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Review of chapter "Hare today, gone tomorrow" from (Recent Donor)Luna
Review:
What a wonderful cast of characters!! Brilliant :)

She straightened herself up, and tried to subtly thrust her chest forwards as she smiled at him over the rim of her coffee cup.
-- this was hilarious :) Alice/Neo? hahaha

And Austin Powers at the end- brilliant!
Comments from author:
Glad you enjoyed it.
Review By [(Recent Donor)Luna] • Date [22 Apr 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Hare today, gone tomorrow" from justapiranha
Review:
Did we ever find out why Anya is afread of bunnys? I really liked it.
Review By [justapiranha] • Date [7 Sep 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Hare today, gone tomorrow" from fastpilot
Review:
I believe you've neglected Jimmy Carter as a known sufferer of rabbit fear.

Other than that it it's a quite worthy thing.
Comments from author:
Well, there is the slight issue of the real person rule.
Review By [fastpilot] • Date [6 Sep 09] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Hare today, gone tomorrow" from (Recent Donor)DaveTurner
Review:
My biggest laugh was for Bold Sir Robin who ran away! Toast and marmalade everywhere!

Seriously, I'd not realised how serious the fear of rabbits was. I was, myself, viciously attacked by a rabbit when I was about four. This has obviously scarred me for life (it explains a lot when you think about it), if only I'd known there were support groups like Anya's around I might have been able to live a relatively normal life.

Thank-you for bringing this to my attention,
DaveT.
Review By [(Recent Donor)DaveTurner] • Date [6 Sep 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Hare today, gone tomorrow" from (Moderator)JoeHundredaire
Review:
Bwa ha ha ha ha...

That's awesome. Freakin awesome.
Review By [(Moderator)JoeHundredaire] • Date [5 Sep 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Hare today, gone tomorrow" from Mediancat
Review:
Well done. I laughed more than a few times.

I was expecting Adrian Monk or a couple of the characters from Sluggy Freelance. Good job in being surprising and logical both.
Review By [Mediancat] • Date [5 Sep 09] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Hare today, gone tomorrow" from Dragonelf
Review:
::Does the "Shave and a hair cut two pence" knock::

You did a good job with this story. By the way, do you remember the "Shave and a hair cut" scene from Who Framed Roger Rabbit?

::Starts looking for her Who Framed Roger Rabbit! DVD while humming "The Song That Never Ends"::

"This is the song that never ends,
It goes on and on, my friends.
People started singing it, not knowing what it was,
And people kept singing it forever just because..."

::Giggles Insanely::

#=#=#=#=#=#=#=#=#=#=#=#=#
There are 350 varieties of shark,
not counting loan and pool.
- L. M. Boyd
#=#=#=#=#=#=#=#=#=#=#=#=#

EDIT: ::Glares at herself:: I thought I got rid of "The Song That Never Ends" from my mind. Ear Worms are evil.
Comments from author:
This will erase it. The only problem being what it replaces it with....

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=SOvu4VARsao
Review By [Dragonelf] • Date [5 Sep 09] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Hare today, gone tomorrow" from (Past Donor)Ponder
Review:
*ROFL* OMG, that had me in stitches. And thanks for introducing me to that song! I'm still listening to it...


stole my elludium PU-36
stole my illudium PU-36
Google has 539 hits on elludium, 39000 hits on illudium.

ETA:

Thanks for making the fixes. Corrections removed, except for the one you directly commented on in your response.

No, I don't think you're writing too-short sentences. They're fine. Many commas aren't there to represent pauses; they're necessary to clue the reader in that the sentence structure is nonstandard. Without a direct address comma, the reader's mind has one of those little stumbles and attempts to parse the following word(s) the wrong way before figuring it out. You might find this page helpful: http://www.iolani.honolulu.hi.us/Keables/KeablesGuide/PartFour/Commas.htm

*** Ponder
Comments from author:
Thanks for the corrections. Sometimes I wonder I write too many of those two/three word sentences that require commas. As for Illuidium, I'm surprised it's had the cultural impact to garner that many hits - I only found out about it when I searched for Marvin this afternoon on Google Video and watched a few cartoons to get the character.
Review By [(Past Donor)Ponder] • Date [5 Sep 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Hare today, gone tomorrow" from (Recent Donor)Manchester
Review:
*Snickering.*

I take it the meeting didn't end with the room singing the following:

The moves: Right, right
Left, left
Up
Back
Hop, hop, hop
(repeat)

Put your right foot forward
Put your left foot out
Do the Bunny Hop
Hop, hop, hop!

Dance this new creation
It's the new sensation
Do the Bunny Hop
Hop, hop, hop!

Let's all join in the fun
Father, mother, son
Do the Bunny Hop
Hop, hop, hop!

Knock knock
Who's there?
Ammonia
Ammonia trying to be funny!

Good work, jrabbit!
Comments from author:
And I thought I'd found that scariest song about rabbits! Glad you enjoyed it.
Review By [(Recent Donor)Manchester] • Date [5 Sep 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Hare today, gone tomorrow" from Greywizard
Review:
Did Austin actually make it out of the meeting alive? ;-)
Comments from author:
Of course he did - the guy's got charm!
Review By [Greywizard] • Date [5 Sep 09] • Not Rated
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