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Review of chapter "The 11th Year: Part 2" from JinaSolo
More please!

This si a very good story that I want to read more of!
Review By [JinaSolo] • Date [16 Aug 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The 11th Year: Part 2" from blueyez
Hi, i hope you havent abandoned this story! i cant wait till she gets to Hogwarts!!!!!!
Review By [blueyez] • Date [24 Dec 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The 11th Year: Part 1" from AbscondingCascade
I just have one question to ask of you, Why Did you do this? WHY!?

[Edit] I'm calmer now so I can explain why I dislike certain aspects of Raider's Descent. The reason why I freaked out is because, your character Amanda Summers Croft is expressing quite a few Common Mary Sue Traits (if you don't believe me read Now I understand how hard it can be to create an original character, while ensuring that they don't become a Mary Sue *looks at bin full of ripped up fan fiction ideas*. Now if you just calmly step back from you Fic and look at it in an objective and logical way; I believe you may understand why I am typing these things. Hopefully you haven't been offended by what I have just typed and hope you understand that I am just trying to help you.
Comments from author:
I take it you didn't like it? if i may ask what don't you like about it?

Review By [AbscondingCascade] • Date [5 Apr 09] • Rating [1 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The 11th Year: Part 1" from AllenPitt
Spell or no, Buffy is going to be Real Upset that basically everyone she cares about knew about this for years... Might be interesting if she dies at end of S5 per schedule then when brought back, the 'curse' is broken... and/or that Dawn is able to know about it...
Comments from author:
You're right she is going to be pissed, which will add lots of drama for later. About her dying and figuring it out well, lets say you read my mind.

Thanks for continuing reading and any ideas or questions are gladly welcome!

Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [4 Apr 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The 11th Year: Part 1" from mithrilandtj
I love this story!

I can't wait til she hits Hogwarts (what year is it anyway?)

The wizarding sheeple won't know what happened. Albus may even get shocked *gasp*
Comments from author:
Thanks so much and thanks for reviewing.

The year is 2001, i went back and added that after i saw that you had asked.

I also loaded a link to see the swords angel got her.

And yes there will be shockage of the wizarding world.

thanks again!
Review By [mithrilandtj] • Date [4 Apr 09] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Being a Croft" from AllenPitt
Interesting premise--one problem is, you're loading her up with powers and 'specialness' --probably needs some weaknesses or disadvantages to compensate. Maybe there's a prophecy & the council has her on its hit list? (ie if you find the person in this prophecy, kill them!) . If Buffy encountered her, and nobody can tell her who she is, she wouldn't hold back. Stuff like that. OR at some point B. gets her memory back and gets really really angry
Maybe you could have her in Slytherin --that should cause her some problems.
Comments from author:
First let me say thanks for reviewing. I know it seems sorta fast pace and she has all of this powers so soon, but she won't get the slayer powers until later. Plus she will be in Slytherin. I've worked out a twist where Buffy finally finds out and there will be a prophecy.

Even with all her gifts though, she can't do normal things like play sports b/c it would be so unfair.

She is going into Slytherin, and she loves technology and muggles, so there will be her fighting against the sheep that is the wizarding world. The council doesn't know she exist but both spike and angel know that if they did they would want to experiment on her so they keep her uncover the best they can.

The story will slow down some once she gets to hogwarts.

like i said before thanks for reviewing.
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [3 Apr 09] • Not Rated
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