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Review of chapter "50" from maxthehobbit
Review:
Wow this is so original and Faith as a little girl is just so adorable. She's really something else with her knowledge of things 7 year old girls shouldn't know, but she still gets a kick out of slaying like Big Faith. I hope the next installment in this series talks about where this one left off. The ending left it to the reader's imagination what would happen. After the first three chapters I was liking this so much I had to limit myself on how much I read. I could tell I was going to enjoy this story, so I read it over a period of four days, I planned on taking a week, but I just couldn't stay away. My girlfriend read this and just gushed about Faith sleeping with Mr Gordo and the pictures of little Faith were good too. Damn she's so homely she's cute and like a Caterpillar turns into a butterfly, she turned into a beautiful woman.
Thanks for writing and sharing this wonderful story!
Review By [maxthehobbit] • Date [15 Dec 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "50" from ChefJackButler
Review:
That was a sweet story. Though it makes me wonder what would have happened had the change been irreversible, and that no remnant of the old Faith had remained in the child's body. There's another story there. One of us might have to write it someday.
Review By [ChefJackButler] • Date [18 Nov 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "22" from Zarohk
Review:
In this chapter, Buffy is definitely suffering from perception bias. She clearly sees Faith's childness and abuse, but to someone who doesn't know the clues are not as clear as they seem.
Review By [Zarohk] • Date [1 Nov 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "21" from Zarohk
Review:
While Riley may be slightly overboard, I have to admit that Buffy and her mother are not the best people to deal with child-Faith. They should try and find a psychologist (one who specializing in dealing with abused kids if possible).
And also, from what we've learned about Faith's upbringing and associations (especially sex with violence):
1. It's strange that she ever had sex willingly and became as promiscuous as she did later on.
2. Her attempting to kill Xander after their one-night stand make a LOT more sense. A get-them-before-they-get-you move, as it were.
Review By [Zarohk] • Date [1 Nov 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "50" from DaedalusWorks
Review:
this is the third time I read this story ...
is moving, is emotional, and complete.

makes me remember why I started reading fanfiction.

very good job ...

Felicitaciones
Mr. Cardona (aka)
Werner Markus
Comments from author:
Thank you! wow, three times? I'm glad you enjoyed so much.
Review By [DaedalusWorks] • Date [14 Feb 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "11" from fandomoverload
Review:
Omg she heard. She heard
Review By [fandomoverload] • Date [24 Dec 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "10" from fandomoverload
Review:
OMG OMG! I am trying not to read comments cause well i want to be surprised. Right now Im gonna comment on every chapter. Ut Oh I just realized when this is. There is no Dawn. Faith could be Dawn. Instead of smmer's blood its slayer's blood. Oh my
Review By [fandomoverload] • Date [24 Dec 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "36" from ptbptb
Review:
Plot hole! Amy 'the rat' was much smaller than little Faith for a year or so (IIRC).
Review By [ptbptb] • Date [27 Jun 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "50" from lunalurker
Review:
Beautifully done, thank you. I suppose it is an obvious place to end it, despite me wanting to know more of what happened next.
Review By [lunalurker] • Date [5 Apr 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "36" from wswords
Review:
So Amy should be dead ~100x over by now, considering she turned herself into a mouse. You really would think they would mention that in the show. Seriously you make a plot point that Faith needs to be turned back (a totally valid thing to do), but you decide to do it in a way that makes no sense and contradicts cannon in several different ways. First shouldn't they have noticed Amy would have exploded by now, and why would Amy change herself into a rat in the first place if she would die within days. And why would Willow not tell something that is extremely relevant to the debate on what to do with Faith until so late; I mean Faith might have exploded by now according to your rules. Willow is not stupid, and she wouldn't wait until now to tell everyone. Also why didn't Anya mention this earlier if she knew. The whole reason for needing to change Faith back is just asinine, contradicting cannon on such an important point. Also how would someone who transformed into something larger get the additional mass, and if they were changed back would they explode. You say the matter is condensed putting stress on the body that is why they will eventually explode, but the stress of making something larger is just as great, except it is negative instead of positive, and you still have the problem of where that mass came from. It is like you don't realize air has mass since that is the logical place for the matter to go.

What is really bad about the way you did this however is you had a perfectly good way to make them need to change Faith back w/o having to contradict cannon at all. You could have said that when she changed her chakras were messed up in a way that would ultimately kill her, see same result without having to contradict cannon at all.

Other major complaint is that you have Riley being so much more paranoid than he should be but that is a small fry when compared to this absolutely stupid excuse for a plot point. This is very well done, which is actually why the stupidity of this last chapter made me write so much (this review is bigger than the rest of my reviews put together) about it. Do like your story though.

reply: I don't talk much IRL, that transitions into online as well, don't speak unless I feel something needs to be said.
Comments from author:
Though both Amy and Faith did change their bodies, what happened to Faith was not only unintentional, but also a curse of a kind. Magic is based on intent; a lot of what is intended by the user goes to influence its affects on the person it is used upon. Amy wasn't cursed, she turned herself into a rat to escape being burned at the stake. Since Amy used the spell on herself her spell would consider and account for her change in mass. A curse, either set on someone by another or, as Faith did, unintentionally set upon oneself, would be making the body forced into an unnatural state with no regard for physical limitations that would eventually harm her, as Anya and Willow described. Because Amy asked Hecate to help her in order for her to change, her protection of Amy lasts until she's turned back. The details of how this would occur only Amy would know.

For someone who is enjoying the story you certainly don't seem to seeing as how this is the one review you made, like twenty chapters into it, lol.
Review By [wswords] • Date [1 Sep 10] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "50" from Morgomir
Review:
Great story. Keep up the good work.
Review By [Morgomir] • Date [12 Jan 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "50" from MarcusSLazarus
Review:
Original idea, to say the least.

Your reasoning behind HOW the device did this to Faith when it originally just switched bodies was particularly well thought-out; a bit complicated to follow all that stuff you wrote about what charka point is response for what, but the depth of thought you put into it helped everything make sense even if the full implications of it were a bit complicated.

On a characterisation note, your exploration of the reasons for Giles's initial failure to reveal the full extent of Faith's past to the gang was very well thought-out and developed, while Riley's assessment of Faith- while possibly a bit excessive- clearly displays what, for me, was the character's main failing; automatically assuming the worst of everything he met that wasn't one hundred percent human or otherwise outside of his worldview (Such as the idea of ANY child knowing terms like what Faith uses when meeting him here)

On that topic, Child Faith proved to be a brilliant character, perfectly combining childish innocence with a dark history that no child should have to experience; she might be willing to argue with Buffy about whether or not cereal's alive and show an enthusiasm for superhero shirts, but at the same time she saw a miscarriage when she was only four and has a knowledge of sex that NO kid should be aware of at that age...

DAMN, that's one messed-up kid.

Kind of amusing character, though; her casual inquiries about personal relationships might demonstrate a disturbing knowledge of life that no child her age should possess, but the blunt way in which she brings up the topics in question is actually kind of amusing, while her later reaction to the knowledge of what she became is well planned-out and appears VERY believeable (Although I’m a bit ambiguous about Buffy’s insight into her reasoning for wanting to be ‘big’ again; I agree with the reasoning behind her motivation, but I’m just not certain if Buffy would have realised the ‘why’ of Faith’s actions at that point).

I still think Joyce shouldn’t have been QUITE so understanding about Faith’s initial reversion to child-status- this is the woman who kicked out her own DAUGHTER when she first learned about the Slayer thing; extreme circumstances or not, I still think she’d have a BIT of trouble believing that Faith is TOTALLY innocent after she’d been holding her prisoner-, but her later response to the discovery of Faith’s background made more sense.

As for the rest of the Scoobies...

All very well-done, really (And extra points for having Riley get dumped like that; I NEVER liked that guy).

All in all, a very well planned-out bit of work; keep it up!
Comments from author:
thank you very much for your detailed and honest review; all authors love when someone takes so much time to respond to what they've read.

As for the Chakra explanation, the idea was given to me by a friend, Lupo, and I simply applied his idea to the story and fleshed it out.

Giles and Riley proved difficult for me to write, as this is the first story I've ever written that had Riley as a character, let alone with such a large role. I do not like his character either and was not entirely satisfied with how I betrayed him but I suppose it was necessary for the plot, and I did try to keep him as ic as possible. I think I got a little better with him as the story continued; the first scene where he confronts Faith is a little rough.

Faith I slid into easily; it was no effort for me to write her and I enjoyed it very much, to the point that I hated writing scenes that did not have her in them. I would love to have some sort of opportunity to write another child Faith story, and I'm glad you think her characterization was well done.

Joyce, I can see your point with, I did probably make her a more likeable and understanding character than she was on TV. But I think Faith really needed that, huh? lol


Thank you very much!
Review By [MarcusSLazarus] • Date [8 Jan 10] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "50" from Dapsy
Review:
I do not want to write much... or anything, being to emotional right now, I just wanted to say that I cried. Thanks for writing this beautiful story Jinxy.
Review By [Dapsy] • Date [21 Sep 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "50" from Ansku
Review:
Touching :)
Comments from author:
Thank you :) I'm glad you thought so
Review By [Ansku] • Date [16 Sep 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "50" from Gideon
Review:
Great ending. I am so glad Faith came back.
Comments from author:
Yes, she just has to for it to come full circle, doesn't she? I'm glad you enjoyed
Review By [Gideon] • Date [16 Sep 09] • Rating [9 out of 10]
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