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Dawn Summers and the Rise of Roman Imperialism.

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Review of chapter "Chapter Seven." from WhippingDawn
Review:
Superb story! And as I can see, a prequel to "Back to the SPQR", which may be my favorite series of all! I still have two episodes to read.
Review By [WhippingDawn] • Date [1 Mar 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Seven." from TheatricalBarrister
Review:
I really like this series, and I was happy to see the tie-in with your Fidelia Venetrix story. I had been thinking about that story during the part where Pullo was harvesting the grain (I know, it doesn't really compute, but sometimes my mind works in strange and mysterious ways :-) ).

I got a big kick out of Vorenus' trick getting Pullo and the others out of the boat.

Overall, this story seems a little more polished and better edited than the first story of this series, but to be honest, I felt a little more satisfied with the previous story. Can't really say why, though. At any rate, it was still a fun read.
Comments from author:
Thank-you for your thoughtful review.

To take your last point first; yes I agree, I think I had no clear idea how this fic was supposed to finish! As a result I think it suffers a little but it was one of those stories that one just has to write.

I'm in the process of writing a new Dawn Summers and the... story, this time its Martians!

The 'trick' to get the troops off the ships is a legend we used to learn in England. The Roman soldiers were supposed to be so apprehensive at the sight of all the Celts waiting for them that they wouldn't move. Then the standard bearer (10th Legion I think) jumped into the sea and headed for the beach, moments later the rest of the troops jumped in and joined him and they won the battle. This was just my take on that.
Review By [TheatricalBarrister] • Date [20 Jul 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Seven." from PATM
Review:
Thanks for the foursome ;) I sense a theme with the niggling thought that something is missing for select characters.
The Faith connection brings me back to one of my favorite Faith stories. Thanks
Comments from author:
We live to serve!

Cheers,
DaveT.
Review By [PATM] • Date [12 Jun 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Seven." from TDWidow
Review:
Loved it! More Rome stories to come? :-)
Comments from author:
Thank-you.

There may well be more stories featuring 'Rome' characters at some point in the future.

DaveT.
Review By [TDWidow] • Date [12 Jun 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Seven." from Hecatonchires
Review:
A sad death for Ariawen, but one understood.
Comments from author:
Cheers,
DaveT.
Review By [Hecatonchires] • Date [12 Jun 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Seven." from CPTSkip
Review:
Ah so! I understand now. Nicely done. I can see that Dawn had to be sent back so Celtic Slayer wouldn't kill Caesar, leave Evil Guy in charge, keep Augustus from creating the Empire, and totally screwing Western Civilization out of existence. And, of course, possible getting Buffy preggers. But what about William? Why didn't he blink out when Dawn was sent out on her Time Tunnel mission? Was he part of the PTB's plan to get Buffy 'with child'?

Nice to see Roman-Faith got to live a good life and have lots of kids. One possibly mind boggling possibility is Buffy and Dawn, and even Faith herself, are descendants of Roman-Faith. Lol! Good story and I look forward to more entertaining examples of your nifty, and twisted, imagination.
Comments from author:
Actually thats quite a niffty explanation of what went on...thank-you for explaining it to me!

William was an accident (in more ways than one!) as he had a bit of his mums 'keyness' about him he got stuck in the same space but not the same reality.

One thing this story has taught me...don't do it again! As I've mentioned elsewhere there will be maybe 3 more stories in this series plus 1 or 2 spin offs. Next time? Giles and Dawn get to open that black tin box with the interesting protection spell on it!

Cheers,
DaveT.
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [11 Jun 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Six." from (Moderator)jrabbit
Review:
How do you end up accidentally having pre-battle sex? "I was just surveying the troops when I slipped and landed on a penis..."
Comments from author:
Well dur! Used to happen to the WRAC all the time!

Cheers,
DaveT.
Review By [(Moderator)jrabbit] • Date [11 Jun 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Seven." from JoeDineen
Review:
Ok, now I get it sort of, enough to know that that is not all of the pieces but talk about coming at a thing sideways :)
Comments from author:
Time travel is a bugger, so are demons.

Cheers,
DaveT.
Review By [JoeDineen] • Date [11 Jun 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Seven." from Mcspender
Review:
So, lemme see if I get this right, the time line is divided like this: Princess Girl saves Julius Cesar from the demon, that demon death sends back Dawn & William to their time-line, and sends Faith back in time to 54 BCE... But the time-line is now bifurcated because Buffy is now pregnant(Thanks to Willow fast tongue special ;)) and Dawn never existed in that particular time-line; and Fidelia is the nexus for that.
Dude... this fraking timey wimey blimey time-traveling ball is giving me a headache.
Cool ending to this series dude =).
By the way, are we gonna see something about Faith's descendants in the main time line =)??.
See ya!!.
Comments from author:
Faith; I have a vague outline of a Life of Brian xover involving Xander and one of Fidelia's grandchildren; remember the Tribune in LoB? 'Execution? Good, one cross each, line up on the left.' But its only a vague out line.

Still three stories left in this series so more time travel brain boiling work to do! And if it gives you a headache reading it think what its doing to me writing it!

Ariawen didn't really 'save' GJC (I think she'd have quite liked to have killed him) she killed the demon because she realised that was what the slayer is supposed to do...I think.

Cheers,
DaveT.
Review By [Mcspender] • Date [11 Jun 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Seven." from MarcusRowland
Review:
Having trouble visualising the time paradox here - Dawn's trip to the past was cancelled out by the death of demon guy, so that never happened, but the time line split so that there was one world with no Dawn and another where she existed and had a son, and Faith fell into the past in her place?
Comments from author:
I think my main idea was that Dawn would go back in time and alert the Druids to the existence of slayers; they would in turn pass the knowledge down through history till you eventually get the Watchers Council.

The stuff with the Roman invasion was mostly 'fact'; the attacks on Roman foraging parties and such. Plus you must have heard the myth about the Roman standard bearer who jumped into the sea when everyone else was too scared.

The timeline with no Dawn but still had a William was probably just fallout from the main spell contained in the jewel. Also it might have been a little reward for Buffy (she always wanted a normal life) and maybe that timeline needed a son of the slayer too.

Fidelia? Maybe that was just blatant advertising for one of my stories!

Cheers,
DaveT.
Review By [MarcusRowland] • Date [11 Jun 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Seven." from (Current Donor)JanessaRavenwood
Review:
Nice finish there. A wonderful tie-in with your great story. As always, looking forward to more.
Comments from author:
Thank-you so much.

DaveT.
Review By [(Current Donor)JanessaRavenwood] • Date [11 Jun 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Five." from Hecatonchires
Review:
Interesting and funny. Interesting in the past, and funny in the future ^_^
Comments from author:
Thank-you.

Cheers,
DaveT.
Review By [Hecatonchires] • Date [10 Jun 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Five." from PATM
Review:
Very entertaining. I'm slow to review but keeping up with this is no trial. You seem to be taking it easy of Buffy and
I appreciate that. Now, about that foursome? It's a mans world alright cause I don' wanna know about some foursome
with another guy, gaaah. Poor Buffy but she's got some great friends or she could go shopping for another dimension.
Comments from author:
Foursome coming right up!

Cheers,
DaveT.
Review By [PATM] • Date [9 Jun 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Five." from JoeDineen
Review:
I have been meaning to review this since I read the first chapter, but I don't know what to say, really. I am not even sure how I feel about it, though I am enjoying the Willow. Kennedy, Xander menage a trios and the seduction of Buffy. I hope it clicks with me sometime though.
Comments from author:
Well not every story can be a winner with everyone, glad you're enjoying the Willow/Xander/Kennedy/Buffy thing.

Cheers,
DaveT.
Review By [JoeDineen] • Date [9 Jun 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Five." from CPTSkip
Review:
Yeah! Vorenus and Pullo have landed and the situation is well in hand, to paraphrase an old USMC saying. Nice to see the Roman chain of command in action. Lol! Also nice to see the boys kicking barbarian butts and taking names. Sorry, but I have always been a Roman Imperialist. I think I must have been a Legionnaire in a previous life. Lol!

I liked the way Giles is nearly a constant over the various time-lines. Near the end of this update, Dawn scratches her head and wonders if she has "flees" when I think she means "fleas". Other than that, great update. Lol! I do wonder just why Dawn is there. Oh, well. I guess we will soon find out.
Comments from author:
Yes your right FLEAs it is, I'll go back and change that.

Generally I'm pro-Roman, oddly I porefer commanding Greek armies...all those Pikes and heavy cavalry. I'm pro Roman up to about Boudica's rebellion when I tend to think the Romans got what they deserved!

Giles just haqs to be the same whenever he is!

You know one day I will write a story where things happen for no other reason than life's a bitch!

Cheers,
DaveT.
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [9 Jun 09] • Not Rated
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