Hmn... interesting. I'll admit, I'm not fond of Andrew. Or, if I am fond of him, it's in the 'oh-look-at-the-irritating-little-puppy' way. But the way you've hit this off... I can believe that Andrew was a Winchester. I can't even believe I'm saying that! When I first saw that tagline "An Andrew Winchester Story" I was pretty much in the denial land of 'hell no'. Glad I decided to give it a try, anyways.
Right, so first off, I like your writing style. I feel like you're hitting the imagery just right - not too much, and not too little. Great adjectives, words that fit nicely into the story, keeping to third person, dropping background information without overloading our senses - just great. It makes me feel all mushy inside when my inner editor doesn't come flying out with a vengeance. So, yay for you. If you ever decide to move into original writing, let me know and I'll cheerfully buy your books.
Plot-wise, I think it's great that Xander is the only one who took Andrew somewhat seriously. Well, that's not quite right. I don't think it's great that the Scoobies automatically dismissed him, but I think that Xander would probably be the one to give Andrew's story a smidgen of ...belief, I suppose, and actually ask for further information. After all, Xander is the one who could most relate, right? I don't want to say that Xander puts on a "mask" all the time either, because I don't think he does... but he's the one who could understand playing up a feature to make other people more at ease/underestimate him. Anyways, I'm happy that he at least made an effort to look closer. I'd be pleased as punch to see their relationship developed further. (Even if it looks like Andrew is going away forever...?)
Also, I think you hit Bobby perfectly. And you did with only dialog from over the phone! You amazing person you. And the "daddy issues" oooh, I can see the angst in my computer screen already. There's probably a prequel to this, I'll have to go find it when I'm done, here... Anyways, an A+ on the Supernatural side of things, since Bobby's lines hit me like a punch to the gut, and Andrew's musings were very much in tune with the sounds of Supernatural as a whole.
So, as I said earlier, you convinced me. I could carry around a little card with me that says "Andrew's a Winchester!" because I'm firmly on your side of the fence now. Geez, I'm going to keep thinking he's a little mastermind in other stories now, too. That's going to be confusing.
I'm very much looking forward to the rest of it... and the differences Andrew could make to the Supernatural series as a whole. One of those lovely "what-if" pieces... Can one person make the difference? Since Andrew does know bits and pieces of magic (probably more then he lets on), would it be possible for him to heal Dean without the help of the YED? If so, what would John's presence contribute to the series? And so-on, and so-forth. You've got me hooked, darling!
Comments from author:
Well, damn, thanks so much for all the thought and effort in your review of the story. If you didn't notice I'm a bit more in tune with my SPN side than BtVS side. *heh* I'm also glad I brought you over to the Andrew side, though, I have to admit, there have been more than a few times that I felt the writers were out to make him the most annoying guy on the face of the earth. I always thought that considering everything he's been through there should have been more growth in his maturity and how he related to others and this is just my way of giving back. :)
As for Bobby, he's a man that says what he needs to say and generally doesn't beat around the bush if he can help it. It's what I like about him and am glad you feel that I've nailed him. Also, to be honest, Andrew wouldn't be a real hunting Winchester if he didn't have daddy issues. Besides, it was easier to make him a Winchester than it was to make him the ultimate scifi goofy dork. I can do partial goofy dork but I lack that extra dork 'umph'.
Oh and as for the questions you posed: Thanks for those! I kept writing myself into walls the way I was going and having those questions addressed again helped throw some fresh ideas into my head. So I'm glad you took a chance and that I've managed to get you hooked. :D
Review By [Anaraine] • Date [28 Sep 09] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Loving it so far xD I love how he doesn't go running to the Scoobies straight away after the phone call with Bobby! Winchester pride all the way, baby. Haha! I can't wait for more, I was so happy to see this wonderful fic updated.
Comments from author:
Thanks, m'dear! It's all about the Winchester! *heh*
Review By [anonyMouse] • Date [20 Jul 09] • Not Rated
WHy is he running? Surely he realises that the Council could help? Surely Willow could whip up something to help Dean? And they could help look for the demon? At least Xander's seeing him for who he is. WIll he track Andrew down? How did John find him and why did he never contact him?
Comments from author:
So many good questions and I hope I'll be able to adequately answer them in the next chapter :) Thanks for the review!
Review By [Kirallie] • Date [9 Jul 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Oh now there is a cliffhanger. Very nice. You got the story writing all down too- yay, should an interesting one at that! Hope you update soon! Continue ASAP! WRITE NOW!
Comments from author:
LOL! Thanks again and I'm working on it!
Review By [Kristal] • Date [16 Feb 09] • Not Rated
I am seriously loving this fic of yours! I am demanding more! :-) I have always loved Andrew, and have been upset that quite a lot of authors 'type-cast' him as the inept gay man, so I am really really really loving your portrayal of Andrew here. I'm glad he isn't inept, but surprisingly deceptive! And if he is still gay, please don't make him the stereotype gay that is just frustrating to read please! And holy cow! I am dying to see why Bobby called him!!! It must be something serious, so you had better get your butt, muse, plot bunnies, etc. in gear, cuz I WANT MORE SOON! please? :-) Pretty please with an Andrew on top? ;-)
Comments from author:
With an Andrew on top? heh There's an image I wasn't prepared for 8D lol I'm workin on it, doll, I'm workin' on it. ;)