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Review of chapter "Between Wednesdays" from KevinSchultz
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Grammar point - "God", when capitalized, is a proper noun, and refers to the monothiestic entity of Judiasm, Christianity, and Islam (although they'd prefer you use the arabic term "Allah", which translates directly to English as "God").

'god', when lower-case, refers to a general group of supernatural entities who are high on their own social hierarchy. (The difference between a god and a spirit is really rank - a god is a powerful spirit, and a spirit is a weak god.)

It's like the difference between Wolveriene and wolverienes - one is a specific character who has wolverine-like attribues, while the other is a category of fuzzy, low-slung carnivores.

EDIT - just went and checked the style that Gaiman uses in American Gods - yes, he capitalizes "Gods" - but it's in context of specific groups, such as "The Old Gods" (at least according to the quotes I found - it's been a while since I read it). Gramatically, this is eqivalent to giving proper nouns to sports teams, in order to distinguish them: ie, the Seahawks vs the Raiders. I believe when the original author is capitalizing "Gods", it's always a shortened version of "Old Gods" or eqivalent.

Thus, I suppose your grammar could be correct - but only if Shadow is specifically referring to a group that he believes the sea monster belongs to: ie, The Old Gods. Is this the case?

EDIT II - reviews can be many things: comments about the story as a whole, specific critiques about certian aspects, praise for the author, condemnation about the plot, etc. ad infinitum. This one just happens to be me pointing out a point of grammar. The reason I point it out is because it broke narrative immersion - that is, each time I saw it capitalized, it pulled me out of the story for a fraction of a second as I had to remind myself that you weren't referring to YHWH or Allah or Atman or whatever.

This is the reason authors use consistent grammar conventions - without it, readers have to conciously engage their brains to decode whatever it is the author is trying to communicate. This, in turn, pulls the reader out of the story, because they have to focus on the words and sentences themselves, rather than the meaning of those words and sentences.
Comments from author:
Hey its no problem. I actually appreciate editorial comments, so in all seriousness, thanks.

I don't suppose you'd be interested in editing a full-length novel I wrote?

By the way, I took your comments to heart and did something about it. I admit, I'm very bad when writing the word 'God'. Christian upbringing and everything.

Anyways...yeah.
Review By [KevinSchultz] • Date [25 Jun 09] • Not Rated
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