Review of chapter "Lost Love" from JustJesting
That's senseless. No explanation why the Charmed Ones even know Angel and it could have been virtually any one calling or dying. You could switch names without anyone noticing - as it stays a phone conversation and without any background, the caller stays anonymous and without character.
And why would Angel break down sobbing? He didn't when Buffy died - was the stress too much? I'm pretty sure he went on a journey during Buffy's absence and came back just in time to meet her alive again. So it couldn't have been the famous last straw...
It would have fit if this was the bone that's surrounded by the flesh of a real story. So the reader is left hanging, wondering if there was something he missed or should have known, more frustrated than entertained or touched.
Anyway, thanks for writing,
Just in Jest
Review By [JustJesting
] • Date [14 Nov 09] • Not Rated