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Review of chapter "Allies And Contacts - Part 1" from Zaxxon
Review:
Would love to see this continued.
Comments from author:
Sorry mate, that is unlikely at this time. I'm glad you enjoyed what there is of it.
Cheers
Dazzlar
Review By [Zaxxon] • Date [6 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Allies And Contacts - Part 1" from trongod
Review:
Hell of a story that has evidently been abandoned - hoping that The Author returns to it someday...
Comments from author:
Thanks mate, glad you enjoyed it. You're right, it is abondoned for now. I havent written anything for over a year, life got in the way. as much as i would like to continue, I don't know if i will be able to.

cheers
Dazzlar
Review By [trongod] • Date [13 Oct 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Allies And Contacts - Part 1" from djhardim
Review:
It's been a while since we've heard from you. I hope you can find the time to continue this story.
Review By [djhardim] • Date [28 Jul 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Allies And Contacts - Part 1" from Hanzo
Review:
‚ô•Impressive‚ô•.
Comments from author:
Cheers mate.

Dazzlar
Review By [Hanzo] • Date [29 Aug 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Allies And Contacts - Part 1" from oldgirllost
Review:
Put me down on the "I really would like it if you could continue this" list.

Thanks for a good beginning
Comments from author:
Thank you for you support. As you can probably guess, I don't get a lot of time to work on this at the moment. It isn't dead by any means, just slow going. Here's hoping I can get a good middle posted soon.

cheers
Dazzlar
Review By [oldgirllost] • Date [9 Jun 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Allies And Contacts - Part 1" from MavenAlysse
Review:
Oh, Wow! This is fantastic! I'm truly enjoying the story thus far and hope that you plan on continuing it.

At first, it looked like they were trying to do too much, too soon. But you have paced it well, they aren't going to instantly be uber-powerful - I like the realism (can you call it realism when it's fanfiction based on a supernatural show? ::shrug::). I also like that they pulled in Amy - hopefully, they can save her from the body-switching that occurred in Season 1.

Won't the religious head-honchos be surprised to discover that the Knights of Solomon are a bunch of kids!

I noticed how long it's been since the last update and hope that you are well. I look forward to your next chapter.

Thanks for sharing!

-MavenAlysse
Comments from author:
Thanks for a great review, I'm glad you like the story. I do plan on continuing it, when real life lets me get to it.

I am trying to write this story as semi-realistic as possible, in a fantasy world way. I reckon you can call it realism regardless:P. I won't say much about the body switching episode, but it will be different. The religious dudes will be shocked when their identities are known, but they will have time to get over it long before any meetings occur.

Yeah it has been way too long since I have updated. too much going on at the moment as well as being a bit stuck. hopefully it won't be too, long.

cheers
dazzlar
Review By [MavenAlysse] • Date [8 Feb 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Allies And Contacts - Part 1" from LordSia
Review:
Oh, love it! The only thing I would like to remark upon is for you to refine the "Prophecy" spoken by AA-Mike, it felt a bit... Plastic. Stiff? Something...
Great fic, I'd love to see it continued. If you need ideas or someone to bounce ideas off of, send me a PM, will you?
Comments from author:
Cheers mate glad you like it. You are right with regards to the prophecy, it is pretty average. It is unlikely I will use one in the future, they aren't my strong point.

The story will continue, when real life permits. I decided to cut the next chapter into smaller bits, it was just getting too big. Hopefully I will post this year or early next year. Thanks for the ideas offer, I just might take you up on it.

Dazzlar
Review By [LordSia] • Date [23 Dec 09] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Allies And Contacts - Part 1" from Robby
Review:
Cool, don't think I have ever seen someone do this before! Are you going to make a list of the magic they can do? Might become hard to keep up depending on how many your going to do.
Comments from author:
Cheers mate, I'm glad you like it. i think you might be right about the magic. I will probably keep a spell list at the bottom of each chapter, should make things easier. The next chapter is coming, I only just overcame a massive plot sticking point, took me months. Fingers crossed there are no others.

Dazzlar

PS - You might want to visit Perfect Lionheart on fanfiction, he has a pre Buffy story too.
Review By [Robby] • Date [6 Nov 09] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Allies And Contacts - Part 1" from JediKnight
Review:
Very interesting job on the story so far, I'm looking forward to reading more.

Will SG-1 show up in this story?

I take it the pairing will be A/W?

Are you open to suggestions for crossovers?

When will Buffy and Giles be bought in?

Why no more direct crossovers?

Edit: Why not see about getting gun ammunition blessed, then shoot a vampire in the heart with it?
Comments from author:
Thank you. SG1 will be part of the story during the Stargate arc. There will be a time-line in the next chapter. Al and Willow will hook up. Buffy and Giles show up in chapter 4. By all means, let me know your crossover ideas. I probably won't add in another direct crossover, but am open to using the movie, book or game as inspiration for technology or ideas. Like how Willow wants to make a lightsaber.

cheers
Dazzlar
Review By [JediKnight] • Date [24 Sep 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Allies And Contacts - Part 1" from Vilkath
Review:
Very interesting story idea, I always felt the Buffy-verse was a bit stupid on this front. Only one girl in the world really tasked with fighting all the vampires, possibly thousands of them with ability make thousands more with a few drops of blood? Isolate her in one town and leave rest the world basically undefended? All of that made poor sense add to that regular humans seemed to have no real organized fighting forces, and those that did fight were not that well equipped or trained to fight the supernatural.

Just about the idea's for training and such are great in this story, logical things humans could do with some effort, avoiding super magical or technological solutions or such some fics use. I especially love Xander's reference to looting vampire corpses and lairs to finding treasure from defeating a monster in almost RPG or adventure game. It is one the most logical solutions to money problems in the Buffy-verse and it's so funny how many times Buffy and people in general 'frown' on it.

I suppose the only real down part to this story besides the fact it hasn't been updated in a little while is the time frame. Almost all the goals Xander and willow set seem to be super long term 5 years or more type of training, researching and such. Add to it the heavenly arch angel's message about end of days type war coming I am not really sure just setting this what 1 year before Buffy's arrival is enough. I think with all the prep work author wanted into their training and skill set, not to mention recruitment of other useful people like Amy, maybe Cordelia etc more time to work with would been better.

Edit: Well to add in some cross over idea's that I totally spaced on in my original posting of this review I think taking a good look at various genre's that actually deal with killing vampires is a good idea. Most Xander's and Willows initial role models fictional or real just seemed to be generalized fighters, not actual demon or vampire slayers. So things like Vanhellsing, Castlevania and such might be worth having Xander or willow look into. Another one I think fits the most especially with the whole Knights of Solomon thing is Seraphim from the Blood Omen/Legacy of Kain series.

They were like super vampire killers in blessed/holy armor type of thing. Which seems to go with what Xander and such want, defensive armor worth having, so sturdy armor first, crosses or other protective symbols on it second. Blessing the crosses or armor last.. should not only prevent vampires from being able to grab, touch or hit Xander and willow bare handed but even looking in their direction be offensive. All huge benefits in a fight. All through out Buffy-Verse seen the effect of just holding a cross in a vampires face at least causes a distraction, even against master vampires, why not wear them instead of holding it? Could even factor holy water into it some how if you want, would dousing cloth in holy water, wearing it or tossing the rag at a vampire still work? How about steaming holy water, would it remain blessed steam? I know various chemical reactions can turn water to steam without heat, make a great 'escape, distraction' bomb for Xander's group like riot or tear gas.
Comments from author:
First up, thankyou for your huge review. I will try to address each point in order.

It seems we are on the same page about only one person in the whole world to fight evil. If that was the case the world would have ended thousands of years ago. Sure one town would be safe but the rest of the world would be toast. It made much more sense to have multiple forces of good fighting. The idea a guy (Xander) that knows about vampires and actively fights them, would do zero training is pretty idiotic in my opinion too.

I tried to make the training somewhat realistic. I used to be a personal trainer, kung fu instructor and meditation teacher, so I used best case scenarios in those areas. Some of the more fantastic ideas I will use have at least some basis in our reality, be they myth, legend or I have seen with my own eyes.

I have a background in RPG's so I am going with what I know. Joss was a comic book nut so he filled canon with those references. You always loot the corpses after the fight, any self respecting fantasy reader/player will tell you that. Although occasionally the thief would loot during the battle, I might work that in somewhere.

Yes a lot of Al's and Willows goals are long term and I will slowly improve them. I have read a lot of stories where with one summer of training the characters carry on like masters, and it annoys me. So their progrssion will be faster than normal but within the realms of the possible. You are right it has been a while between updates, lets just say that real life decided to involve me again as well as I am actually stuggling with parts of the next chapter. As new characters get introduced, they will start from beginner level, although some will have pre-existing specialties.

This is actually kind of embarrassing. Those ideas for cross overs you mentioned, I haven't actually read or watched any of them. I was thinking about using the movie Blade to give them ideas. With time as limited as it is for me at the moment, I probably won't have time to enjoy your recommendations any time soon. I have added them to my list of books to read when I have the time. That Legacy of Kain sounds pretty good.

There will definately be armour used, as will be seen in the next chapter. As they get richer, the armour and weapons will get better. Of coarse it will take time for Al to learn the spells to put blessings on the armour and weapons, but eventually he will. I did a fair bit of research into the Knights Templar and will be using them as a source for holy magic. I have some ideas about holy water weapons I hope you enjoy too. I didn't come up with steam though, I will have to give that some serious thought, thanks. There will eventually be combinations of modern day army weaponry with holy magic applied to it.

I hope that answered all your questions. I am still plugging away at the next chapter when I have the chance. I can't say when it will be done though.
cheers
Dazzlar
Review By [Vilkath] • Date [13 Sep 09] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The First Step Into A Much Larger World" from Richardthrnnsx
Review:
Very interesting story, you have obviously put a lot of thought into developing the background and storyline. I also liked the development of Xander and Wilolow as well as Father Abraham and the Harris's.

Looking forward to more and thanks for sharing.
Comments from author:
Cheers mate.

In the beginning Willow held a torch for Xander but Xander wanted Buffy. Now there is no Buffy. There is also no Giles and his library. Instead of them being back up to the slayer and research assistants to the watcher, they see themselves as front line troops. Much more fun

I wanted to do something different with the Harris's, than had been done before. We all know they were alcoholics, but we never found out why. Having know some Vietnam vets, it is very plausible for him to turn to drink.

Father Abraham is a link to many more people and places as well as being a valuable mentor. it is pretty common to seek guidance when you go through a traumatic and life changing event. Al didn't have family to turn to, so he went to church, like so many people do. He is interesting to write because he has to stay hidden while also trying to help however he can.

Dazzlar
Review By [Richardthrnnsx] • Date [13 Sep 09] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Allies And Contacts - Part 1" from Lazjay
Review:
What role will characters like cordelia and angel play...we haven't heard anything from them. Angel is understandable but Cordelia is with them now
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review. I think in chapter one, Al and Willow use the word Cordelia as a swear word or curse word. That pretty much sets the tone for their relationship. Cordy will be in the next chapter and Angel might be in chapter 4, I haven't got all the details mapped out yet. In the first episode of the show, Buffy was befriended by Cordelia first then changed when she felt sorry for Willow. That sympathy won't be there this time around. The next chapter will show more about the roles Angel and Cordelia will play, you even get to meet Cordy's dad.

cheers
Dazzlar
Review By [Lazjay] • Date [5 Sep 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The First Step Into A Much Larger World" from djhardim
Review:
Just had a thought, since Alex and Willow are going for iron shirt or body to toughen their bodies they are already thinking about coming into close contact with things that go bump in the night. Might it not be a good idea for them to learn at least one close combat form?

Do their martial arts studies include learning how to fall?
Comments from author:
Thank you for the review. You are right, they are planning for close combat with vampires. They won't be looking for it, but they are planning for it to happen, kind of like a back up plan. the style of kung fu they are learning is a combination of North and South Shaolin styles. This means it has large flashy moves as well as small in close techniques. The chapter I am still struggling with has a lot of martial arts fighting and information in it. strangely enough, they have not been taught how to fall yet. it's funny, out of the five martial arts that I have trained in, none of them taught how to fall and one of those was wrestling. My falling came from gymnastics, so it's more of a roll.

cheers
Dazzlar
Review By [djhardim] • Date [26 Aug 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Allies And Contacts - Part 1" from lordamnesia
Review:
This is a fantastic start to what could become an epic story. Keep up the great work!
Comments from author:
Thanks mate, I'm glad you like it. I'm about halfway through the next chapter at the moment.

cheers
Dazzlar
Review By [lordamnesia] • Date [26 Jul 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Allies And Contacts - Part 1" from ChaosRonin
Review:
Glad to see another chapter of this one, has a really nice plot going.
Comments from author:
Cheers mate, glad you like it.

Dazzlar
Review By [ChaosRonin] • Date [14 Jul 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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