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Review of chapter "Epilogue" from ephiny
Review:
Wow! I've always thought that Luke, Lorelai, and Rory would make a great family, and Christopher was a world-class jerk! Love it!
Comments from author:
Thanks. If I couldn't have Luke for myself, he might as well be Lorelai's (deep sigh). As for Christopher...words cannot *begin* to express how much I hate him!
Review By [ephiny] • Date [22 Jun 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from zigpal
Review:
Great ending. And my imagination is good enough to know that Luke and Lorelai didn't leave the room for days *g*
Comments from author:
And probably not the bed much either. Course, I suppose there's room for imagination in that as well.
Review By [zigpal] • Date [15 Apr 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 7: The Talk, Part II (Luke & Lorelai)" from RevDorothyL
Review:
As you say -- it's your story, and your version of Lorelai and Luke, so more power to you!
Comments from author:
You have given me my 20th review so now I will post the epilogue. Thanks.
Review By [RevDorothyL] • Date [15 Apr 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 7: The Talk, Part II (Luke & Lorelai)" from zigpal
Review:
Great update. It is your story and AU, so however OOC the characters are, it doesn't matter since you aren't in true canon. That being said, I'm loving your portrayal of Lorelai, explaining why her relationships didn't last long, and I can't wait to see your sappy ending.
Comments from author:
Thanks, it's a quick chappie to tie up the loose end.
Review By [zigpal] • Date [15 Apr 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 6: The Talk, Part I (Lorelai & Rory)" from zigpal
Review:
Great update. I loved the reasoning behind Rory pushing her mom for an answer and was hoping she would just blurt out that he was still the immature sixteen year old that got her pregnant, even though I knew she wouldn't. Our first images of the new family are coming, and I can't wait to see them.
Comments from author:
I felt it was ironic that both Gilmore girls were being polite to Christopher for the sake of the other one.
Review By [zigpal] • Date [15 Apr 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 6: The Talk, Part I (Lorelai & Rory)" from feekh
Review:
I think the bit of Rory imagining introducing Luke as her Dad was my favourite.
I also like her thought processes of pushing and pushing at her mom to get the truth out of her.
Good work.
Comments from author:
Thank you. Given the men in her life, it's no surprise that Luke would win that title - even if she started getting closer to her grandfather.

As I was doing it, I was worried that it went on too long, but tried using the dialogue for that episode as much as possible.
Review By [feekh] • Date [15 Apr 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 5: Rory's Thoughts" from RevDorothyL
Review:
Good for Rory -- as you say, she's a smart kid, and the reality of Christopher always fell far short of the minimum standards for fatherhood, no matter how much a loving child might wish it to be otherwise.
Comments from author:
No kidding. I mean the fact that it took until episode 14/15 to even *see* the guy, should say something!
Review By [RevDorothyL] • Date [14 Apr 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 5: Rory's Thoughts" from zigpal
Review:
Great update. I have to admit your Rory is probably closer to what someone as Rory would think. She loves her father, but she would also know him. Well done. The girls one-on-one should be fun to read.
Comments from author:
I realize that she's his daughter and had sort of glossed over his faults in the hope that he'd get together with Lorelai. But at the age of 16, I think she started to see that him in their lives = trouble. She just might have taken longer to let go of the fantasy.
Review By [zigpal] • Date [14 Apr 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 4: The Morning After" from RevDorothyL
Review:
It had to be said (or at least thought!).

Christopher always got off WAY too lightly on the show . . . and don't even get me started on that final season, with NOBODY calling him on the real reason he was upset by Lorelai's letter of recommendation for Luke (because it rubbed his nose in the fact that Luke had always been much more of a father to Rory than Christopher -- and not because it indicated Lorelai's feelings for Luke as a lover/partner).
Comments from author:
Heck, *Morey* was a better father to Rory than Christopher was! May he die a thousand painful deaths, the scum.
Review By [RevDorothyL] • Date [14 Apr 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 4: The Morning After" from zigpal
Review:
Two great updates. You gave us Luke and Lorelai kisses and a desperate man trying to cling to something since his life was going into the crapper. You nailed Christopher's character since he was always trying to make grand gestures. I can't wait to see what Rory thinks of all this/
Comments from author:
I'll admit right now that she'll be OOC. But only because I think she's smarter than she was on the show during this episode.
Review By [zigpal] • Date [14 Apr 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 4: The Morning After" from feekh
Review:
Is it selfish of me to say that I liked those two chapters much better? I like Lorelai staying strong and not letting Christopher get to her. Like she says he was her first in many things and will always have a spot in her heart, but it always came across on the show for me that knows that full well and abuses it shamelessly. He's never around except when he wants something or wants to boast. Not to mention how he abuses the situation when she comes to him at the end of season six. I was just about ready to castrate him at that point. Lowlife scum!
Anyhoo on to the technical stuff. Incorporating her thoughts into the writing makes it flow better, then again that is my opinion. Although you missed removing two asterisks near the top. Feel free to tell me to butt out and mind my own business by the way. :)
Comments from author:
Absolutely not, I liked them better too.

Tell me about it. I kept hoping for a runaway hot dog cart to mow him down. Or maybe one of those pianos to fall on his smarmy little head.

Another bonus of the new version is that the thoughts that are left seem more important this way. And the asterisks are there for the A/Ns at the bottom.
Review By [feekh] • Date [14 Apr 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3: Fun With Paint" from RevDorothyL
Review:
I can't tell you how satisfying I'm finding this! This is definitely the way that evening SHOULD haven ended! Looking forward to reading more, whenever you're able to post!
Comments from author:
Well, since all I'm doing is editing and revising, the rest of the updates *should* come pretty quickly.
Review By [RevDorothyL] • Date [13 Apr 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 1: Fallout" from Aeryn
Review:
Hey, I always liked Luke and Lorelei so its nice to see this fic. Keep going.
Comments from author:
Thanks. As long as they aren't overly angsty, they are one of my favorite couples. It shouldn't take so long to get them together. Grrr.
Review By [Aeryn] • Date [13 Apr 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2: Forgive Me?" from zigpal
Review:
Great update. I'm loving the internal ramblings of both characters while the other is talking, and this way seems a better one, so stick with it. I can't wait to see what 'Paint fun' means.
Comments from author:
I edited it...again, hoping that *this* time works. I have to admit that *I* like it better this way.
Review By [zigpal] • Date [13 Apr 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 2: Forgive Me?" from feekh
Review:
You know, you honestly don't need to put their thoughts into words. It works perfectly well without that and to be honest the constant shifts between seeing into his head and her head (never mind the three-way mind meld in chapter one) are really disconcerting.
Pulling off an all-knowing narrator is really hard.
Having said that, I like the way this addresses some of my biggest problems with the Lorelai/Chris dynamic. I always pictured Lorelai as a strong female, until the writers on the show decided they needed her to be dumb/gullible or just plain naive to serve their plans.
Anyway, I feel the first two chapters would benefit from a rewrite where most thoughts are left unsaid or mentioned in the passive voice (much easier to pull off as well I find).
Promising beginning chapters though and I will definitely be tracking this to read on.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the critique. I hope my revisions meet with your approval.

And I agree with you that her inability to withstand Christopher just ticks me off! No matter *what* he does, she eventually forgives him. Makes me wonder if she'd even forgive abuse.
Review By [feekh] • Date [13 Apr 09] • Not Rated
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