yes it is all over the place and there are a hell of a lot of questions to answer:- Where are the Cylons, Xander's talk with his family. Those are just the two we have to answer The thing is, as demonstrated there are a hell of a lot of pieces to this plot.

Think of each characters story as its own little narrative that, for now doesn't quite fit right. Next chapter is a bit of fun before we get the whole Xander situation out of the way.

Thanks for the review
Review By [FireWolfe] • Date [13 Feb 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 6" from (Recent Donor)Hawklan
Review:
nice story, hope to see more of it and I liked the appearance of Starbuck
Review By [(Recent Donor)Hawklan] • Date [12 Feb 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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