Large PrintHandheldAudioRating
using
 paypal
Twisting The Hellmouth Crossing Over Awards - Results
Rules for Challenges

Smoke In the Wind

StoryReviewsStatisticsRelated StoriesTracking
Review of chapter "Blue, White and Red" from (Past Donor)TraceyC
Review:
I love this story - I didn't get to review it right when you released the last chapter due to a motherboard crash on my old machine [still picking up the pieces there]

You have all the characters down really well - as I probably said in a ff.net review, you even made me like Tony - I like Tony least of all the characters on NCIS.

Great piece of writing - I'm anticipating the sequel [I hope] just like I did every update.
Comments from author:
Sorry to hear about the computer woes - hope it's all working out and you could recover everything! I'd be beyond devastated if that happened to me, since I have the last four years of my life stored on my laptop. Should really look at a backup plan sometime.

Thanks for your review, and kind words (and sorry about the unfortunate liking of Tony). Sequel is in the works. Stay tuned. :)
Review By [(Past Donor)TraceyC] • Date [6 Sep 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Blue, White and Red" from Booster
Review:
Just wanted to add my appreciation for how well you've written Vance's character in this fic. Got to be a very tough job, balancing his little careful dances with Gibbs with just enough information leaking out around the edges to show, in snatches, how he really feels about the situation and the people involved. Bonus points for including just how he regards Tony which I've seen very few fic writers pick up on.
Comments from author:
There's a lot of Vance (and Eli) hate in the fandom. Which in some ways I get, because we've almost been set up for it - but I haven't seen anything yet that really made me think 'oh, that's completely evil.' This was my lame attempt at fleshing out their motivations etc - and to be honest it *was* a tough job, but enjoyable all the same. I'm toying with the idea of writing a Vance/Eli fic set back when they first met, actually. Someday.

Glad it worked for you, and thanks for saying so! :)
Review By [Booster] • Date [31 Aug 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Blue, White and Red" from (Past Donor)Catlimere
Review:
Outstanding! I love the way you concluded things, although I would love an epilogue to see what ends up happening with Hadas and of course more Tony/Ziva. :) I loved, loved, loved your Gibbs. Fabulous the way he looked out for both Tony and Ziva especially. I loved that he was willing to do everything he could, even knowing the limits of his power and reach, to keep Ziva with them. To keep her as safe as possible. Great job with the meeting between Vance, Eli and him. I think you did a great job with Eli, btw. Also fabulous conversation between Ziva and Eli, loved that you had her keep Tony there for support.

Beautiful plot, characterizations, dialogue...I absolutely enjoyed reading every word!
Comments from author:
I'm so glad you did - I really REALLY enjoyed writing it, though my academic life has taken a serious backseat to my shiny new addiction (well, an old addiction that's been dusted off recently). Once I get the latest round of assignments out of the way, I might start writing the sequel.

Gibbs is very much the stern-yet-proud daddy in their messed up little family, so it was interesting to play on that when I was writing, especially in this last part. And yeah, he's protective as all ****, but there's only so much he can do to stop higher powers from taking what's his. A lot of stuff I've read misses that point, so I tried to make it clear... without getting out my metaphor-hammer.

I always wanted to explore Eli and Vance as being something other than the token bad guys, since I honestly don't get all the hate that's attached to their character. I'd love to write their history, though in all honesty getting inside their heads was HARD, so it'll be a long time coming.

There will be more in this universe, once I've gotten a few other things out of the way (there are many things I've been *dying* to write and haven't had the chance). Watch this space ;)
Review By [(Past Donor)Catlimere] • Date [27 Aug 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Blue, White and Red" from Samarkand
Review:
An excellent end to the tale. I particularly enjoyed McGee and Gibbs' perspectives. The first because of the both funny and endearing geekiness inherent to the man. The second because it shows there is a very sharp mind behind a man who outwardly expresses himself in gruff pronouncements and behavioral tics.
Comments from author:
I'm filled with 'squee' that you liked my Gibbs and McGee, since they're two of the characters I wouldn't normally choose to write or claim that I wrote particularly well. Although in the grand scheme of things, if it's a choice between Gibbs, Leon and Eli, Gibbs would be the winner every time.

Leon and Eli = hard nuts to crack (though now I'm toying with the idea of writing a 'back in the supah sekkrit spy days' kind of story with them as central characters... hmm). As far as the 'Smokeverse' goes, this is only the beginning of the overall plan, though it's the end of my post-Aliyah hurt/comfort fanwank. (Yeah, still naughtier in Australian English)

As always, you rock like a Black Sabbath tribute band on a Saturday night for consistently reading and reviewing. (Now I might have time to write more Gunpowder... teehee)
Review By [Samarkand] • Date [27 Aug 09] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Blue, White and Red" from (Past Donor)Pax
Review:
I liked how you wrapped up the arc, but maybe if you don't feel like writing a sequel you can do a standalone or another chapter for the Tony/Ziva where-do-we-go-from-here business.
It's would be like a tasty teaser treat. Just a thought since I find it a little abrupt as an end, especially on a fairly highly unresolved and highly emotional note of the Ziva/Eli goodbye. And what I mean by unresolved is that by saying goodbye to Eli Ziva is not only distancing herself from her father, from her past but from who she is, who she has been for most of her adult life. She is distancing herself from her country, her mission. I think that would be devastating to her in many regards but also I think necessary for her to live again. Anyways, much with the ramble.
Your characterizations are very precise. Everytime I read I marvel at how true and tangible the characters feel. It's quite admirable. I enjoy the pace and flow of your writing style and also the poetry with which you infuse the character-feelings sections. I find that technique very evocative and very bittersweet. Beautiful.
Comments from author:
There's still more I want to do with the 'Smokeverse', but as far as the immediately-post-Aliyah arc goes, I feel like I've teased out all I can for now. The sequel would likely pick up a month or so down the track and be very much about consequences - for Ziva, for Tony, for Hadar and his merry band of terrorists.

In a sense, it was meant to be left a little unresolved, because I'm a fan of stories that make people wonder what happened afterwards rather than giving everyone all the answers. Bit like Aliyah, actually (though not in an omg what have they DONE to Tiva way). And as I said above, I've been toying with a sequel but couldn't find a way to jump forward in time smoothly (and I really don't have much interest in writing every single minute of the return).

Thanks so much for your lovely words about my writing (and for the awesome fanart, I can't say that enough!) - I continue to be amazed at the response to my slightly insane ramblings and my second-rate version of the horror that was Aliyah. Shock and awe.

Rambling = contagious. Your review = awesome. :)
Review By [(Past Donor)Pax] • Date [27 Aug 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Burnt Orange" from Cutiepie
Review:
Dang it! You've hooked me again! I was doing my best to NOT start reading this one until "Lost" was finished, and I just couldn't hold out. And, of course, it is incredible. I'm so glad that you are writing it.

I knew Ziva was asking for help when she said "Ayudame", since that was one word I used with frequency when I spent several weeks in a Spanish hospital (Oviedo, Spain, 1996) and did that ever bring back memories of pain! Not an intended side affect, I'm sure, but I could really connect with what poor Ziva was feeling.

You know, I've been thinking about that "flame" that you got complaining about you using terms that are not strictly American (candy floss vs. cotton candy vs. spun sugar) and I hope that you will be able to refrain from painting all Americans with that boorish idiot's brush. It was Ziva's memory, and Ziva is far from being American, so it was completely forgivable and actually understandable that she would use a non-American term. Besides which, I am most assuredly American (except for the complete transfusion of Spanish blood when I pretty much bled out at the beginning of the aforementioned hospital incident), and I have called said carnival treat both cotton candy and spun sugar for as long as I can remember. So, naah-pth, Mr/Ms Flamy McFlame Pants!

Oh no! Is babbling contagious? 'Cause I think I might have caught it!! Anyway, it is after 1:30 am now and I need to get some sleep. I hope my wacky babble has brought you a smile at least. =]
Comments from author:
An overwhelming no on the 'tarred with the same brush' idea. The vast majority of readers and reviewers (and I'm making the assumption that most of them/you are American) are made of awesome. It would be like watching 'Hollywood Australians' and assuming that we all wear Akubras, carry dirty great knives and wrestle crocodiles in our spare time. Stone the flamin' crows! *giggle*

Glad to hear that you liked it and that I've infected yet another person with babble-itis. Phase One of evil world domination plan, nearing completion. Bwahahaha!
Review By [Cutiepie] • Date [22 Aug 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Burnt Orange" from Samarkand
Review:
Wonderful dialogue, capturing the bounce and wit of the show.
Comments from author:
Awww, thanks so much. *blushes* I try my hardest.
Review By [Samarkand] • Date [12 Aug 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Burnt Orange" from Greywizard
Review:
Your writing is fantastic, since I can almost smell the dust in the wind blowing on from the desert.

Can't wait to see how Tony and Gibbs welcome Vance and Ziva's male parental unit. (I call him that because that fucker is NOT a father in any sense of the word, except possibly biological - and I really wouldn't bet against that possibility, wither.)
Comments from author:
Eh, Eli certainly wouldn't win father of the year, but 'sometimes-optimist' that I am, I'm trying incredibly hard to find some good amongst all the bastardry. (Eight feet down and still digging madly...) *grin*

Thanks for taking the time to review.
Review By [Greywizard] • Date [12 Aug 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Burnt Orange" from (Past Donor)Catlimere
Review:
I don't why I've neglected to review this story as I enjoy it as much as I do "Lost".

Your writing is just beautiful. Great characterization, great job with the character's voices, the dialogue, and their interactions. Really wonderful job fleshing out characters and their motivations. Also, it's fabulous reading Tony and Ziva trying to reconnect and rebuild their relationship. Love the glimpses of their thoughts, fears, reactions...Great stories and I look forward to more.
Comments from author:
As much as I want them to leap into each other's arms and forgive all transgressions, my inner realism/characterization gremlin chafes at the idea. It won't happen overnight - but it will happen :)

You always leave such lovely thoughtful reviews for both stories, and I'm eternally grateful. Thanks for making my day.
Review By [(Past Donor)Catlimere] • Date [12 Aug 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Pale Green" from Samarkand
Review:
Incredibly evocative, erotic, and moving. I could actually see a tiny pile of mortared bricks remaining at the lip of the "pool".
Comments from author:
This chapter was the hardest to write yet, possibly because I've been so caught up in the 'Lost' world, and the stories are so different (well, I like to think they are at least). Little bits of each creep into the other. Not that there's many people reading both at the same time (TTH is 'Lost' world, and ff.net is most definitely 'Smoke' world, which is not surprising)...

Huge thanks to you for tackling (and reviewing!) both, and if you notice any common bits, well, 'mi dispiace'. :)
Review By [Samarkand] • Date [5 Aug 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Pale Green" from tals
Review:
Beautiful...
Review By [tals] • Date [5 Aug 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chocolate" from Erica
Review:
The only review I can offer is that I am sure the season premiere probably wont but as good as this fic is so far.
Comments from author:
Aw, thanks so much! That's pretty damn high praise - I hope I can continue to live up to it. *gulp*
Review By [Erica] • Date [24 Jul 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chocolate" from Samarkand
Review:
I wish to say that everything about your writing makes my brain go "squee". The cadence of the language and the feeling for the characters combine to deliver a punch right to tje fic-appreciating portion of my brain. Clearly, monsoons and iPod Touches are a combination of win where you are concerned.
Comments from author:
Whoa. I'm sadly far, far less coherant when I'm not writing about other people. So I'll just say thanks ever so much, and leave it at that. :)
Review By [Samarkand] • Date [23 Jul 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chocolate" from Greywizard
Review:
Simply magnificent.

Thanks.
Review By [Greywizard] • Date [23 Jul 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chocolate" from Rhyssia
Review:
10 hours? Man, I feel for ya on that one.

Fun as always. I'd give it more thought, but unfortunately, I is just woken up. Also, Vance and Dad together... yup. Big badda boom comin' up.
Comments from author:
It sucked... but it passed quickly enough, thanks to free wi-fi in the airport and a power outlet nearby to plug in my iPod charger. I suspect my travel buddies thought I was writing the world's longest email, when actually I was writing Chapter 13. Big badda boom indeed.
Review By [Rhyssia] • Date [23 Jul 09] • Not Rated
Page: 1 of 3 next end
StoryReviewsStatisticsRelated StoriesTracking