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Review of chapter "The Anniversary." from (Recent Donor)nerfherder
Review:
Wow! Great speech! Got any more?
Review By [(Recent Donor)nerfherder] • Date [11 Dec 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Anniversary." from firedrakegirl
Review:
This is great!
Comments from author:
Thanks... and I really do plan on finishing it one day.
Review By [firedrakegirl] • Date [16 Nov 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Anniversary." from Jhawksun
Review:
Great beggining. Would love to read more.
Comments from author:
Thanks, I'm working on the next part in the three shot and will hopefully have it up soon.
Review By [Jhawksun] • Date [13 May 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Anniversary." from Elleria
Review:
Amazing story.
Comments from author:
Thanks.
Review By [Elleria] • Date [21 Mar 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Anniversary." from BillieBog
Review:
Great start and good premise. Hope there is more.

Thanks,
BB
Comments from author:
Thanks. There will be more, it's planned as a three-shot.
Review By [BillieBog] • Date [15 Mar 09] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Anniversary." from (Current Donor)dogbertcarroll
Review:
Impressive work.
Review By [(Current Donor)dogbertcarroll] • Date [14 Mar 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Anniversary." from thundever
Review:
Great chap, very sad and poignant, wondering what happened during and after Halloween, please continue with this, brilliant idea.
Comments from author:
Glad you liked it.
Review By [thundever] • Date [13 Mar 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Anniversary." from VillageOrchid
Review:
Very interesting vingette. It echos some of the other ff stories posted here.... some of which I have read and some I have not.
Comments from author:
Glad you liked it.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [13 Mar 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Anniversary." from missinglink
Review:
Nice. The somber tone plays well and am curious if you are intending this to be more than a one off type story.

Only nagging thing is that the phrasing of some of Xander's speech comes out garbled. You might want to read over it and actually read it aloud to yourself as some of the phrasing and in one or two spots the words themselves don't make sense as a sentence spoken. It's not bad persay, but more disjointed or maybe somewhat jarring as you try and read it. The words kind of jerk around a bit (best I can think of phrasing it as they seem to shift well as you move thru the sentence).

Again, solid concept and decent to good execution. With a little revision to the wording or phrasing in the speech it could be better though. Thanks for the interesting idea and hope there is more to come. Later.
Comments from author:
Thanks. It's planned as a three-shot story.
Review By [missinglink] • Date [13 Mar 09] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Anniversary." from HeatherDee
Review:
What they said. :-)

One thing though: If you do choose to expand upon this it would be better to do it in further stories as opposed to more chapters. This one feels complete as is and it stands well on its own.
Comments from author:
Thanks.

My plan when I started writing this was three chapters, each written from a different perspective. If I do more with this 'verse it will be made into its own story
Review By [HeatherDee] • Date [13 Mar 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Anniversary." from grd
Review:
Please do not leave it like that. The tale begs to be told. More please.
Comments from author:
No worries there is more. It won't be a huge epic but there are still a couple more chapters to go.
Review By [grd] • Date [13 Mar 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Anniversary." from uten
Review:
Wow. Simply amazing. Very well written. This simply draws you in to the emotion and sensation of the story. Very well done.

Except for one sentence that confused me enough to knock me out of it.

"The sight of those I fought with fall beside me will forever be etched in my memory."

I have an idea what you meant, but it confused me enough to knock me out of the place the story had taken me to. Apart from that, awesome, and I look forward to re-reading it once it's been fixed, and I also look forward to additional chapters letting us know why Joyce is still alive, and maybe how the others are doing, and most importantly, does Xander have a spouse/lover and who is it.. *grin*
Comments from author:
Glad you liked it.

Thanks for pointing out the error. It was supposed to be 'those I fought with falling beside me'. I fixed it now. This (along with the other errors pointed out) is why I should wait to post things I write when sleep deprived and, more importantly, caffeine deprived.
Review By [uten] • Date [13 Mar 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Anniversary." from CPTSkip
Review:
Interesting take on Helloween. I see Joyce made it, but I am bothered by neither Buffy nor Willow being mentioned. I look forward to more of your story to see what happened after Bloody Ethan Raynes exposed the world to the influence of Chaos.
Comments from author:
Thanks. You'll find out what happened to Buffy and Willow later on. This opening chapter, however, was Xander's moment to shine.
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [13 Mar 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Anniversary." from angelkitty
Review:
wow just wow, that was great.
Comments from author:
Thank you.
Review By [angelkitty] • Date [13 Mar 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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