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Review of chapter "Chapter 77" from Tmwilliams
Wow, you really jumped the shark in the last few chapters.
Is English not your first language? Trying to translate your story with its unending spelling and syntax errors isn't easy. I wish you would proofread your work before posting.
The story line was interesting at first but you seem to have lost the thread and really derailed.
Review By [Tmwilliams] • Date [18 Mar 14] • Rating [1 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 77" from bradsan
Yes update.
Riley huh. I really don't like Riley. What he did is even more selfish as what Angel did but hey that's me. I don't like Riley. I understand now why you have problems with bringing back Spike and having already to many people in this story. On the other hand. What does Riley know about Amy. Willow and Giles, Yes. Riley not so much.

But hey I won't complain. You updated the story and I'm curious how Asher is gone make everything right.

But Riley, Ugh. Angelus would kill him the moment he lay a eye on him.

Don't wait to long for the next update.
Review By [bradsan] • Date [13 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 54" from Wise
At first it wasn't so bad. There was stuff to like in the story, even. But a while back, the whole story seemed to drop like a gallon of LSD and it's been a confused, confusing, tripping out of its mind mess ever since.
Comments from author:
I am still working on the next scene. That scene will explain much of what happened to Buffy. I am just thinking about who should be in the scene. I have rewritten it several times by now.
Review By [Wise] • Date [10 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 76" from bradsan
make more sense now. I read some chapters again.
Why isn't Spike coming he could kick Asher's ass for hurting Buffy and Jean Claude's also. Wonder how Angelus will feel when he tries to do anything to Buffy. she has more protectors now then she ever had. And Buffy needs a strong friend and Dru needs her Spike as Spike needs them both. Harm will pee her pants if Spike is coming, what will Dru do will be her biggest concern. "LOL"

Anita well I really don't like her after she has been JC human servant she was always angry and became very selfish. She took everything for granted. Richard, Anita and JC didn't fit together. I really hope Anita finds herself now she is free and become more a persons you want to have around. Richard needs to talk to Buffy or Spike how to accept the wolf because they could help him.

Still hoping for a triumvirate between JC, Asher and Buffy they would make a very strong triumvirate because they will try to make it work and they can love each other without trying to overrule each other. It would be on equal base.

By the way Asher has to grovel his way back to Buffy. He sees Julianna and dumps Buffy. I would be mad as hell and he needs to do a lot to gain my trust again. Sooo a lot of grovel.
Sorry again a long review.
Comments from author:
Thanks for reviewing.

I have a problem with Spike coming to St. Louis. There is already so many people in the fanfiction.

I have always felt sorry for Julianna. I think that she should have been granted on more day with Asher. I also have other plans for her that will not mess up the story. I hope.

I think Anita is angry because she is not use to so many people around her. She needs some alone time but there are always people there with her. And, then there is that sex thing.
Review By [bradsan] • Date [2 Sep 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 74" from bradsan
Alright consider me confused. Why are you in this story. That's rather strange if you ask me and where is Cordelia. I don't know where you are going this time but having the writer in a story is so not good.

Don't get me wrong I'm glad you updated but putting yourself in it. A big nooo.

Why would Asher break with Buffy. I'm glad Jean Claude break with Anita and her wolf. Good riddance if you ask me. I really hope that Buffy/Asher and Jean Claude will form a pair. Nathalien is to weak and could play along. But to become strong those three should form a bond.
Comments from author:
Things will get better for Buffy and Anita.

As for me, I am only in the story because I wanted someone to warn Buffy. That is it. I will add another chapter about what happens to me but that will be it: I think.

Ok, if you have read more you know that me as a character has gone to Florida not St Louis. I hope this makes you want to read more. I didn't mean to confuse anyone.
Review By [bradsan] • Date [31 Aug 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 73" from Difdi
If you get tired of writing a story, you can mark it "on hiatus" or even just delete it rather than tearing it down and crapping all over your fans. If the rating system could go to negative numbers, you'd get a -10 out of this. As it is, a 1 is all that the system allows.
Comments from author:
I can make it longer. I was just worried that no one would like it.

Story is now longer. You asked for it! lol
Review By [Difdi] • Date [30 Aug 13] • Rating [1 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 40" from spk
I'm sorry...but am I the only reader that is totally confused?! I thought the premise of this story seemed interesting , so I wanted to give it a try. But I am already halfway thru and just can't follow Buffy's character. It's like she's on crack or schizophrenic...her thoughts are bouncing everywhere so much so that it just doesn't make sense to me. Am I missing something here? :)
Comments from author:
No, you do get it. I think the Hellmouth or something right before that ... screwed up her powers. If you have scene the show, you know that Buffy had trouble sensing vampires. Now, that she is not on the Hellmouth I think her powers might be coming back. She can sense every rogue vampire in the city. It is driving her crazy.

I think she will be able to get her powers in check very soon. If she does not she will have to leave St. Louis but that is not the direction I want the story to go.

Thanks for reading!
Review By [spk] • Date [1 Apr 13] • Rating [2 out of 10]
Review of chapter "chapter 71" from bradsan
You think there will be a update anytime soon. You aren't abandon this story I hope. will you tell if you are. I won't like but it's better than waiting for something that won't come.

I'm hoping for an update.
Comments from author:
I am having problems writing this story but it is updated. If you want to see something different happen in the story please tell me.

I love reviews. Thank you for reading.
Review By [bradsan] • Date [24 Jan 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 24" from breve
i like the idea of this story.
it's early days in, but the way you've written buffy and jason doesn't really ring true for me - which i guess is the whole point of fan fic right :-/
and it'd be awesome if you could shorten some of the words to how people actually talk to eachother in real life "i am/i'm" "you are/you're" etc, would make this a lot easier to read.
but i'm going to persevere because i'm sure this has lots of hits for a reason...and who knows, maybe the further into it you've already done the above.
anyway, kudos on the idea.
Comments from author:
Jason seems to have a lot going on in the books. I don't think he would have much time for Buffy if Anita didn't say something to Jean Claude and Richard. He also has his job ... so not much time for Buffy.
I also think that Buffy adapts to her environment. So, far she is experiencing culture shock. She moved from California to St. Louis. Everything is different for her.
Also, the spelling might just be due to my Word editing system. Bad system ... decides not to throw it against the wall ... for now. lol.
Review By [breve] • Date [19 Aug 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "chapter 71" from bradsan
I really like Dru she is insane but when she loves you she really loves you. She always loved her daddy even more than Spike strange but true. Harmony will go crazy With Dru so close to her. You can make Harmony a master vampire in this story but Harmony doesn't even know how to behave as a vampire. This is gone be so much fun.

I hope that Buffy takes those watchers down because their insane ways are dangerous to every creature that is living on earth. They really think they are god and can do anything they think is right even when it's inhuman.

Can't wait for your next update. good writing again.
Comments from author:
Thank for the review.

Harmony will not be too close to Dru. They will live on separate floors. At least I think that is what I have planned.
With Dru, I am going to have her be close to Buffy.
The Watchers don't show themselves too often so I think Buffy is safe for now.
Review By [bradsan] • Date [22 May 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 70" from Eureka
Dang! How did Dru come over? Cause that is her Dru. Love the surprise.
OK everybody got out, they now have a "master vamp" Harmony, a sick and hurt Dru, Cherry and themselves....WOW
So why is it that after they took Dru into their group that the "glue-like substance" disappeared?
Comments from author:
Love, review. Thanks.

I don't think Buffy or any of the other charecters know about this "glue-like substance". But, I will have one of the vampires explain it.
Review By [Eureka] • Date [10 May 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 69" from Eureka
Thanks for the update!
So They got everybody even Cherry, but do they actually get to get out of the building or is this another trap? Does Asher really believe that Buffy and this places' Angel went at it and is he going to ask about it?
Comments from author:
I do have one more surprise but they will be out of that building by the next chapter. I am sure Asher will asked Buffy.
I didn't plan for them to stay in that place any longer then they have to stay.

Good review. It made me think that the surprise I have in mind will be more welcome.
Review By [Eureka] • Date [22 Apr 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 68" from bradsan
Master Vampire Harmony, "Lol". She is so annoying that it makes her cute, Spike will "love" it to see her again, not. This can be fun.

I'm glad that Buffy is showing her inner Slayer who is in charge of her body. I hope her inner Slayer will stop abusing Buffy's body (when Buffy sleeps) in doing things Buffy don't want to.

Hope you will find the time to update soon
Comments from author:
I am not sure why Buffy never killed Harmony, so Harmony being a Master Vampire is my answer.

Thanks so much for the review. I love them.
Review By [bradsan] • Date [8 Apr 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from AnnManga
Great story please update soon.
Review By [AnnManga] • Date [7 Apr 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 68" from (Recent Donor)GothTroubleMaker
Awesome! I;m so glad you updated:D
Review By [(Recent Donor)GothTroubleMaker] • Date [22 Jan 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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