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Review of chapter "Chapter Three: So what exactly did I get?" from GundumM
Review:
well written and good, except for making no sense once so ever
Review By [GundumM] • Date [30 Mar 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three: So what exactly did I get?" from silasd
Review:
Your ideas are intriguing to me and I wish to subscribe to your newsletter.

The humor is decent, but I felt the cameos got out of hand.

The fic seems a bit low-key and lacking energy. Give some thought to shorter sentences, more active voice phrases, and more action words. I do understand that's hard in a conversation-heavy work.

Add names to your spellchecker so typos show up. I caught Voldermort, Tonk, Hermioe, Grimmaul, and Pomphrey. I considered Voldeschmort intentional.

Nitpick: Hermione should call herself a muggleborn, not a muggle.

Nitpick: Grimmauld Place is a street. It is not under Fidelius. If the entire street is unplottable, it must be for some other reason. 12 Grimmauld Place is a house, and is (presumably still) under Fidelius.

Nitpick: Harry deliberately conceals the fact that the motorcycle can fly. Yet Hermione previously noted that it "incidentally can FLY!".
Review By [silasd] • Date [13 Mar 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three: So what exactly did I get?" from Innogen
Review:
LOL! The house on three chicken legs sounds like it from a Russian tale, but it's not in any of my books *have to update them, I guess* - the rest of the time I feel like I'm listening to a radio show...and never quite know what's going on, but only because I don't get the references. Hermione could get Dobby's attention if she yells out that she will pay more than Dumbledore! Then she can seethe at how little Dumbledore paid him to begin with! I did get 'A vague disclaimer is nobody's friend' - but I'm not sure if my source is even the original one. (Buffy? Buffy Fanfic? Or did they swipe it from someone else?).

Looking forward to the next chapter.
Comments from author:
Okay, just for you I made a list of things mentioned overtly or obliquely in that chapter. :)
So in no particular order we have
Pokemon, SM:TV live with Ant, Dec and Cat Dealey (British Saturday morning show)
Russian Fairy Tales, with Baba Yaga
The first Santa Clause movie (1994)
Chevy Chase
The Magnificent 7
National Treasure (the so this is what it feels like scene)
Psych (only because I seem to have been channelling Shawn and Jules without having seen the show)
Princess Diaries II ( the bike scene - take the bike - what bike? - your grandfather's bike!)
Terry Pratchett's DEATH, cause he had a horse called Binky and built himself a flying, flaming motorcycle in Soul Music
Coen (I think) brothers movies cause they have bad things happening to cows all the time.
Hope that helped. Thanks for the review. and there should be another one soon.
Oh yes and of course the vague disclaimer line which is from Buffy although I don't know if that is fanon or canon.
Review By [Innogen] • Date [4 Jan 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three: So what exactly did I get?" from Dragonelf
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Yay, new chapter.

Happy New Year to you.

I noticed that in your story that one of Potter's ancestors got married to a relative of the famous Russian witch Baba Yaga or possibly even the witch herself.

::Gives the plot bunny some Coconut rice::

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Comments from author:
I like to think it was the with herself and that being Baba yaga was kinda a hobby for her. Hence the title 'the eccentric'. The Wizards seem to go for stuff like that. Amusing to tease the muggles and help the deserving, while teaching the lazy and undeserving a lesson. And now that is niggling at my head, asking to be written.
Review By [Dragonelf] • Date [3 Jan 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three: So what exactly did I get?" from RowanChick
Review:
Amusing and really good can't wait to read more!!!
Comments from author:
Thank you for the kind words.
Review By [RowanChick] • Date [3 Jan 10] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three: So what exactly did I get?" from Shezzi
Review:
And Baba Yaga, the boney legged, the witch, came out of her three legged hut and smiled at the girl who was talking to her gate, her single tooth...blah blah blah. I love Russian folk tales. This is really fun, thanks for sharing! love xx Shezzi
Comments from author:
Yup, cookie for you. My gran had a whole series of folklore/fairy tale books and I read all of them at some point. That is where Baba Yaga comes in, she is one of my favourites.
Thanks for the review.
Review By [Shezzi] • Date [3 Jan 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three: So what exactly did I get?" from kimbclar
Review:
Thank you! I desperately needed a laugh and you provided it. I'm looking forward to the next chapter and the outcome of the Pokemon battle.
Comments from author:
Not sure we will see the end of the battle, but I have my money on Hermione. This is probably going to be a fic, which jumps around a little timewise. Next scenes are gonna be in Hogwarts.
Review By [kimbclar] • Date [3 Jan 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three: So what exactly did I get?" from DofEire
Review:
Bwa haha hahaha!!!! Oh my. Your Harry and Hermione are TOTALLY Shawn and Jules!!!!
Comments from author:
It's weird, isn't it? I mean, seriously, I was totally channelling them without having actually seen the show, Very strange. And seeing as I am now being inundated with *psych*otic plot bunnies, maybe that was just an early manifestation of the new muse. Who looks like Lassiter by the way. Good times.
Review By [DofEire] • Date [3 Jan 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three: So what exactly did I get?" from arkeus
Review:
sorry, i meant lame in a good way.
Comments from author:
Oh, I know. I didn't take it the wrong way believe me. When I was writing it, I was groaning inside at how cliched some of it is. I had had this idea for Hermione as a princess thing for ages and then suddenly that idea was everybody else's idea, so I retreated to humour.
Plus it's fun. Just wait until we hit Hogwarts.
Review By [arkeus] • Date [3 Jan 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three: So what exactly did I get?" from Earthmage
Review:
Love it! Especially the Pokémon references and showing that Baba Yaga (or at least her daughter) married into the Potter family hehe.

The vague disclaimer line I can only think of as a Buffy line.. I'm still trying to get all the references.
Review By [Earthmage] • Date [3 Jan 10] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three: So what exactly did I get?" from arkeus
Review:
that is horribly lame.

And funny.
Comments from author:
Sorry?
It's the end of that chapter, isn't it? Just not quite happy with the flow of it, or bringing in Harry. I was quite happy having a Hermione-centric fic, but he kept butting in.
Glad you found it funny, though.
And yeah, the idea is kinda lame, so I am claiming parody for this one.
Review By [arkeus] • Date [3 Jan 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two: Fessin' Up" from musiclover
Review:
oh this is really good
Review By [musiclover] • Date [30 Oct 09] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two: Fessin' Up" from Eirliel
Review:
MORE!!!
Review By [Eirliel] • Date [16 Oct 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two: Fessin' Up" from Dragonelf
Review:
Yay, new chapter.

::Gives the plot bunny some Chicken Sandwiches::

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the tallest oaks
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Review By [Dragonelf] • Date [26 Sep 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two: Fessin' Up" from Miranda
Review:
ohh this story is just adorable! I love how you killed off kretcher. I really want to see a scene with mrs Black hehe.
Review By [Miranda] • Date [23 Sep 09] • Not Rated
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