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Review of chapter "As a Beginning, This Really Sucks." from micedden
Review:
this story is a good one would like to see more.
Review By [micedden] • Date [1 Mar 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "As a Beginning, This Really Sucks." from spring
Review:
Okay this is different. I like it so far, I hope that you don't drop this story as so many have done on different themes. That makes me mad when I like a story and it's never finished. So saying that I didn't spot any tense errors so that's good. I look forward to the next installment of this potentially wonderful story. ^_^
Comments from author:
I'll admit, I have dropped stories in the past, but I've already kind of got an ending planned so this one should make it through. Thanks for keeping an eye out for tense errors, I really appreciate it. And thanks for the review, I swear, reviews are like chocolate, very addictive.
Review By [spring] • Date [30 Jun 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "As a Beginning, This Really Sucks." from silvergaurd
Review:
interesting, hope to see more.
Comments from author:
There will be, as soon as I get all the ideas that are buzzing around in my head to organize themselves. =P. Thanks for commenting.
Review By [silvergaurd] • Date [29 Jun 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "As a Beginning, This Really Sucks." from Caliadragon
Review:
Thank you for answering my challenge and I truly look forward to seeing what happens next.


Thanks
Calia
Comments from author:
Welcome, I've been meaning to get into Buffy fanfiction but haven't found anything really inspiring but your challenge caught my eye, so I'll see how it goes. =)
Review By [Caliadragon] • Date [29 Jun 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "As a Beginning, This Really Sucks." from djhardim
Review:
Good beginning. You need to watch your verb tense. You sometimes use present tense instead of past tense.

For example, in the following sentence -

The former angel of death makes a note in the book and waits for the ink to dry before flipping to the next page.

It should read

The former angel of death 'made' a note in the book and 'waited' for the ink to dry before flipping to the next page.

made instead of makes, and waited instead of waits.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review and the help. I don't know why I always have so much trouble with tenses.
Review By [djhardim] • Date [29 Jun 09] • Not Rated
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