excellent read. thank you for the fine read.

Interesting story and chapter.... I have not read very many star wars fic after a certain point but so far this is pretty good

You need to put it thru another edit, but I gotta admit this is damn good!

BWAH-HA-HA! Die Evil Skywalker! BWAH-HA-HA!

AWESOME GREAT STORY

Scruffy looking... good for grins and giggles :) not that giggles come hard when I'm this intoxicated. And at some point I'll be able to type a word without retyping three times to get it right. But not anytime tongight.

This is a really wicked story. If I weren't so ducking frunk, I'd be more verbose, but you really don't want me to go there.

Expect more reviews as I work through the tale... and get less drunk. BTW American Honey is kickass liquor.

This is a great story. I can't wait to read the sequel. Then only fault I can find is that you tend to repeat information that you have already covered. (for example; the information about the planets in the Minos cluster & explaining the reasons why Biije is a pacifist) In a sequel, this is understandable. However, in the same story it can make it repetitive and occasionally annoying.

All in all though, this is a great read and I know it is one that I will be rereading many times in the future.

Really nice story. I do find myself rather disliking the zeltrons though. I just tend to hate /any/ scene in a fic where a character is introduced and almost immediately tries to jump into bed with another character. Nor do I like it when characters 'wear down' another character into liking them. They come across as basically forcing the people they like into doing what they want. I realize this wasn't what you were going for, but it's how it came across to me. Basically I hate any scene where a character is "I'll get my way and you have no choice in the matter." Nor do I like the part of people basically having to give them a taste or be stuck with a stalker. Basically a lot of little things that basically add up to me not liking their attitude. I mean it was kinda cute with the twin brother, as at least they had the whole force connection and her dreaming about him for years. With Danni she basically tricked and forced them into a relationship. All of this adding up to me almost hating the damn zeltrons. I mean their whole attitude seems more about getting the objects of their desires in bed then actual romance or love. I also hate when characters treat sex as no big deal.

Anyway, sorry for ranting, I love the rest of the story, but the 'romance' could use some work. Heck, I don't really consider anything the zeltrons have done as being romantic. The other pairings are pretty good though.

re-reading the series since its been so long since i read it. caught a reference i dont think i did before, at least i think its a reference anyway, i havent read any of the star wars books, my knowledge consists of the movies and the kotr games(two of the best games ever created, in my opinion). any way, the reference im refering to is your comment about the priests of bendu being the only ones who could safely navigate hyperspace in the beginning. im assuming that that is a veiled reference to the Dune series by Frank Herbert. if so, then you mispelled the bendu part, lol, the practice by the bene geserit was called Prana Bindu, not Prana Bendu. either way, good story so far.

Nope. i ment Bendu. the refrence is pure Star Wars in fact in one of the most erily drafts George Lucas made. The name was not Jedi it was knight of bendu in that draft he changed it again and again untill he gott it right and made Star Wars a New Hope part 4. Later other writers of star wars books toyed with the name and used it as the original name of the force using tradition that later became the Jedi knights.

A story I found on another site but one I loved alot and its sequel, very well written and very well created. the pairing is a unique one so I loved that even more.

david

Thanks. :D

Du har gjort ett utmärkt job med den här berättelsen och det kommer att bli intressant att se om nästa berättelse i serien är lika bra.

Translation: You have done a great job with this story and it will be interesting to see if the next story in the series is just as good.

::Startar att läsa nästa berättelse i serien::
::Starts reading the next story in the series::

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Men stumble over pebbles, never over mountains.
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Jag gillar vad jag har läst hittills av berättelsen.
This story is looking pretty good so far.

::Continues reading the story::
::Fortsätter att läsa berättelsen::

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Men stumble over pebbles, never over mountains.
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PS. Föredrar du att jag lämnar mina kommentarer på svenska eller ska jag forsätta skriva mina kommentarer på engelska? Om du föredrar svenska så kan jag lämna en engelsk översättning för dom trevliga personerna som modererar och sköter TTH.

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ENGLISH TRANSLATION: Do you prefer that I use Swedish when posting my reviews or do you prefer that I keep using English when posting my reviews? If you prefer Swedish I could make it easier for the nice people who moderates and controlls TTH by leaving an English translation

Tack så mycket. Det är väldight rolight att höra att det finns svenska läsare som gillar vad jag skriver. (Det är bra för mitt ego att höra sådant. Och roligt att få veta att det finns mer av oss svenskar där ute.)
Translation: Tank you so much. It is lots of fun hearing from a Swedish reader who likes what i write. (Its good for my pride to hear that and fun to know that there are more of us Sweds out there.)

(Note from Beta: I think Hatten would like it on Swedish, but I wouldn't mind a Translation *g*)

Very interesting story, going to go read the sequel now!

thank you and have fun with the sequel

> "I wish I was a girl." He said, just jok­ing. Be­hind him a
> vengeance demon gig­gled. "Wish grant­ed..."

:) So when can we expect *that* story?

sadly not in the near future, mybe Hatten or myself will make a little sidestory out of it but no promises.