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Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Katt
Review:
I don't know why you aren't proud of this. It's one of my favorite Twilight crossovers, although in any story Sparklepires make me cringe, this and a few others I have read make them actually fun =). I hope you do finish it someday and don't get disheartened by people or life in general. I see you are still around so Please finish this at some point. It is a lot better than you apparently think it is *wink*.

Katt

PS what pen name do you write under now if I may ask? I'd love to read your stories.
Review By [Katt] • Date [7 Jun 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Twenty-One" from Wise
Review:
*sighs*

Poor Leah. Having her imprint on Conner (and Conner imprint on her as well?) is not a kindness. You couldn't have just had them fall in love like normal people? You had to have them psychically raped into loving each other instead?

I realize that I've given a more or less constant stream of negative criticism about this story, and I don't want you to misunderstand: I don't dislike the story. You've done a reasonably good job with a lot of it. If I'm focusing on the missteps, it's because the missteps are so glaring in contrast to the rest of it.
Comments from author:
Hi. I haven't touched this fic in years. I'm not very proud of it. It's long, but not very good. I don't even write under this penname anymore.

Feel free to leave all the criticisms you want, but I'm probably never going to finish this fic.

As for imprinting, I always saw it as the soul recognizing a soulmate, and nothing more than that. People who imprinted still fall in love normally, and I tried to write it that way.
Review By [Wise] • Date [25 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Sixteen" from Wise
Review:
At some point, if Dawn really is immortal, the fact that she still scars like a normal human is going to be extremely problematic for her.
Review By [Wise] • Date [24 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirteen" from Wise
Review:
*continues to cringe*
Did you really have to include imprinting? It was a bad, hackneyed plot device when Meyer used it. It doesn't get any better with repetition. Seriously, though. Dawn and Jacob deserve to actually fall in actual love and to have a real relationship, not to suffer through the non-love bullshit that is imprinting.

I do mean 'non-love,' by the way. It makes me sad. What they had is now gone. Poor Jacob's actual feelings of love for Dawn have, at this point, been completely destroyed and supplanted by Imprinting. He no longer has a choice in the matter, and Dawn's choices consist of either, 'love Jacob' or 'have Jacob killed or otherwise incapacitated.' A blind 'love at first sight' that cares nothing at all for the thoughts, opinions, and feelings of the beloved, but simply springs into being fully formed and indestructible no matter what the beloved might want and in such a way that the lover literally has no choice and cannot want anything else is not love. That's something much, much darker.

Real love takes time, and it's hard, and it takes work to make it work. Nobody has it easy. Nobody has destined perfection. Love "builds upon the ongoing drama of shared experiences as a kind of symbiotic empathy." And most importantly, most distinctively, real love can end. Feelings can change. Love can flicker and go out. Love can be mortal. But that should come as no surprise. After all, we crucified it, once.

edit: grammar
Review By [Wise] • Date [24 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eleven" from Wise
Review:
"Many squaw in kitchen?"

*tries not to cringe*
*fails*

Jesus Christ, dude. -.-
Review By [Wise] • Date [24 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Seventy-Two" from deathgeonous
Review:
I decided to reread this. And I still think that it's the best Buffy/Twilight fic out there, and that it is also a shame that it's been left alone for so long. Well, thanks for writing this, bye for now.
Review By [deathgeonous] • Date [1 Aug 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Seventy-Two" from SariLane
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I'm so sad there's never been any more to this.
Review By [SariLane] • Date [9 May 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Seventy-Two" from deathgeonous
Review:
Um.... wow. I honestly this that this was/is the best Buffy/Twilight Crossover I've ever read. Seriously, it was really good. So, I do hope that you'll come back to it someday. Well, thanks for writing this, bye for now.
Review By [deathgeonous] • Date [6 Apr 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Seventy-Two" from maxthehobbit
Review:
Well it's not finished as I noticed most of your stories aren't finished, but at least you didn't stop with a cliff-hanger. It stands good as is although a epilogue would be better, but you left it open for any number of new adventures. Thanks for writing and sharing this great story.
Review By [maxthehobbit] • Date [4 Sep 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from maxthehobbit
Review:
Chapters 49 & 50, the rape and murder of Rona ... don't think you could have done better. I was like watching a movie you described everything with plenty of detail, any more detail and it would have made me sick, it was just right. LOL your spelling and typing sucks, but you do have a mind for creative writing very near the genius level. I'm enjoying this story more than even an action movie, which are generally my favorites. While Dawn is my most favorite character, all her friends are also very good. I had to make some notes around chapter ten since there was starting to be more characters than I could remember, but I found after I wrote them down I never had to refer to my notes again. I hope you continue writing, you have a gift ... use it, whether it's fanfiction or original writing.
Review By [maxthehobbit] • Date [2 Sep 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Nine" from maxthehobbit
Review:
This is a great story and it's unusual that I'm reading it because I really hate reading unfinished stories, because they rarely ever get finished, especially when it's been over two years since it's been updated. Love that this story revolves around Dawn, my favorite Buffy character ... never heard of whatever this has been crossed with, but the characters seem interesting ... lol sparkly vampires.
If you do decide to take up writing this or other stories in the future I suggest you get a beta to correct your typos and grammar.
In the mean time I'm gonna finish reading the rest of this story, I find it very interesting. Thanks for sharing it.
Review By [maxthehobbit] • Date [31 Aug 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Seventy-Two" from BrownFinderth
Review:
So, a GREAT story here!!! Yet, there have been no new chapters beyond ch 72 (Nov 2010). Hopefully, this story is continued in the next installment for Four Square!!
Review By [BrownFinderth] • Date [30 Jan 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Seventy-Two" from Angelskuuipo
Review:
This has been a very entertaining read! I like your Edward and Bella much better than canon. :) I like the way you fleshed out some of the more minor characters as well. Your OC Nick reminds me a very lot of a guy I used to know a long time ago. :) I hope life and your muse lets you return to this soon. I'm looking forward to seeing how it all wraps up.
Review By [Angelskuuipo] • Date [2 Dec 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Seventy-Two" from Shadowman
Review:
I have just finished this enjoyable and very good story. I hope you will start posting more chapters soon as I would love to see more of it.
Review By [Shadowman] • Date [29 Aug 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Seventy-Two" from debbie
Review:
Love this story, which I have now re-read several times, and I wondered if you planned to continue it. I am curious to find out more about how Bella adjusts and the four square and friends move into their futures.
Comments from author:
I've had a very rough year. The next chapter is in the works and should hopefully be posted soonish. I've been rereading the whole story in my spare time to get back into the feel of it.
Review By [debbie] • Date [27 Aug 11] • Not Rated
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