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Review of chapter "An X factor" from ConDaMon
Review:
u should continue this :)
Review By [ConDaMon] • Date [11 Jun 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "An X factor" from JediKnight
Review:
Love your work. Have you gotten a reply about your quarentined story?
Review By [JediKnight] • Date [29 Nov 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "An X factor" from CrystalBlaze
Review:
I got a rubber chicken and I know how to abuse it, do your worst! (Because I can't survive any better, holy crap did I just WRITE that?)

Deadpool is dead on. Of course, if he breaks bad enough on Joss that Xander believes him, this could get outright brilliant, leading to a drinking fest or two over it all.
Comments from author:
That will be crazy, I'm thinking about having Deadpool stick around a bit but just because he wants to be kind of a loki to Xander and Wolverine.

Any chance he can he'll cause trouble for the two.
Review By [CrystalBlaze] • Date [28 Nov 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "An X factor" from Chaoskitten
Review:
ROFLMAO

Ok thats jsut classic *giggles*
Comments from author:
Thanks, and thanks for the review.
Review By [Chaoskitten] • Date [28 Nov 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "An X factor" from LFW
Review:
I really liked the Highlander scene too. Looking for more. Thanks
Comments from author:
Thanks next one should be up soon.
Review By [LFW] • Date [27 Nov 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "An X factor" from darthridian
Review:
good chapter mate,

hope to see more soon.
Comments from author:
Cool, thanks, and I hope to have the next one up soon.
Review By [darthridian] • Date [27 Nov 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "An X factor" from Morgomir
Review:
Great chapter. Keep up the good work.
Comments from author:
Thanks I should have the new one up within a week.
Review By [Morgomir] • Date [27 Nov 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "An X factor" from eriktheviking
Review:
Great writing but the Deadpool section is annoying, even if it is in character.
Comments from author:
Yeah, Deadpool is fun to write for, but he's also very hard to write for. He's supposed to be funny, and he works best compared to someone serious.

I think the reason Deadpool is funniest is because he should be SO emo. He's in CONSTANT pain, he's got cancerous growths all over his body, meaning he's also got cancer, the only thing keeping him alive is his X-factor.

But instead of being So emotional and bitchy and such like so many characters are, he's funny, true part of that may be insanity from pain, but he's still just an awesome character. But it's hard to make him constantly funny. And so I'm trying to limit him and the rest of the character's screen time so that he can be "on screen" quickly, say a few one liners and then "get off screen" before he gets redundant.
Review By [eriktheviking] • Date [27 Nov 09] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "X-Men meet Chaos" from (Recent Donor)Hawklan
Review:
interestring start and I'm looking forward to see more
Review By [(Recent Donor)Hawklan] • Date [19 Nov 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "X-Men meet Chaos" from KyrissDraconis
Review:
Actually a Mary Sue is usually when the author adds herself into the story, often with knowledge or powers that skew the 'original plotline.' I think what was meant was 'Uber' characterization- making a character god-like without flaws.
Comments from author:
Ah thanks, I though so, but that made no sense in the statement.
Review By [KyrissDraconis] • Date [19 Sep 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "X-Men meet Chaos" from KyrissDraconis
Review:
SWEET! I love Xander/WeaponX mixes and this one looks very promising. Please continue to weave your tale!
Comments from author:
Thanks the next chapter should be up soonish.
Review By [KyrissDraconis] • Date [19 Sep 09] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "X-Men meet Chaos" from Almadynis
Review:
While I've never been a fan of Mary Sues...you have made this vaguely intriquing. Please keep going.


A Mary Sue is a cliche character that can do anything, with little to no worry of hurting themselves. A demigod or god is a good example of a Mary Sue.
Comments from author:
Thanks, and who's Mary Sue? And I shoudl have the next chapter up soonish.
Review By [Almadynis] • Date [19 Sep 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "X-Men meet Chaos" from Vilkath
Review:
Not a bad idea, I think I would liked to read about it more then just get a big summary. Especially the 'tell whole life story instantly upon meeting the other group' is a bit of cross over cliche. I will agree with a lot of what was said about Wolverine though, he is a seriously flawed weapon in many ways. He's magnetic, he's rather heavy due to the metal so no real swimming for him. He can drown, he can suffocate he can have his limbs ripped off since the metal doesn't go into his joints or connecting tissue.

I am not entirely sure how this story will work in the long term, if there is a long term but it is not a bad start. Only real flaw of this chapter is the huge information dump of events on basically strangers.. right after they tried their best to kill him.
Comments from author:
Yeah, I know the information dump is a bit Cliche, but in this circumstance Xander was kind of remembering his own past and went on and on and on.

I mean the X-men are the first real group of people Xander has seen since he's been himself. The rest of them have been Weapon X workers.

Also, I kind of wanted to see if I could follow the Marvel verses's rules, and make something so crazy, so impossible sounding in the Buffy verse work. And I think I sold it lock, stock and barrel pretty much.

And as for Wolverine, your right, but Logan makes Wolverines weaknesses a bit non existent. I mean if you gave me or you the skeleton it woudl be rough. But someone who has been alive for centuries, whose trained in almsot every form of martial art.

Also, I'm thinking at least five chapters, the first "Arc" being done in the next one, where they break in deal with a few past enemies, and try to rescue the captured friends. I'm gonna have a big plot twist their.

And as for the trying to kill him.... Everyone's tried to kill him lately, and he knows it was his fault for attacking the blue ones.
Review By [Vilkath] • Date [18 Sep 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "X-Men meet Chaos" from JediKnight
Review:
Looking forward to reading more soon.
Comments from author:
Thanks I should have the next one up soon.
Review By [JediKnight] • Date [18 Sep 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "X-Men meet Chaos" from Morgomir
Review:
Great start if a bit over the top. Keep up the good work.
Comments from author:
Thanks, and thanks for the review.
Review By [Morgomir] • Date [17 Sep 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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