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Review of chapter "Chapter 27" from moonlitrose
Review:
I must say I have enjoyed this telling of how things could have gone. I am not sure about the rescuing of the younger scoobies, without also getting Buffy, or even for that matter her mother, and how are the other wolves going to fit in with the magical wolves? Hmmm..... I see plots within plots coming up here and can't wait to see how it all plays out! =-)
Review By [moonlitrose] • Date [16 Dec 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 27" from (Recent Donor)nerfherder
Review:
Don't know about you, but I liked it! Could stand to see a lot more of it too!
Review By [(Recent Donor)nerfherder] • Date [25 Nov 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 27" from (Recent Donor)tchizek
Review:
Wonderful story, but it does need more detail in places. On the other hand I love the concept and basic execution. Please continue this soon!

Tom.
Review By [(Recent Donor)tchizek] • Date [12 Oct 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 27" from musumenosuoh
Review:
very cool! looking forward to more!
Review By [musumenosuoh] • Date [14 Jun 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 27" from Morgomir
Review:
Great chapter. Keep up the good work.
Review By [Morgomir] • Date [3 Jun 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 27" from banditdoz
Review:
Great story I love the way things are coming together. ;D I would love to know what happened in Sunnydale though and how the mayor was dealt with ;D
Review By [banditdoz] • Date [8 May 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 27" from ChaosLady
Review:
The younger version of Buffy is still in L.A., right? Is no one going to check on her? I mean, if all those potentials died, wouldn't Buffy be called since the Council never knew about her? Nice update by the way.
Review By [ChaosLady] • Date [7 May 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 27" from KenJ
Review:
Uummm...I'm really enjoying this story, but this chapter leaves me puzzled.

Ok, rescuing the future Scoobie crew after the timeline gets corrupted is of the good. However, what is with bringing over the young Xander, willow and Jesse? Sure, the Harris parents are hardly with considering and the Rosenbergs repeatedly abandon their young daughter but they are still the young Xander's and Willow's legal guardians. Worse, as far as I know, Jesse and his parents have a real family relationship and he has just disappeared on them. So what is with bringing over the young teens without at least Jesse's parents and the Rosenbergs?

For that matter, what about the Summers family? Buffy is an unknown potential. Also, if Joyce gets treatment for her condition before it worsens over time she could be saved, especially allowing for magical healing.

So this chapter leaves me somewhat puzzled.

Love the story though! ;)
Review By [KenJ] • Date [7 May 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 27" from Genuka
Review:
Nicely done. Well played. Timelines are such fragile and tricky things. *smirk*
Review By [Genuka] • Date [7 May 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 26" from ChaosLady
Review:
It's been awhile since I read this, I thought I was tracking it. It's nice to discover it again.
Review By [ChaosLady] • Date [3 May 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 24" from VillageOrchid
Review:
Good "example of what they are facing" kind of chapter.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [2 May 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Family 23" from VillageOrchid
Review:
Again lots of interesting ideas - enough ideas that I keep reading - but still kind of outline-y.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [2 May 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Family 22" from VillageOrchid
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I think there needs to be more exposition on what the accords are.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [2 May 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Family 21" from VillageOrchid
Review:
I do like that you are having non-wizarding world deamon lore taught through a roleplaying game to the kids. Perhaps you will reconnect the 2 worlds of Xander in time to fight the bringers?
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [2 May 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Family 19" from VillageOrchid
Review:
An interesting and plausible set of problems, headed strategically. I notice that you do try to go into some emotional stuff by looking at the dreams and nightmares of Xander and Harry.

Please note that you wrote:
Their like a few of the others Kruft has brought in to serve him;

In this case, you mean they are like a few of the others, so that would be they're.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [2 May 13] • Not Rated
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