Nice touch having her coffin be in the side/slope of the crater. It's true that a normal person can't dig out of a six-foot-deep coffin, but the subsidence could easily have brought it a lot closer to the surface.
Giles will be happy.
Review By [Shieldage] • Date [31 Oct 09] • Rating [9 out of 10]
I am looking forward to read any future chapters you might get inspired to add to this story.
::Gives the plot bunny some Waldorf Salad::
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Review By [Dragonelf] • Date [11 Jul 09] • Not Rated
This is interesting. Will Jenny continue to pretend that she doesn't know how she's alive again. She's not really dissembling now... more like disorientated.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [8 Jul 09] • Not Rated
Good story can't wait to see what happens with Jenny (possibly) not knowing Dawn. There's a lot of room to work with for teachers for her as well. I seem to remember Duncan having a number of ties to Gypsies back in the 1800's.
Review By [angrymonkey] • Date [8 Jul 09] • Not Rated
poor Giles will have a heart attack. Poor Jenny--she's 5 years out of date on things. She & the scoobies are a lot closer in age now, too, come to think of it. * Gotta figure some immortal will try to take her head at some point, and get a bunch of brassed off slayers after him or her. that could be funny. Meanwhile. Damn, is she now way way obsolete on computers/software now or what?
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [8 Jul 09] • Not Rated
Huh... not the first time Jenny Calendar has been brought back from the dead after being buried but at least an interesting take on it.
Technical note: contrary to popular belief and the movies it is physical impossible for an ordinary human to dig themselves out of their own grave. There is no way she could have pushed open the lid of her coffin against the weight of the ton or two of dirt on top of it. To say nothing of air issues.
Hopefully she wasn't in a metal coffin and was able to punch her way though it (like The Bride in Kill Bill) - if she had the strength of a slayer or vampire instead of that of an ordinary mortal.
Of course, a slayer would run out of air before digging themselves out (vampires don't need air) so the whole Buffy digging herself out of her grave is suspect also. I'm assuming she (Jenny) died several times on her way up?
Pacing seems okay in the beginning, though you're doing a lot of telling, not showing. From the moment Buffy sees her, it seems very rushed. Only a paragraph or two to explain so many years between her death and rebirth? As soon as they see her? That part needs expansion/work.
Considering that she wasn't totally freaked out by waking up again, I'll go out on a limb and say that Jenny knows she's an Immortal? I hope she doesn't try to hide that fact from them. We remember how keeping secrets turned out last time for her. Are you giving her and Giles another chance at happiness? As much as she angered me back then, I felt really bad that Giles lost a chance at love with a person who knew and understood their world. Hope you update soon.
Review By [mmooch] • Date [8 Jul 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]