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Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from (Recent Donor)zima
Review:
This is cool story, nice to see another character from the naruto universe then Sasuke or Naruto.
Hoping that there will be more of this story.
Review By [(Recent Donor)zima] • Date [11 May 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from Bobboky
Review:
good
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [29 Sep 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from Hanzo
Review:
♥ excellent♥
Review By [Hanzo] • Date [25 Sep 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from Vassago
Review:
It's a black cloak with red clouds outlined in white. Not White clouds outlined in red.

I guessed either Deidara, Tobi, or Kakuzu about half-way through when one last part that was "meant to go on your head" was mentioned. Would have been hilarious if he had gone as Tobi or Kakuzu. "Xander's a good boy, trying to get rid of all Vampires and control ZA WORUDO!" or "How much am I getting paid to do this again?"

Deidara's abilities aren't from his bloodline, but from a forbidden technique that he stole in order to make better art. He became a missing nin when he stole the technique and used it on himself.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review! I'm almost done with the next chapter so when I put that up I'll edit the cloak. Thanks for noticing it! I don't know how I missed that considering how obsessed I am with Akatsuki. haha
Also thanks for informing me about Deidara's mouths. I'm not too up to date on Naruto (partly because I don't want to see all my favorite characters killed off).
Thanks again for the review and sorry for the late response to it!
Review By [Vassago] • Date [21 Apr 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Current Donor)dogbertcarroll
Review:
I'm impressed. It seems everyone and their dog does Itachi and you faked me out pretty well until the end! Nice work.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review. I'm glad you liked Deidara and thought it was an original idea. I kept it ambiguous until the end because I had a poll on my fanfic profile and it was tied between Tobi and Deidara. Anyway I'm glad you took the time to review and I hope you continue to enjoy my story.
Review By [(Current Donor)dogbertcarroll] • Date [17 Jan 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Sunstar
Review:
I noticed a spelling mistake, clock instead of cloak in this sentence.

He strapped the packs Ethan had given him on a belt and pulled the clock over his body.
Comments from author:
Thanks so much for pointing out this error. I just fixed it. Other than that, I hoped you enjoyed the story. Thanks again!
Review By [Sunstar] • Date [17 Jan 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from AlphaBeta
Review:
Looks like things are going to be interesting. Good job on the chapter. Cannot wait for the next one.
Review By [AlphaBeta] • Date [16 Jan 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from BlueEyedJedi
Review:
Well, Now Xander has the ablitity to please all his girls at the same time.
Review By [BlueEyedJedi] • Date [16 Jan 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from Morgomir
Review:
Great chapter. Keep up the good work.
Review By [Morgomir] • Date [16 Jan 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from sunamee
Review:
Interesting story. I look forward to the next update.
Review By [sunamee] • Date [6 Jan 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from kayron
Review:
I know nothing about Naruto. The mouths in the hands are freaky, but I'll always give a Xander YAHF a shot.
Comments from author:
Naruto is a pretty good manga and I really recommend you read it (if you're into manga of course). And yes the mouths are freaky, but they're a part of Deidara's bloodline involving clay and explosions! Deidara is a member of an evil organization in the manga and is a pretty popular character. Thanks for taking a chance on a crossover with a universe you know nothing about and reviewing.
Review By [kayron] • Date [6 Dec 09] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from Morgomir
Review:
Interesting. Keep up the good work.
Review By [Morgomir] • Date [6 Dec 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from lordamnesia
Review:
Holy crap DIEDRA! I've seen Gaa'ra stories, Itachi stories, theres even a Saratobi YaHF floating out there, but I've never seen a Diedra before, and the posibilities are endless! who needs a missle launcher?! KATSU! One dragon bomb to fight a demon snake! KATSU! Wave of vamps? C3! Katsu! Awesome, keep up the great work! un!
Comments from author:
Deidara is an amazing character and I used him because he was so underused. My other option was Tobi, but I've decided to just do a one-shot with him soon. Anyway like you said Xander will take care of a lot of the baddies with his new kind of art! Thanks for reviewing and I hope you continue to enjoy the story.
Review By [lordamnesia] • Date [6 Dec 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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