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Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Raider
i love the highlander series, I believe this will be an excellent blend of harry potter/highlander.
Review By [Raider] • Date [11 Aug 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Bobboky
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [23 May 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Bluesnowman
Great start.
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Review By [Bluesnowman] • Date [18 Mar 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from MistofRainbows
Hmm on second look the rest of the chapter looks good. Though I still think he wouldn't have body bound harry if he had sensed the immortal. Still I wonder about wizards at large knowing about immortals. Seems like he could also have just tossed himself off the castle as well. Also if he was immortal the long flight back should have cured the effect of the poison. Ah well such is life.
Comments from author:
But he DID! In HPB, right before Draco came in. In order to protect Harry, he used the body bind while Harry was wearing the cloak. I even looked it up, just to make sure I hadn't made a mistake when I re-read that part.

And... Dammit. You're right. The Quickening would have eliminated the poison by then. *sigh* Should have caught that one.
Review By [MistofRainbows] • Date [17 Mar 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Rob
I like this so far! But stuck as a malnourished 16 year old with bad eyesight, not fun.

But go H/Hr

Comments from author:
Ah, but the 'malnourished' bit can be fixed! Immortals may not age, but they can build muscle. Or, they can in my little universe, anyway.

Glad you're enjoying it, and look out for a bit of editing in the first chapter. It's been pointed out that I missed a few things, so... Hehe.
Review By [Rob] • Date [17 Mar 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from BrotherBludgeon
Wow... Yeah, that's a fairly important author's note there, buddy.

Seriously, I normally skim those things, but now I'm glad I actually went back and gave it a second look. Trust me, I have no problems with Harry and Hermione as a pairing. I prefer it, even. It's just... I'm having a little bit of an issue with the whole "Just assume they've been dating this whole time" thing.

I've read your other stuff and, so far, I have to believe you're better than this. Harry being involved in a stable romantic relationship, with ANYONE, from the age of 13 cannot be something that has no far-reaching consequences. Things would've happened differently in every one of those years from third to sixth, as well as in every summer in between. Maybe Cedric wouldn't have died. Maybe Sirius wouldn't have. Maybe he'd have learned Occulmency much earlier, meaning Arthur Weasley would've died. Maybe he'd have tossed that Potions book from Half Blood Prince and never learned Sectumsempra, something that helped save his life later on. These are possiblities you just can't write off as saying "everything else is the same, Harry and Hermione are just together now, deal with it."

At the VERY least, can you do the flashback thing? Take us back to them getting together in third year, the Second Task and the Yule Ball from fourth year, them snogging after DA meetings in fifth year, shagging after winning the Quidditch Cup in sixth year, show us anything that gives any kind of weight to the fact that they're going out aside from just telling us, please! The fact that I read all the way to the end of the first chapter and nothing about Harry's (or Hermione's) thoughts or actions suggested even remotely that they were together, is what I'd call a bad sign. That's why I went back to check the author's note in the first place, to see if you mentioned an eventual pairing. An EVENTUAL pairing. As in I hadn't seen any in-story evidence of a CURRENT pairing.

D'you see where I'm going with this?

I don't want to be negative, I really don't. I've read your other stuff, and I think it's good. Occasionally great. I just want to see this fic as something equally well thought out, equally well done. It has that potential.

I hope to see good many more good things in the future. I know you have it in you.

Blessed be,
-Brother Bludgeon
Comments from author:
*looks highly offended.* Well, of COURSE I'm gonna use flashbacks. I'm not THAT bad. I just had to get the beginning out of the way. That's the hardest part, after all.

And it wasn't so much that the relationship didn't have consequences, it was more... All the major events happened the same way. The personal interactions were different, I.E., Harry didn't have to worry about a date for the Yule Ball, Ron got insanely jealous of Hermione's boyfriend in Third year instead of Fourth, Hermione never had the UST with Ron, so on and so forth.

But... Dammit. I had things I was gonna add, to make the relationship more obvious... I just flippin' forgot. Oddly, I have an excuse. I'm in the process (A long, LONG process) of moving. I'm a little preoccupied. I'll just go back and edit those in. Thanks for the alert.

Bear with me a little. ^_^
Review By [BrotherBludgeon] • Date [17 Mar 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from MistofRainbows
Okay the disclaimer was bad but okay sure what ever your story. The first paragrah ruined it. The kurgan is so evil Dumbledore would have felt do remorse in tossing him off the castle. Unless I'm missing like a whole another story or something that you wrote in back story. Couldn't even get through the rest of it. While I like the idea of a Harry is a highlander story that start just hurts a lot.
Comments from author:
Well, if I recall correctly, Dumbledore was weakened by the potion they used to get at the locket in Voldemort's cave. Kurgan showed up, rather than Malfoy, and the rest is written.

You're right, Dumbledore would have definitely tossed him out a window, had he been able to. But, by that point, he could barely stand.
Review By [MistofRainbows] • Date [17 Mar 09] • Not Rated
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