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Review of chapter "chapter 5" from AXanFan
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I was interested to read a x-over with Kindred -- I've only watched a few episodes and read a few fics, but there seem to be some good characters that could lead to some really good stories.

Start with the mundane -- there seem to be several typos that can be a bit distracting, but it seems to be pretty easy to see what you really meant.

I feel like you have all of the BtVS characters acting "Out of Character", which is your right as the writer, but I'm not sure if it is intentional for your story or if you are struggling to write them. I have some concerns that the OOC behavior may indicate that many of the Scoobies are going "bad". I would hate to see that, but maybe it will work in your story.

One of the other reviewers mentioned not doing too many x-overs and I have to agree -- it gets confusing for the reader and I think it distracts from the main plot of the story. I would rather spend more time seeing how the characters interact in new situations.

I know it has been a while, but would love to see where you plan to take this -- what is going on with Xander and Cordy in the dream and what will happen with the coming battle.
Review By [AXanFan] • Date [16 Sep 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "chapter 5" from DarkFaerieYumi
Review:
This is very cool. I wish you would update.
Review By [DarkFaerieYumi] • Date [13 Jul 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "chapter 5" from Dragonelf
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This series looks interesting so far and I hope you get inspired to update it.

::Gives the plot bunny a a bowl of Egg Drop Soup::

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Review By [Dragonelf] • Date [7 Apr 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "chapter 5" from CronosKitty
Review:
Like this story. Just a suggestion though. Dont add so many crossovers you loose your way. Focus on one or two and keep it simple. I like the kindred crossover. Not many good kindred stories out there. This has the chance to be one of them. Hope you update soon. Good so far. Keep it going.
Review By [CronosKitty] • Date [4 Aug 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "chapter 5" from bex
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Dream Tatoos? Awesome can't wait for more, was the animal sounds the hyena maybe?
Review By [bex] • Date [5 May 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "chapter 4" from kayron
Review:
Wow! It looks like this is going to be an all out battle huh? We have the various Clans from the Kindred vampires. The BtVS crew and the evil vamps from that series. Giles seems a bit...jumpier than usual when something bad happens. Some secret there? Looks like we have Phoebe from Charmed on board, so that's major firepower in the supernatural community. We have Hyena and Soldier ready to guide Xander into his powers and help him grow stronger...shades of the Sentinel? Chance seems to have taken an interest in Xander, beyond watching him as Julien ordered. He's protective. Is he interested in turning him? Looking forward to seeing how things develop.
Review By [kayron] • Date [3 May 09] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Recent Donor)jcon
Review:
starting well. look forward to your updates.
Review By [(Recent Donor)jcon] • Date [29 Apr 09] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Thegoddamnbatman
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This is a cool story, hope you continue it.
Review By [Thegoddamnbatman] • Date [29 Apr 09] • Rating [5 out of 10]
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