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Review of chapter "Chapter 3: The Origin of the Line" from ChefJackButler
Review:
Well-written, yes. But it is a well-written Idiot Plot (a story that requires all the characters to be idiots), not to mention it requires them all to act completely out of character.

The out of character thing was an inherent part of the challenge, though, so it's possible that wasn't your fault.
Review By [ChefJackButler] • Date [22 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3: The Origin of the Line" from FireWolfe
Review:
I hate hanging endings. Dawns still a kid and kids are self centered but I do get why buffy hurt. Love to see them get over it eventually. The rest I can see her point.
Review By [FireWolfe] • Date [21 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3: The Origin of the Line" from (Current Donor)BaronScrewtape
Review:
Grr... I normally love your writing, but unless I missed my reading of this story all the minis have been returned to potential status?
Always unilaterally hate these stories as they take away from Buffy's great accomplishment: Changing the world in a permanent way for the better where there is no longer only one girl in all the world, but many such girls, so that no one would have to suffer alone like she had. I fear I hate these stories as much as the 'Dawn fades away after Sacrifice' stories; they invalidate Buffy's sacrifices and struggles in a Deus Ex Machina way that is kind of horrific to me.

Basically I just read this as now things are back to the bad old days of slayers (or protectors) fighting nightly alone (or with much weaker human support) until they die a year (or maybe a few years) later when some vamp has a good day.

Anyway, sorry to hate a bit on this story. Been enjoying your others. Mostly because I am tired of the Xander worship that seems to dominate this site. (Guys, Xander was just supposed to be a good guy who helped out as best he could. Not a saint. Not a hero. A man. With all sorts of flaws that got people mind controlled and killed.)

Now, on to the next of your stories. Hopefully you have one in here where Faith shoves Willow's self righteous rant from 'Choices' down her throat over her Darth Willow exploits.
Comments from author:
I just keep thinking about how having 2 Slayers apparently upset the balance enough to allow The First to do its thing, so having hundreds/thousands of them would probably end the world. And don't get me started on how Buffy was able to close the portal instead of Dawn. I mean, it's not as if she had some mystical Key shoved into her manufactured body, too.

Hmm, I'll have to see about the Faith/Willow thing, though.
Review By [(Current Donor)BaronScrewtape] • Date [7 May 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3: The Origin of the Line" from getjrjt
Review:
I really like this story any chance you will continue it?
Comments from author:
Not sure if continue would be the right word, but it's possible that I might come back someday to expand it (especially Buffy's time at the SGC).
Review By [getjrjt] • Date [19 Jul 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3: The Origin of the Line" from bradsan
Review:
I sequel please. I'm curuous how they gone"alter" Buffy and the meaning of it for Buffy. Will she become above the line or what. Or did you already made a sequel that I missed.
Comments from author:
Nope, no sequel yet. To be honest, I haven't really considered what comes next.
Review By [bradsan] • Date [1 Jan 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3: The Origin of the Line" from Blackett
Review:
Loved the story. It would be nice if you had a sequel.
Comments from author:
Or at least a companion piece of Buffy meeting Daniel and Jack, then becoming part of the program. We'll see when I get time.
Review By [Blackett] • Date [27 Oct 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3: The Origin of the Line" from Vickzie
Review:
Cool story. Looking forward to the next update!
Comments from author:
This story is complete, but I might expand the chapters someday if the mood ever strikes.
Review By [Vickzie] • Date [5 Oct 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3: The Origin of the Line" from AtotheM
Review:
Not bad, I really like where it is going. Gotta say I have no problem with the Scooby bashing, as much as I often love them they were SO out of line.

Like Daniel being all big brothery.

Hope more will come! :)
Comments from author:
Someday - not sure when - I hope to flesh it out a bit, maybe build on it beyond the confrontation.
Review By [AtotheM] • Date [12 Aug 11] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 3: The Origin of the Line" from serenityselena
Review:
wonderful story ....
Buffy deserves to have her own life ^__^
Comments from author:
Darn tootin' she does!
Review By [serenityselena] • Date [11 Feb 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3: The Origin of the Line" from nightshadowlife
Review:
Would love to see you expand on this story more!!!!! I love it!!!!
Comments from author:
Maybe someday. We'll see what happens with Musie when she's not so busy with other stories/bunnies.
Review By [nightshadowlife] • Date [4 Apr 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Prologue: Making a Change" from (Moderator)Ava
Review:
Wow. So I guess this story won’t be focused on Buffy moving on with her life and evolving as a character. Instead it will revolve around Buffy showing the Scoobies that her new life and friends are way nicer and cooler then her old ones. Um… didn’t you already write this, but with Charmed as the crossover ‘verse?

Also Daniel was called Space Monkey *once* throughout the entire ten year run of Stargate. The use of ‘Space Monkey’ leaves me to believe you’ve read a lot of Stargate fanfiction and haven’t seen a lot of the show.

Edit :: First Happy New Year and second thank you. I had not realized I had used ‘space monkey’ in ‘Hollow Places.’ Truth be told I had only seen about a handful of Stargate episodes when I began that story and relied heavily on my beta who was more versed in the series. I knew I had used it mockingly in ‘Fragmented Path’ but the ‘Hollow Places’ reference slipped past my recent rewrite, but I have removed it now.
Comments from author:
The challenge was for Buffy and SG-1 to save the day when the Scoobies wanted her back again. The difference between ‘Charmed Places’ and this fic is that in this one, the show ended the way it normally did before they parted ways. In that one, they had already started the process of rebuilding the relationships that could be rebuilt.

I’ve watched every *single* episode of Stargate SG-1 more than once. Just because it was only said once, doesn’t mean that it was the only time he said it. And between him and Buffy, the chances of that nickname falling to the wayside are slim-to-none.

EDIT: I can't believe that you would criticize me for using the nickname when you have done it in one of your own fics ('Hollow Places'). Does that mean you haven't watched the show either?
Review By [(Moderator)Ava] • Date [1 Jan 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3: The Origin of the Line" from spk
Review:
Love the way the Lya dealt with the Scoobies. Ecstatic that you included the Furlings. Can't wait to read more. :)
Comments from author:
I'll try to get back to this *sometime*. Figured the Scoobies wouldn't let this go so someone had to take care of it.
Review By [spk] • Date [27 Sep 09] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 3: The Origin of the Line" from nightshadowlife
Review:
lol I love the short story aspect but it would be awesome to see it expanded!! lol
Comments from author:
Something tells me that I'll have to draw it out at a future date, if only to protect myself from the reviewers. LOL
Review By [nightshadowlife] • Date [1 Aug 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3: The Origin of the Line" from eliseth
Review:
Now I've read this story for a second time.
And I want a sequel now!!! :P pretty please?
Pretty, pretty please... with a cherry on top? ;)
Comments from author:
Well, as much as I'd like to help you out, there are some other stories that I have to finish off first. But who knows, maybe Musie will assume control again and make me do it.
Review By [eliseth] • Date [26 Jul 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 3: The Origin of the Line" from (Recent Donor)SlayerandWereLeopard
Review:
lol gotta love buffy and jacks banter!
Comments from author:
Thanks. They are a fun pair.
Review By [(Recent Donor)SlayerandWereLeopard] • Date [22 Jul 09] • Not Rated
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