You have provided a good balance with a couple of good fun chapters and then a serious one. Joyce does seem to be aware of the difficulties Dawn would face at school due to her fairy wings. Still her pop out claws should help to keep the bullies away! Or maybe it is time to consider home schooling for the whole bunch.
Review By [Gideon] • Date [10 Jan 10] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Your first three chapters were some of the funniest stuff I've read. Now in this update the fun and games are over and we are feeling Joyce's fear and pain. I hope the Scoobies can eventually make her feel better about the situation "her" kids are in. Very nice job with Joyce's character and voice. I almost hope that Ethan has been evaporated because I don't think good things would happen to him if Joyce ever gets her hands on him. I think your story is wonderful and I can't wait for more.
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [20 Oct 09] • Not Rated
Even if a previous reviewer claims it doesn't work, I think this is a great story. I thought so when you first posted it up, and I still think so after this latest chapter.
My favorite scenes involved Xander and Morgan at the school, and the "Verily!" line later on lol. I wonder how things will change with Xander and the others. How will he cope with his new appearance? How will Morgan and Dawn cope with their own changes? Will they meet any other interesting people?
The writing is well thought out, and structured in such a way that after the first few paragraphs one tends to forget that they are reading. In my case, this only happens with stories I really enjoy. It is a very difficult thing for an author to manage, drawing someone into their imagery this way.
Please keep up the great work.
Regards,
--Tremerid
Review By [tremerid] • Date [19 Oct 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Assuming the screwdriver that the Monks retroactively inserted her into reality as Buffy's sister, she would stil have only been ten years old during the events of Halloween.
Comments from author:
i beg to differ, when Dawn first turned up, she was fifteen...maybe fourteen. So it could be argued that she would have turned up that age no matter when she was 'retroactively screwed in'.
Review of chapter "It All Seemed Like A Good Idea At the Time" from Addlcove
Review:
Fantastic story, please do update soon.
looking forward to seeing what kinda trouble the trio will get into.
Review By [Addlcove] • Date [5 Sep 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "A Right Senseless Tit" from lordamnesia
Review:
Great start to a Halloween change story. Keep up the good work!
Review By [lordamnesia] • Date [17 Jul 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "It All Seemed Like A Good Idea At the Time" from felicia
Review:
Nice start. I haven't read a story with this idea yet. Very good so far. Question tho: is Xander going to be paired with Cordy? I hope not. She treated him badly; even before the Kiss. If you are going to pair them I'll read it because I'm curious as to how you'll write it. Thanks for sharing.
Review By [felicia] • Date [14 Jul 09] • Rating [8 out of 10]
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