Review of chapter "The Bubble Bath" from NekoHibiki
I love this!^_^
This is great!^_^
Really good fanfiction!^_^
Review By [NekoHibiki
] • Date [20 Jan 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Bubble Bath" from darkwoofe
Almost a year since the last update. Is this story still 'alive'? I hope so, as I really enjoyed reading it. I'll be tracking it, just in case...
Review By [darkwoofe
] • Date [23 Dec 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Bubble Bath" from Rune
Love it! I vote for Faith or Jenny landing Ranma, I'll bet Faith could be bi-sexual for the right person. Jenny just seems nice and the only nice girl in Ranma's life has been Kasumi. He(or She) deserves a nice girl. Please finish this or at least post any outline or notes you may have. :)
Review By [Rune
] • Date [12 Oct 10] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Bubble Bath" from FemXanderForever
I was reading up on this in FF.net, and had hoped that it would've been updated here, but anyway, I was wondering when you were going to update the story, since you might actually have a good story to go on, if you keep it up.
Anyway, hope you update soon, because I'm dying to see more,
Review By [FemXanderForever
] • Date [27 Sep 10] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Bubble Bath" from Arekanderu
This is brilliant! Please update. I can't wait to read more. It would be very fun to see Ranma finally finding hot water. Not to mention some guest appearances from the people back in Japan
Review By [Arekanderu
] • Date [6 May 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Bubble Bath" from Darklight
Any new parts coming, like the way this fic goes, Faith getting her own gang and group of friends and even her own vamp.
Review By [Darklight
] • Date [9 Apr 10] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Bubble Bath" from RafMereC
Review By [RafMereC
] • Date [9 Jan 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Child Arrives" from pcody
I want to see my father, rather than just "here" about him
should be "hear"
Review By [pcody
] • Date [8 Jan 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Bubble Bath" from DarkSunAbove
This is a really fun fic, and it seems so far that the Hellmouth likes causing more trouble with Ranma's curse. And already ranma has girls around her.
Review By [DarkSunAbove
] • Date [7 Jan 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Bubble Bath" from draconis
Really now...the Three Stooges?
Actually, that was pretty good. Think I've not seen anyone else ever turn vamps into Stooges before now.
“Two Finger Blinding Strike!” Nyuck, nyuck, nyuck.
that was supposed to be for ch4
For those that missed it, I'm pretty sure that
[Although, thinking about it a bit, I'd probably have gone with
Mac, Laurie, and Charlie (to keep first name letters and same syllable count) ...or...
Mac, Mary, and Morley (just for alliteration fun)]
Review By [draconis
] • Date [7 Jan 10] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Soup" from enderverse
Ryoga should show up soon. They can give a demo of what a real landscape destroying battle looks like. Also maybe breaking point works on Vampires? It was stated that it doesn't work on living things, and vampires aren't alive.
Buffy's stuffed animal was a pig right? She should have an amusing reaction to P-chan.
Review By [enderverse
] • Date [19 Nov 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Soup" from AlphaBeta
Loving your story so far. Please keep up the great work. Hope to see an update soon!
Review By [AlphaBeta
] • Date [27 Oct 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Child Arrives" from SpinelessPunster
I, at one time when I was younger was a HUGE fan of Ranma 1/2, however, I've got to agree with the more critical reviews here-
I can see you're a big Faith fan, adn I am as well, but you've manage to put the Anime curse on BtVS by-
A- Oblivious Father Syndrome- Giles in Season 3 was highly involved emotionally with people, and now he's a bad joke of Bookish Season 1 obliviousness. He ignores Buffy's foaming lunacy adn attack on his child, he disregars his son's curse, not even talking to him for 5 minutes, he acts like Wesley at his worst, and even
Wesley wouldn't do this shit to his own child or Slayer. Ranma drops major hints (ie; he shouts them and bitches) about Faith's living conditions, and no says anything.
B- You've managed to turn Buffy into a cross between Ukyo's jumping-to-wrong-conclusions-while-forming-bad-plans and Akane and her temper. Oh, and Shampoo with her repetitive dialogue ('Die, Demon!!')
C- No one wants to include Gile's Child in the gang? I know this is an 'outsider's fic', but WTF?
Your dialogue for Ranma is good, and you have Faith down OK, but I think you should've tried to slow it down some. It seems you don't write opinions, dialogue, or descriptions of feelings for other character because you don't want to bother writing them IC, or you just want to get to 'the action', but you need to pace it a bit better.
I avoided reading this until it got to this length, because I've seen too many fics like this over-action everything, then putter off quickly.
And, of course, the NWC is rediculously overpowered. You should've claimed that the Hellmouth interfered with martial artist's ability's to channel Chi or something.
Now you have to make the focus of BtVS's good guys the antagonist of the story, because (especially after you train Faith and the OC), nobody will be anything.
But it's your story.
Comments from author:
As for points A and B, those are because I started writing this thing long before I bought the series to re-watch. Things should be changing soon. Rather than rewrite the entirety of the fic, I found a better, more amusing solution to write in when appropriate. As for point C, it somewhat ties into points A and B, but it is rather mutual by now.
The lack of emotions, dialog, opinions, etc. was because I was listening to a book called "How to Not Write a Novel," and, as such, was only following Ranma's perspective. The pacing is because, quite frankly, because I suck at any form of time-sense.
In regards to puttering out... not possible for at least another five chapters. Those are already written and just need to be typed.
Yes, gimping Ranma is one way to handle things. Of course, that'll just cause me to be flamed by a bunch of other people. Vis a vis and all that. I've actually had people suggest that, since Ranma kicked Saffron's ass (Despite having a magical weapon on his side and insane amounts of luck) that Glory wouldn't be any more difficult.
And I have absolutely no idea what that bit about antagonists is about. I'm not planning on having Faith and Jenny magically learn Anything Goes overnight, after all.
Review By [SpinelessPunster
] • Date [27 Oct 09] • Rating [4 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Soup" from DoubleKross
An interesting premise, but it's hard to mix universes when you have a major power discrepancy. Obviously, the Nerima Crew handles on a daily basis what the SunnyD crew wouldn't think of handling. It ends up coming off as 'oh look how much better and more powerful we are' when crossovers (in order to be enjoyable) should be rather more balanced, so both sides of the crossover are equally well-represented.
On top of that, your characters are extremely out of character, to the point of being cardboard cut-outs--mere mockeries of themselves. Buffy in a "DEMON!" mouth-foaming frenzy is ludicrous when she's practically the poster-child for Give Demons A Chance; Giles, who looks after "the children" like they were his own, carelessly disregards his own son (or as far as he knows,) daughter with the excuse "I haven't prepared a room"? He has a couch. For that matter, he has a *floor*. He's interested enough to get Ranma enrolled in school, but not interested in where she sleeps? Especially when he thinks Ranma's a girl--that stuff matters to dads, even estranged ones. He doesn't even verify her financial situation! Xander and Willow fade into the background, and Oz's brief mention is him bailing when Buffy's ooc-ness reaches incredibly new heights of tacky?
Put down the OCs and blow some life into the paper cut-outs you're calling characters.
Comments from author:
The OOCness has been dealt with, at least in planning. There is a reason. If I have forgotten to fix the name problem in this version of the fic, I'll go fix it.
As for your problem with the OCs, I have one question. How much can Faith and Ranma socialize next year when the Scoobies are in college? The OCs need to be introduced now so they aren't tacked on later as a stop-gap measure.
Review By [DoubleKross
] • Date [27 Oct 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Soup" from GarnetAvi
The premise to this story is pretty interesting, but the Buffy bashing is so horribly obvious you might as well give her a different name, cause she's a different character. I could see this being a fun story otherwise. It's kind of ridiculous.
Review By [GarnetAvi
] • Date [27 Oct 09] • Not Rated