Review of chapter "Torchwood" from leb
this is a good story so far
Review By [leb
] • Date [8 Oct 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Torchwood" from Netchka
Cool story. Can't wait for the next chapters to come.
Review By [Netchka
] • Date [10 Nov 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Torchwood" from Vickzie
Loving the story, it was so cute what he did for the baby
Review By [Vickzie
] • Date [23 Oct 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Torchwood" from spring
Interesting, I look forward to the next installment.
Review By [spring
] • Date [6 Dec 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Torchwood" from Markelo
I think Alexa should say Alexa after the little girl is born. What about Smallville? I can see Clark, Chloe, Lois, and the Justice guys trying to protect her and she isn't happy. Then there's Dead Like Me. Have George be the Boss of the Reapers.
Review By [Markelo
] • Date [2 Dec 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Charmed" from Hawklan
weired meeting with the charmed ones :)
Review By [Hawklan
] • Date [27 Nov 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Torchwood" from AXanFan
I think I am a little lost -- partly because I don't know about all of the verses you are crossing and there seems to be some contradiction. Supposedly you had Xander leave the Hellmouth because he needed to avoid magic among other things, but having her be orbed multiple times by Paige would have exposed her to a lot of magic -- why didn't that destabilize the spells?
Also I am a little confused by Xander/Alexa being created by the ancient gods as "the one who sees", but her daughter is a great seer not Alexa.
I know that you can't get too caught up in the mundane when writing an interesting story, but what is Alexa living on -- I know that Xander did not have any real money and Giles never really had any or I assume he would have done more to help Buffy financially when her mother died. It might make sense to have Alexa get the occasional job to pay for her travels. Also at some point Alexa will be too far along in her pregnancy to safely travel by plane. Is she going to settle back in the States eventually?
I did not mean for this to be so critical -- I just had a lot of questions come up as I read each chapter -- you have a very interesting premise here -- it is just a little hard to follow so far -- I really am looking forward to see where else you take this. Please write more soon.
Comments from author:
Thank you. I'll have to go back through and see about tying up some of the plot holes. I do have a chapter in mind where Alexa has a job. I don't have it all figured out yet but I'm hoping to somehow have her work at the Roadhouse in Supernatural but you have brought up a good point with the magic. I'll have to find some way to explain that.
Alexa is the one who sees and Faith as the Slayer more than likely passed on a bit of the Slayer visions to her daughter. In combination I see those two creating a powerful child. Maybe I'll need to explain it a bit better though.
I'm hoping to figure out the ending before she's too far along in her pregnancy but for now I'm kinda hoping to be hit on the head with an idea. Hasn't happened yet but I can hope.
If you see any other holes in the story let me know. Critique is always welcome as it makes for a better, easier to understand story. Thanks again.
Review By [AXanFan
] • Date [15 Nov 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Twilight" from Hawklan
nice story so far, even if the concept of Xan turning into a woman to carry the child
is a bit strange, but it's something new and until now I loved to read what you have written
and I'm courious of what will come next.
Comments from author:
My muse is twisted that way ... she scares me sometimes. *giggle*
I'm kinda stuck on the next location. It's the Harry Potter one and there's so much I want it to show. I'm having trouble making it even semi-believable. It's my longest yet and to make matter harder - it takes place during one of the books so I've got my trusty copy as reference. I'm slowly, at a snail's pace, working through it. Hopefully I'll have it done by Christmas. *crosses fingers*
After that there are only one or two more crossovers I'd like to fit in somewhere before I can worry about wrapping it all up. Knowing there are others out there just waiting to read what's next really does help get the muse in gear so thanks. :)
Review By [Hawklan
] • Date [12 Nov 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Torchwood" from Neverwillmini
Love the Torchwood crossover, wish it were longer. I'd actually like to see Alex stick around Cardiff. Jack could commiserate over being a man and pregnant (even if Alex is a girl for now). Tosh could use a friend, Gwen could use a smack upside the head, and Owen could use being around/caring for a baby to help heal his battered heart a bit. I like the idea that Jack might see Xander/Alex as a younger sibling (who understands about hard choices). I also usually like slash, but since I don't want to mess with Jack/Ianto, I think Tosh might be a good choice to pair with Alex. Since she's bi, she'll do well with either of his incarnations. And most of all, Alex could use a doctor around soon that is used to rolling with the weird. Maybe he can join their team as a supernatural liason (can't really say 'expert' yet), or since Ianto will soon start being more of a field agent, maybe Alex can take over some of the handyman/tourist office/coffee making duties while they make him study for his GED.
PS: I meant to ask, what was that drink Ares gave Alex in the last chapter? Did he maybe get some Golden Apple juice? It would be interesting if Ares made him immortal, then directed him to Jack. If he did make him immortal, would the baby also be immortal once she hits a certain age?
Review By [Neverwillmini
] • Date [23 Oct 09] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Torchwood" from MegKF
I've just re-read your entire story for the third time today. I really enjoyed it. Even the crossovers that I haven't watched were enjoyable and I felt I got what you were writing without having to know those stories. ^-^
I'm curious to know a couple of things though.
Is this supposed to be a straight time-line? Because you have Alexa go to San Francisco, (to Europe) England, (then back to the states) Forks, Eureka, (to Europe again) Greece and then to England again. It would make more sense for Being Human to have taken place after Eureka.
Eureka- Did Alexa get into Global Dynamics and not Eureka? Because Jack didn't get interrogated when he entered the town, I know they have automated unauthorized visitor type warning revealing the identity of the visitor, but Jo didn't know Jack was a US Marshal when he first arrived so that's a new thing. I was under the impression nothing would happen to people passing through Eureka unless they saw something they shouldn't have. So when in the Eureka time line did she show up in? Because I'm thinking it was pre-Jack, he would have been involved if he'd been there right?
Twilight- Something I think you might find interesting. I read some back story info on Stephanie Meyer's website that said Aro turned his little sister because he suspected she'd have a gift too, her ability made people around her happy, and later he secretly killed her when she was going to leave with Marcos(?) to keep Marcos and his more useful gift by Aro's side. This being why Marcos was so uncaring in the books. I hope I got the name right, it's been awhile...
Review By [MegKF
] • Date [24 Sep 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Eureka" from enderverse
It's funny because Eureka was filled with pregnant women this season.
Review By [enderverse
] • Date [24 Sep 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Torchwood" from slmncpm
this is great! thank you!
Review By [slmncpm
] • Date [23 Sep 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Torchwood" from Cdog
This is a really good story and I look forward to reading more. Although I don't know why I was expecting this to take place later in the series when I saw the title of the chapter.
As for the pairing thing I picked het, simply for the fact that if Xander stays a girl lesbian anything gets boring to me REALLY quickly (its kinda weird feeling like that since I'm a guy). If you decide to turn him back and make it a slash pairing. . . yeah I probably would stop reading because even though I don't find anything wrong with it I just don't get enjoyment from it.
In fact the only slash fic I have ever read was because one of the guys, while saying he is male, both looked and acted like a woman. If you were wondering who I was talking about it's the character Flea form Chrono Trigger, all of the official character art for him has him with breasts and looking very feminine.
I think your best bet would be a no pairing. At least that way no one leaves because the story takes a direction they don't feel comfortable with. So far the story hasn't had a pairing either and people enjoy it so why change it now.
As for crossover material I would go with more supernatural stuff. Dresden Files, Kindred, heck I just watched Eastwick on ABC have Van Horne hit on Xander for giggles.
Review By [Cdog
] • Date [23 Sep 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Torchwood" from musiclover
ok this is a good one
Review By [musiclover
] • Date [23 Sep 09] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Torchwood" from RojoOjo
Well written and gets me a little curious on what you will write next.
Here are some you could cross with and make work (I think)
The Dresden Files
Any of the CSIs
Dead Like Me
Men in Black
Tru Calling (would really like to see this one)
you can find most of the list Here.http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/List_of_Syfy_programs
Review By [RojoOjo
] • Date [23 Sep 09] • Rating [8 out of 10]