Huh. I do find this a bit odd because the characterization's a bit far-fetched -- though you are writing from Petunia's point of view, so it can still make sense -- and the use of 'Mom' instead of 'Mum' is off-putting. The largest thing, by far, though, is that Petunia was older than Lily in canon. Reversing their birth order makes no sense at all.
A smaller thing is your nicknaming Petunia 'Peti'. Unless this was written before Deathly Hallows, that makes no sense. Her nickname was expressly shown as 'Tuney' and changing it to match wouldn't be that difficult.
All told, I'm definitely curious to see where you take this, though.
Okay, all of that makes a lot of sense. Thanks for clearing it up.
Comments from author:
The birth order made sense to me because it gave more emphasis for Petunia to look up to Lily. Younger siblings have a habit of turning their older siblings into godlike figures when they are younger.
My little brother wanted to do everything I did until he reached 4th grade (he's two years younger than I am). I saw Lily's and Petunia's relationship as the same way. Petunia, as the younger sibling, wanted to go to Hogwarts simply because Lily was there. The fact that Mr. and Mrs. Evans pressed Lily's witch-ness in Petunia's face didn't help.
As to 'Mum' vs 'Mom', I'm American, I didn't use Mom to piss anyone off, it's what I'm used to.
The nickname seemed, to me, more adult, just like the difference between Willy and Will.
Thank you for your review.
Review By [Angelfirenze] • Date [23 May 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from Angelfirenze
Review:
Okay, now that was just weird, but it did cause other things to make a lot of sense. I'm very interested to continue seeing how this plays out -- especially since the rivalry that was so much of Petunia's treatment of Harry no longer applies here.
Comments from author:
I wanted to see a story where Harry gets the loving family that he deserves. I haven't read one, so I wrote one instead. Thank you for your review.
Review By [Angelfirenze] • Date [23 May 09] • Not Rated
Sequel, please. This is an excellent setup to a series, and I'd love to find out what happens next. I hope your muse and schedule will allow you to write and post more chapters sometime soon. Keep up the good work. Zafaran {mailto:} zafaran {at} fastmail {dot} fm
Comments from author:
Thank you very much. The next story will be up as soon as I finish it.
It's so cute that Buffy has Snape wrapped around her finger. You ever think that she could get the Brain (from Pinky and the Brain) to give up his plans for world domination? Love that you have her as the catalyst for changing the relationship between the Potters and the Dursleys. I just hope that when *she* turns out to be supernatural - which I'm assuming she will - that it won't cause problems for their family.
Now I'm guessing, but this is a post-'The Gift' Buffy that has been reincarnated correct? If so, you aren't going to let the Scoobies tear her away are you? I know she's been there for years already, but different dimension, different passage of time. Please, please, please, don't let them do it!
Looking forward to the sequel.
Comments from author:
Yes, Buffy has been reincarnated, but that and what will happen with the Scoobies will be explain in later books, since this is a series.
I've always thought that the parents Evans must've lorded the fact that Lily was a witch and Petunia wasn't over Petunia's head since Lily got her letter. I know from experience that the feeling that one child is better than the others isn't a happy feeling. It takes a lot to fix something like that, since it went on for a long time. Giving Petunia something so important as responsibility for a child, and all the decisions that come with it was the big gesture that Petunia needed.
I'm really happy that my story has gotten the response it has. Thank you all very much.
Review By [mmooch] • Date [8 May 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
