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Review of chapter "Cheyenne Mountain Complex" from DieselDriver
Review:
That's pretty funny to me, these hero types afraid of needles. Sheesh.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [4 Dec 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Spanking" from Carojen
Review:
Sexual harassment much?
Review By [Carojen] • Date [30 Sep 12] • Rating [1 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Senses and Jell-O" from serenityselena
Review:
it`s nice to see that Buffy received some answers...
looking forward to reading more ^_^
Comments from author:
Thank you! I'm glad you like it! :)
Review By [serenityselena] • Date [30 Sep 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Senses and Jell-O" from bradsan
Review:
You do know that the PTB are overlooking something. When Buffy urge is only to kill, kill and kill. She can bring other people and herself in danger because she will rush in it. If she can't control it or has difficulty to control it she can't get information when needed or oversee a situation and act on it.

One thing what makes Buffy better than the other Slayers was not only her back up support but also her knowledge when to fight and when to wait. Now she will become a fighting machine with only the urge to kill. It will kill her and others who are with her. The Gould's are nothing different then evil demons so what the PTB are doing isn't logical. I call it evil. She is not a fighting machine she is also a human being.

Remember rule one and two. One: don't die, two: when you can't win run so you can fight another day. What good is it when you are dead, injured or captured. You can't fight and protect when you are .

Stupid PTB when are they gone grow up and think things over before they act. I hope they will see their mistake and give Buffy an chance to control it. What they did good was her knowledge when something is evil and when not, but the urge to kill,kill and kill not so good.

Love the update and can't wait for more.
Comments from author:
Everything is happening for a reason. It won't be revealed just yet, but it will be important later. I'm glad you like it! :)
Review By [bradsan] • Date [30 Sep 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Surprise" from serenityselena
Review:
awesome story ^_^
Comments from author:
Thank you! :)
Review By [serenityselena] • Date [10 Sep 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Surprise" from Netchka
Review:
Good story. Can't wait to read more.
Comments from author:
Thank you! Glad you like it!
Review By [Netchka] • Date [4 Sep 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Spanking" from EarlGrey
Review:
You see, this is the thing I hate most about fancition: mischaracterization - neither Buffy or Jack would act that way - , bending reality - corporal punishment is illegal in US Army - , misunderstanding of one of main themes in BTVS- entire series was about Buffy learning how to think for herself, and not blindly follow so called authority figures and orders- , personal bias against some character - you apparently hate Buffy if you humiliated her in such fashion. Congratulations, you manage to meet all the criteria of bad fancition.
Review By [EarlGrey] • Date [19 Jun 12] • Rating [1 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Surprise" from bradsan
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I don't know why you are rewriting this story except from the spanking it's rather good and don't need a rewrite. If I have a say to it. The only thing it needs is a quicker update but that's because I'm not a patient one.

You do know that she can overrule Jack if she wants to. She has a authority of a four star general and even her Slayer status gives her the right to overrule the general and the president if she thinks earth is in danger. Knowing Buffy she will use it when it will be necessary. I think it's not wrong to have that authority because we know she won't use it for the wrong reasons only when she thinks it's needed.

Buffy already proved that she can lead if she wants to, she did prove that when she pushed Ra from earth. Buffy has the PTB backing her and Whistler confirmed that she is more than capable. She is also there to destroy the Gou'ld and even when the military don't agree with her ways she already proved that she could take more gou'lds on her own than several SG-teams together.

I really hope you will concentrate on this story because I'm afraid when you write a redo you became bored and loses your interest to finish both of them. But that's me worrying. So concentrated on this story and finished it, if after finishing this story you still consider a rewrite be my guest but now I would prefer updating and try to finish this one instead of the other one.

And about the confusing part. I don't agree with some reviewers. I think sometimes you have to read very carefully or reread a part to understand, but let me tell you, you are not the only writer where I have to do that. I even do that several times when I read a book from professional writers so don't worry about that. If a professional can sell a book and have some parts in it where you have to read carefully why won't a writer who writes for fun. They get paid and you are not.

Hope you will update this story soon because I want to know how it ends.

edit: I'm gone read both of them and hoping you will finish both stories. I'm hoping you will finish all your stories. I like them. Glad you have more time now. happy writing and learn from the reviews but don't let them stop you when they are not always what you wants to read.
Comments from author:
I'm just going back to fix the parts that need fixed, more than rewriting it entirely. Also, I will make things more clear in some places, fixing some of the grammar I've found, elaborating on some items (like Joyce's death), and things like that. I will finish the story though. Updates have been far apart because I didn't have much free time with my college courses, but now that I'm done with that until fall, I'm going to update as much as I can. I know how you feel. I'm very impatient too!
Review By [bradsan] • Date [24 May 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Surprise" from sjyu
Review:
I don't usually write negative reviews, I tend to just ignore the writer if I don't like a story. But this is really bothering me. I still can't get past the spanking. I was enjoying this story until the spanking. No responsible or ethical officer is going to spank anyone or condone spanking as a punishment. Buffy is an adult and has faced life and death situations for years. She needs to learn to work with the group. She needs marine boot camp 12 weeks of non-stop training on how to work as a unit and all that other stuff. Then send her to Officer training school for how many weeks that is, then maybe Ranger school until she learns. The physical part would probably be a vacation for her, but her DI's could be in the know and make things more challenging. She needs training to get her mind set military and to work as a team. She's used to being the main powerful person.

It would be different if you created a world were coporoal punishment was normal. There are several authors who have done this very well and i do enjoy reading those.

I agree that you do need a good beta reader, someone that can help you with the confusion. You do have an interesting story line that I think would be an amazing story if some of the problems were straightened out.
Review By [sjyu] • Date [23 May 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Rebel Jaffa and Tok'ra" from bradsan
Review:
First its a good update liked it. Only one thing. Why would Buffy listen to a voice in her head that says kill him. why would she do that. She knows well enough that she could get answers from him which they need. So Buffy wants to kill him isn't strange but acting before getting some answers is. She twenty I believe so not a little kid. I'm not criticizing but telling what I think is not a logical behaviour especially from Buffy.

Still a good chapter. Hope this chapter will lift your writers-block because I love to read more.
Review By [bradsan] • Date [25 Mar 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Prophecy" from michaelangelo
Review:
Ok, first off, you need a beta or co-writer. The story is ok but you have a habit of repeating things, making certain sentences longer than they need to be and people acting illogical and outright doing odd and out of character things for no apparent reason, or making massive logical leaps.
Review By [michaelangelo] • Date [25 Mar 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Bra'tac and an Apology" from bradsan
Review:
Do you think you gone update this one soon.
Comments from author:
It's getting close. I've had writer's block for all of my stories until very recently. It should be updated within a week or two.
Review By [bradsan] • Date [23 Mar 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Spanking" from (Past Donor)Snoopy
Review:
This story was quite interesting until The Spanking chapter. It just seemed so out of place and weird that I didn't carry on reading.

I really don't understand how Jack can justify using spanking as a punishment.
Review By [(Past Donor)Snoopy] • Date [7 Aug 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Bra'tac and an Apology" from draconis
Review:
The spanking was pretty bizarre (and likely against UCMJ) but of course just having Buffy work directly for the military again is bizarre...so let's keep going. I'm sure Buffy isn't the only General to get spanked...just under different circumstances.

Looking forward to the foreshadowed consequences of Hammond's support for Bra'tac and his problem.

Just how long had Buffy been learning Lok'nel at this point? I didn't see that anywhere...just that it must be something less than the 2 months Teal'c had thought at one point.
Comments from author:
It will be mentioned in the next chapter when Bra'tac talks to Buffy.
Review By [draconis] • Date [16 Jul 11] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Bra'tac and an Apology" from Addlcove
Review:
While the plot line is interesting Buffy is far to out of character, so is jack for that matter.
Review By [Addlcove] • Date [16 Jul 11] • Rating [4 out of 10]
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