Review of chapter "Meals and Makeovers" from bellec
Great story! And original! By the way, because of your story I have started to re-watch the series, you are evil!! xD
Now, ideas... Okay, let me think...Ah!
How did the virus affect the no-normal humans(like werewolves, for example)?
Wolfram&Hart: There's an episode were they said that Wolfram had made experiments with virus. Did they have something to do with this one? It would be a good plan... Champions can fight demons, but they won't be able to fight a virus. And it's easier to take over when the defenders are kids...
Vampires, humans and the First Evil: In Season 7, the First mentions that once the vampires outnumbered the humans it would recover its physical form. Back to the fact that kids don't make great fighters, Dawn's going to have a big problem once she learns about that.
Following that line of thought, if she ever learns about the First, how does she learn?
PD: Don't give up on this story, it has a lot of potential, ;)
I nearly forgot about Spike! He promised Buffy that he would protect Dawn, so there's the possibility that he's around searching for Dawn. It would be interesting to see how Dawn explains Spike to the others,(maybe that's how they learn about vampires? I just can't see Spike going along with the virus excuse, he's too proud of being a vampire for that, xD)
And I agree with Orion. Our favourite anual event, is going to happen sooner or later. And while I think that the mall rats will get scared by the idea, they might get more scared when Dawn mentions that "apocalypse" should be used in plural and considered an anual event with a warm up that starts a few months before.
There're also some details that you can use, like Dawn not wanting to use the "W" word or her telling the kids about the true Santa Claus. And don't forget the Scooby-speak, xD
And now that I think about it... Is Dawn still going to get kidnapped every Tuesday?
By the way, a gift to feed the plot bunny:http://www.tthfanfic.org/Story-20528-7/bellec+Crossing+over.htm
Review By [bellec
] • Date [1 Mar 10] • Not Rated