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Review of chapter "Welcome To The Fleet" from DavidFraser
Review:
I really enjoyed what you've written so far... Well done!
Review By [DavidFraser] • Date [22 Feb 14] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Welcome To The Fleet" from MarcusSLazarus
Review:
VERY nice bit of work you have here, to say the least.

From the beginning, you created an excellent new take on the ‘Galactica’ universe with Dawn Thrace as an additional character, managing to make sufficient use of her past as Dawn Summers to show that she’s still the same character while adding in enough additional details to make her interesting, and the subsequent plot has certainly not disappointed.

With Whistler’s visit providing her with a plausible reason to be in this world, Dawn’s new life pre-Cylon-attack might be briefly handled, but you provide us with the essential details needed, to say nothing of a plausible look at how Dawn survives the attack long enough to reunite with Kara while acting alone without any survivalist training.

Your dream sequences and Leoben’s role in Dawn’s survival are also handled well, fitting in neatly with the ‘supernatural’ elements of the original series without directly contradicting either side’s traditional visions, and the reunion with Dawn and Kara is also handled well, Dawn offering her indirect support to Helo and Sharon’s relationship without doing it in such a manner as to make her sister too angry at her (Particularly nice touch when you account for Dawn not exposing the doc too soon ever after witnessing the Fours in action during her travels).

The return to the Fleet is also handled well, as Kara finds herself ‘forced’ to rely on Sharon to protect Dawn even if she doesn’t fully trust the future Athena herself, and it looks like Dawn’s going to develop some interesting friendships with the rest of the ‘Galactica’ crew; past relationships with Billy and Kara, not a fan of Zarek or Apollo, willing to trust and accept Sharon and Helo, evidently not comfortable with Roslin, and not had enough time so far to bond with Adama…

Hope you’re going to continue this eventually; there is FAR too much potential for this story to be abandoned!
Comments from author:
Thanks! I'm actually hoping to pick this up again soon- the reason for the long hiatus was me having loaned out my BSG DVDs to a friend, leaving myself no good way to rewatch to be sure I'm not making a hash of canon. (One of my goals when I started was to make it as plausible as possible, and not mess overly much with canon, although clearly there will be a few noticeable changes.) Now that they've come home, I need to feel my way back into the story so hopefully the long break won't be too apparent. And wow, the break is even longer than I thought, now that I look at the stats. There are a few nearly done chapters that shouldn't need too much work... I need to get watching/writing!
Review By [MarcusSLazarus] • Date [13 Feb 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Welcome To The Fleet" from (Current Donor)Katrina
Review:
Just found this and spent the day reading. Good stuff. Thank you for sharing it.
Review By [(Current Donor)Katrina] • Date [1 Nov 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Welcome To The Fleet" from (Recent Donor)DeepBlueJoy
Review:
Please don't let yourself get stuck on the lack of a perfect next chapter. I have had this happen to me and sometimes you just have to put up a so so/ decent chapter so you can move along to the better stuff you have that comes after it. It sounds as if you know where you're going... so... get on it!

This is too good a story to let lay fallow. I have read too few BSG/Buffy stories worth the read. I love your portrayal of Dawn and can't wait to see what comes next.

Thanks,

Blue
Review By [(Recent Donor)DeepBlueJoy] • Date [24 Jun 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Welcome To The Fleet" from NutsContract
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I know it's been over a year, but I really hope you haven't given up on this story. It's so well written, and it really does deserve to be finished. Please, oh please, update soon!
Review By [NutsContract] • Date [30 Mar 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Welcome To The Fleet" from AndreaMaine
Review:
I added this review because I think it is time to add a chapter to this story. I think others would love to see where it goes post Kobol.
Comments from author:
It's on my to-do list, but I can't make any definite statement about when the next chapter will be posted. (If I can just get the next chapter sorted to my satisfaction, there are a couple chapters beyond it already written.)
Review By [AndreaMaine] • Date [26 Feb 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Welcome To The Fleet" from BloodClover
Review:
MOAR SOON!
Review By [BloodClover] • Date [30 Jan 13] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Welcome To The Fleet" from HananeELmokkadem
Review:
This is the sixth time I've read this story, and it just gets better and better every time I read it. I hope you update soon because it's worth finishing.

Hanane
Comments from author:
There should be updates coming soon. I think I've finally sorted out the reason I was stuck, so once I rewatch a couple season 2 episodes to refresh my memory, there should be progress on this again. (I WILL finish this one- I know how it ends, it's just a question of getting there!)
Review By [HananeELmokkadem] • Date [8 Jan 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The End Is The Beginning" from airythia
Review:
I've just discovered it and read all of it over the course of 2 days. I've only seen the first season of BSG but I'm loving this story. I love how spunky Dawn is. That line you wrote about socks too...perfect. I was thinking that we she was in the hiking store saying she wanted to try and pack an extra pair of shoes! I was like, "No! Go for more socks!" so I was happy to see you added that. It seemed like you have done some backpacking or at least researched it. :)

Anyways, I hope you eventually pick the story back up because I would love to read how Dawn influences everything.
Comments from author:
Thanks! I've actually not done much backpacking, but as someone who has had to schlep around in wet socks before, some things are blindingly obvious once you've learned them the hard way. I plan to pick this back up again soon, but I seem to be on a streak with a couple other things right now, so they've got priority. (Also, I need to rewatch season two before I continue- make sure I have the events of the Pegasus section of the timeline clear in my head before I write them.)
Review By [airythia] • Date [6 Jan 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Welcome To The Fleet" from AndreaMaine
Review:
I know I've already reviewed this story. I just wonder if in the course of the voyage will some young child look up at one of the adults and say those age old words, "Are we there yet?"
Review By [AndreaMaine] • Date [17 Oct 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Welcome To The Fleet" from AndreaMaine
Review:
From what I've read so far you should continue this story at least until you've reached the end you want for it.
Comments from author:
It's not abandoned, never fear.
Review By [AndreaMaine] • Date [8 Oct 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Welcome To The Fleet" from AndreaMaine
Review:
I think your story is wonderful. I think that you have a nice storyline going here. I also would like to say that it would be nice to see Dawn make it to Earth with the Fleet and Kara Thrace not fall into the maelstrom on the way to Earth. Also by Daybreak it would also be nice for them not to find primitive Earth, but now Earth.
Comments from author:
Thanks! Dawn's got quite a bit ahead of her, and hopefully I will get back to regular updates soon. (I just got my BSG dvds back, so that should help. I need to be able to check canon when I write.)
Review By [AndreaMaine] • Date [4 Oct 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Welcome To The Fleet" from Duquette
Review:
This story is amazingly well written, you have the voices of your characters down pat, the emotional reactions are compelling and drive the plot, and it just hangs together beautifully.
Review By [Duquette] • Date [23 Aug 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Welcome To The Fleet" from moonstarsfu
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I just found this and read it all in one go, it is amazing! You have done an excellent job of blending Dawn into BSG, I can totally see her as Kara's sister. I'm so excited to see what happens next.
Review By [moonstarsfu] • Date [1 Jul 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Welcome To The Fleet" from grd
Review:
Great to see snother chapter. Always love it when Dawn is underestimated and others are surprised.
Review By [grd] • Date [31 Mar 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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