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Review of chapter "The Meeting" from Oxnate
Review:
Just letting you know that I like this and am tracking it in case you ever decide to come back to it.
Review By [Oxnate] • Date [16 Aug 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Meeting" from misdom
Review:
I really like where this is going. Please write more :)
Review By [misdom] • Date [20 Dec 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "A Place called Home" from (Recent Donor)christytrekkie
Review:
Hmmm, interesting start.I decided to start reading the other dollhouse fics after I finished my own. This is the most intriguing. on to next chap. :)
Review By [(Recent Donor)christytrekkie] • Date [15 Sep 09] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Meeting" from (Current Donor)RngrThorne
Review:
I'm looking forward to seeing where this goes.
Review By [(Current Donor)RngrThorne] • Date [18 Aug 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Meeting" from batzulger
Review:
Great stuff. After seeing "Epitaph One" I can picture the dark Paul a lot more easily. This fic has a lot of good bits.
Review By [batzulger] • Date [18 Aug 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Contacting Contacts" from draconis
Review:
Very good chapter. Interesting to see Ballard go a little bit dark. Definitely good and necessary info, but must admit I'm looking forward to more exciting and intriguing things happening.

I like the White Witch usage, but feel it was a mistake to setup a meet at the Hyperion. Should have been neutral territory. Were I Ballard, I'd never agree to meet in a private setting that is likely controlled by the other party. Were I Willow, I wouldn't want a meet anywhere near a property that could be even remotely tied to them. (for example, I would expect the Senior Partners/Wolfram and Hart have some hooks into the Dollhouse and/or the investigation, and they know who owns the Hyperion and about the Council, the Scoobies and Willow.)
Review By [draconis] • Date [18 Apr 09] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Contacting Contacts" from AllenPitt
Review:
a meeting at last. That should be fun. Paul will have a tough time believing not only in the DH, but in identical twins on top of that.
Meanwhile if Willow sees "Dr. Saunders" she's going to have a lot of questions, too. Should be fun.
Comments from author:
thanks...yeah i think i am gonna enjoy writing the next chapter.
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [18 Apr 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Contacting Contacts" from TouchoftheWind
Review:
Wonderful
Comments from author:
Thank you!
Review By [TouchoftheWind] • Date [18 Apr 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Contact" from (Recent Donor)RavenWoodbane
Review:
i just started reading this .....and can i say u awsome much u so got me hooked
Comments from author:
Your welcome... also, y'know... thanks!!!!!
Review By [(Recent Donor)RavenWoodbane] • Date [18 Apr 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Contact" from thesithspawn
Review:
Great start, can't wait to see where you go with this next:)
Keep up the good work and update soon please!
Comments from author:
thank you... trying to update when i have time, but the essays and the revising and the exams are getting in the way.

Thank you for reading and reviewing!
Review By [thesithspawn] • Date [9 Apr 09] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Contact" from PATM
Review:
I've been putting off reading this story because I am addicted to fiction with lots of chapters. My name is Pat and I am
an addict. I apologize for waiting to review until now since the wait is well worth it. I say don't wait Faith is awesome
here and all the players are stand outs. The Riley moment was confusing, wouldn't he be in the know about something? Either that or there was some interaction left out of his inquiry.
There are some more of those moments prior to that but I charged past those. I'm loving the story.
Comments from author:
I'm like that too... i always look for long fics... less time waiting for someone to update... which people (including myself) can take forever to do.

Riley is difficult. He is a soldier, whilst he wants to help Buffy and the gang, if he is told to back off by someone he respects he probably will. That chapter was more about the people high up not liking the council and that they will not go out of their way to help them. there probably will be some involvement in later chapters.

I am going to try and tie all the loose ends together... but not just now... but thank you for reviewing, i am glad to hear that you like the story!
Review By [PATM] • Date [24 Mar 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "A Place called Home" from (Past Donor)FaithSummers
Review:
I just had to stop and say - yay - someone else has read 'Go Ask Malice'! Ok, back to reading now. Thanks for posting :)
Comments from author:
Go Ask Malice was probably my favourite of the Buffy World books... so i say 'yay' back to you!
Review By [(Past Donor)FaithSummers] • Date [24 Mar 09] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Contact" from Thedruid
Review:
Hey, great story so far, and alot of cloak and dagger with everyone keeping everyone else in the dark. But I think contact could have gone better in this chapter. Both Ballard and Willow fell into very sterotypical roles of hard-headed agent and cocky hacker. And I'm not advocateing a full reveal, but Willow could of said that she was from The Council, even go into a monoglouge about a unspoken truce between her and legminiate agencies in the government (her hacking is a good watch-dog for black-bag operations as long as she informs legiminate government branches and the black-bags don't have anything to do with The Council's area, let legminiate government take care of it. And as part of The Council, she would have diplomatic immunity, and good defenses if any of those black-bags come after her. So her hacking is knowen to the higher-ups, but a blind eye is often turned to it.) At the very least she could have told Ballard about Echo and Faith being twins. Instead she just announces her presense, brazanly tells Ballard what laws she broke, and then disappears. Not a good way to build trust. And if Ballard tries to strong-arm Council personell, I don't think Willow and others in The Council will take it well. I'd even argue that she is minpluateing the stituation to strong-arm Ballard into 'helping' them.

Basically, this story is great so far with the PTBs (eartly ones anyway) keeping information from eachother just because they can (or just professionl parnoia), but Willow, Ballard, and Faith have good reasons to be working together, and haveing them play the same game on their level is just dragging on the plot and keeping everything in stagant. And until that changes, I don't think the plot in this story will really advance at all, just be more of 'They know this, and another know this, and a 3rd party knows this, but won't tell either of the other two because of X'.
Comments from author:
I will admit that i was not completely satisfied with this chapter, i thought it seemed a little rushed.

However, I see Ballard as very suspicious of the Council, almost like they are part of the Dollhouse. Remember he doesn't know that Faith has a twin, to him Faith/Caroline are the same person, and since she seems to work for both companies, it is not a stretch for anyone to assume that they are linked together. Consequently I didn't want Willow to mention anything than the bare minimum, he will find out soon, but not straight away. I don't see Willow or any of the Scoobies particularly enthusiastic at the idea of working with government agencies or the military, especially after the Initiative. She has too much on her plate with the running of an international organization as well as the ordinary day to day demons, thus i find it highly unlikely that she could find the time to hack into agencies, (when she doesn't need to for her own or the council's sake) to tell them about any problems they have, and still have a social life.

With Willow's magical skills combined with her hacking ability, i seriously doubt that she is often or ever caught. They may notice someone has hacked onto their systems, but i don't believe they would be able to track the activity back to her. The_White_Witch is known in some circles, but not as the hacker called Willow Rosenberg.

This first meeting was not really about trust, just letting him know he is not alone. As far as the Council is concerned, they believe that they can get to the Dollhouse without Ballard, but using him might make it quicker for them in the long run. They want Ballard to know that if they do work for them, it won't be done through the official channels and he is not in control of them. He can't do what he did to Lubov - threaten them until he gets what he wants. If the connection does work out, the Council will be working with him, not for him.

And I think Willow can be cocky when she wants to be, she knows she can't get caught through the conventional methods that are available to Ballard, so she is quite brazen with the fact that she has broken the law. Throughout the BTVS 1-7 years, they pretty much did everything - they stole, they killed, they bribed, they hacked, they lied to the police and used magic to control them, etc... They have problem with breaking the rules when they need to. And as for Ballard, this case is very personally to him and he does seem very rough around the edges, (e.g. when he was interviewing the Dollhouse client in episode 6 - he wants everything to go his way and he prepared to make a 'scene' when it doesn't).


I do actually have the next 20 or so chapters planned out, mostly in quite a basic form, but the plot will expand. Of course as I have already stated, writing a story based on a incomplete series is always hard, especially since I want to keep as close to the original Dollhouse series as possible. I have obviously left gaps in the future chapters to make way for new information that we will get from the future episodes, and not everything is set in stone. Ballard, and the Scoobies will get together, and they will work together, but be patient, it won't be long, but i think they both need to make their own way for a while, so that I can include the new bits that we have learnt, such as Mellie being an active.

But, on a happier note, I glad you like the story, it's always nice when you get good reviews - makes you want to write more. I am sorry if I have bored you with this very long comment, but it's just that I feel the need to justify why I did things this way. If I seem hostile, it was not intended, I welcome criticism - how else will I improve?

So once again, thank you for the review. Please keep reading and reviewing!
Review By [Thedruid] • Date [24 Mar 09] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Contact" from sciphy
Review:
I kinda like that mellie was an active, if only because that would mean that plus size is someone's fantasy, but I liked her.....*pouting*
Comments from author:
i know, right? i thought it was very good as i was kinda disappointed that she wouldn't be an active, like Whedon said at the beginning of the season...

But yeah, i love the fact that she is an active, but she is hardly 'big' is she? It's nice that she is not just another stick figure, but still, they could have had more of an effort in finding someone bigger. She is incredibly pretty which is probably why they chose her, but still...

can't wait for Friday's episode where she starts remembering...

i will be using her as an active (probably), as i want to stick as closely to joss's story as possible, its just kinda hard since this is written as the story is being shown, i can't go too far ahead in case i disrupt the plot.
Review By [sciphy] • Date [24 Mar 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Contact" from AllenPitt
Review:
He'll get really weirded out meeting Faith. Then again they'd better hurry up or he'll be suspended for shooting that cop etc...and getting beat up by Echo.... more evidence she's a slayer I suppose. Might be fun if "Fred" is investigating and is the 'inside man'...
Comments from author:
yeah... i find the fight he had with echo kinda slayer-ish, she seemed abnormally strong.

i doubt i will include Fred in that way as in my story she has 'become' Illyria, also why would she not share her info with the council prior to this?

Thanks for the review though! Keep reading!
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [24 Mar 09] • Not Rated
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