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Review of chapter "Epilogue: Gratitude" from LegacyWeapon
Wow. This is one of the most well-thought out, well-written stories I have had the privilege to come across on TTH. I have never watched Law & Order, but I felt like I really knew the characters, or at least their minds and attitudes. The BTVS characters were about as perfect as they could be, and even though I don't like Kennedy much as a general rule, she was still in character without coming off as a total bitch all the time. She was kinda bitchy, but only to the point where the job got done. Very well done story, and I shall probably recommend it. Thank you so much for this amazing piece of literary art. ^_^
Review By [LegacyWeapon] • Date [2 Jul 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue: Gratitude" from MarcusSLazarus
I may not know much about L&O, but the central plot you’ve got here is interesting even without background knowledge of the characters; Jenny’s character clearly comes across as a dangerous sociopath even before she was ‘activated’, and subsequent problems as Buffy and the other Slayers had to figure out an effective way of stopping her without endangering others makes it even more interesting.
Review By [MarcusSLazarus] • Date [15 Jun 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue: Gratitude" from BillieBog
Great story. Very well written with excellent plot and characterizations.
Review By [BillieBog] • Date [10 Mar 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue: Gratitude" from (Past Donor)Nuala
This was an excellent story. There were a few typos here and there, but the story was very nice. Thank you! :)
Review By [(Past Donor)Nuala] • Date [1 Dec 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue: Gratitude" from Currchan
Awesome fic. Great pacing, dialogue, and characterization.
Review By [Currchan] • Date [21 Oct 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue: Gratitude" from Ansku
Still great :)
Review By [Ansku] • Date [2 Sep 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue: Gratitude" from Ansku
Awesome :)
Review By [Ansku] • Date [4 Sep 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue: Gratitude" from AllenPitt
well, that solves that (what to do with a captured Jenny). Nice interplay with Kennedy et al.. and the NYPD reaction is much more realistic than in most fics. Buffy did get off lightly. The problem is, this sort of thing will happen often, I'd think, and the academy would get a larger & larger dossier as time went on...?
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [13 Jul 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue: Gratitude" from Dapsy
Yowza, that was one great story. And Buffy was still Buffy and without any add-ons too... I mean, it is great to read a "post-chosen" story in which Buffy(or someone) was not made out to be some immortal... godlike... or something totally weird(like in some Halloween stories for example).

I have no problem with how the story ended, and I think if Buffy was truly needed somewhere she would get there regardless of anything. Besides, till that time, I bet she can/could find lots of fun things to do. After all, Manhattan can be a very fun place to be(if you got $, that is :) ) .
Review By [Dapsy] • Date [11 Jul 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue: Gratitude" from HeatherDee
I'm going to echo what others have said below. This was a very good tale. The only flaw I can see is that that bit about Willow offering to hypnotize a fair percentage of the police in Manhattan really didn't sound quite like the Willow that you've written earlier in this story. That's a pretty minor nit though in an excellent work.

As for Buffy, well it is unfortunate it turned out this way, but she did lie in a major investigation involving a spree killer. Normally when people do that it ends in a fairly significant jail term. It's certainly worth it to do a six-month community service sentence in order to keep loose ends tidy.
Comments from author:
Well, for Willow, she's in babble mode at this point and doesn't want to see Buffy get punished. If Buffy had said, "Good idea, thanks," that would have brought her up short.

Otherwise, thank you!
Review By [HeatherDee] • Date [7 Jul 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue: Gratitude" from (Current Donor)MaxGSandeman
Altogether, an excellent ending. Everyone acting as they should.
I have a bit of a problem with naive Buffy; she needs to wise up a bit, and her problem with remembering someone's name. It seemed that there were times when she wasn't taking the whole situation seriously.
Review By [(Current Donor)MaxGSandeman] • Date [5 Jul 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue: Gratitude" from Samarkand
I thought I would chime in here: very suspenseful story with a tone and style that perfectly captures the L&O franchise and the BtVS characters. The legal wrangling at the end was very much in keeping with the gritty reality of L&O.

One minor note: I would have thought Buffy would have contacted Major Ellis' squad of government demon-hunters. This is a rogue supernatural on US soil. I could see her wanting to handle this in house, but Major Ellis (and his superiors) might have been able to give her some legal cover.
Review By [Samarkand] • Date [4 Jul 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Slayer Down" from KJA
I wanted to get to these reviews earlier but the past few days got away from me. To start with I will comment on your question on the lack of reviews for the previous chapter "UP". My take on it is that it was a transitional chapter. That is it moved us from the cross city chase to the final confrontation but the chapter in itself, besides moving pieces into place, did not seem to be of as much significance as what came before or after.

Now onto "Slayer Down". Here you have the players in the final show down taking their positions for the climax of the story. The first and forth scenes are giving us Jenny Brandt preparations to assault McCoy's office. You have in writing this story made my wonder if Jenny is as good an improviser as Buffy is. That always seemed to be one of Buffy's strengths and it appears that Jenny, in a slightly different way, has the same gift.

In scene two of the chapter we catch up with Kennedy and Milla as they enter the building. Here I like how you have Kennedy using their communications to maximize the effectiveness of their limited resources. And then upon obtaining the information they are caught by the police taking about Jenny's target. Given the number of times people and demons have stumbled into the middle of a conversation on Buffy the scene fit right in.

With scene three you pick up immediately afterward with Cassady and Green. I like how you conveyed what Kennedy and Milla were doing over the radio as the detectives try to determine what is going on. Given that Kennedy is as petite as Buffy the events implied by the takedown of Kelly and Dominguez actually seemed rather humorous in spite to the seriousness of the situation. On top of that I like how you have every one through a look upon hearing Kennedy's full name. Then things get more serious again with the knowledge that Jenny is in the building. And then you introduce Green and Cassady to Ludmilla Marinovic. This introduction, though not much comes of it here, makes me hope that we will see Milla and Cassady interacting in the future given that Cassady has taken her first steps into the world of magic.

With the chapters fifth and final scene the point of view swings back to Kennedy. As she sets about trying to find Jenny I like the internal thoughts she has about getting the job done. It fits with her need to take her duty seriously as well as promotes the growth of the character. I think her conversation with Willow underscores how much they need more magic users. If someone with the magical ability had been available to assist Kennedy directly this might have all ended with Jenny slapped with binding spell and helpless. Then you did a good job of wrapping op the chapter while leaving the reader right along side Kennedy in wondering what just happened.

A slight punctuation error I noticed. Kennedy makes the statement “We didn’t beat her up. Like I said, I’m not Jenny Brandt. But she is in the building?” but it is ended with a question mark instead of a period.

I will try and get the next review in by tomorrow.
Review By [KJA] • Date [4 Jul 09] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue: Gratitude" from (Recent Donor)DonSample
I just reread this from start to finish, and I enjoyed it a lot. Nice to see someone who doesn't think that Kennedy is a spoiled brat at best, or a borderline psychopath at worst. (Okay, maybe not borderline, I've seen depictions of her that made Jenny look nice.)
Review By [(Recent Donor)DonSample] • Date [3 Jul 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue: Gratitude" from PATM
Thanks for a great story to read. The suspense was trying my patience but your updates were a taking the edge
off. I tried not to moan in my reviews and none will be uttered in this one. Cassady and Buffy would be a interesting
read. No CSI's ? works for me Beaurocratic interference from the L and O's either. How about the Soprano's?
So, what about that community service at the graveyards?. Smiles.

Edit 07/08/09. Didius Flavius was the ancient Roman shade? I doubt it but there were many interesting characters
in Davis's books who would qualify with walking for eternity.
Review By [PATM] • Date [2 Jul 09] • Not Rated
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