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Review of chapter "The Android (Part Two)" from DarkFaerieYumi
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What fudge chica? Nothing in so long! Is everything ok? I miss you.
Review By [DarkFaerieYumi] • Date [10 Jan 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Android (Part Two)" from DarkFaerieYumi
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ROFLMAO! A centaur shagging a smurf!!! OMG! That was great! And poor Erek.
Review By [DarkFaerieYumi] • Date [14 Jun 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Android (Part Two)" from Chikageko
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You need to put in your disclaimer that you're taking large tracts of this from script. Help avoid those plagerism clauses and such. Now, I know a fair number of you authors like to take things directly from script and I understand how honestly early in the story this is but is it really that difficult to use the butterfly effect? It allows such a wide variety of random yet loical changes in stories that if i understand correctly were the intent of the FF in the first place.

One possible way this could have been different is they could have continued with the stealth plan by cassie thinking a bit more. Where a bats tail is supposed to be many varieties have a extention of their wing system which they fold forward into a cup to help catch particularly agile buggs that avoided their mouths. If these bats don't have that, a bats back legs are still fairly strong, Gripping the crystal and flying slowly would still have been an option, though how they would have gotten it up the shafts is anyones guess.

another possibility, and one i like a lot more, the chee have been all over the world for millenia, how likely is it that they missed the superhero comics of the last few decades? Captian america especially. Now there was a case of extream violence with little to no death and massive effect. A chee would be about the same parameters as cap, just show him the books. Even excluding that sabotage can do wonders to hinder a war effort. spread the pemalites out among the fleet maintainace crews, as you're moving by on engineering warch punch a fist sized hole in a potentially vital system and walk of. Smuggle arms to a non yerk stash point and just stockpile the babies, reading the books i got the indication a controlers sidearm is issued and getting a new one is painful. That and Ax can always canabalize yerk tech for any number of purposes, a thief with a holo projector is a godsend. The possibilites are endless.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the Review. I actually did put in a earlier chapter that any scenes taken straight from the books are not mine. This one is, and will be, the largest offender. I know.

Dawn's character has a GREAT effect in the Animorph storyline. In fact, she already has. (She saved the teacher that was meant to die, she 'saved' Tara, and her character has had a great effect on Ax that we would have not seen for another 13 books, when Tobias find out Elfangor is his father) But remember ripples start out small then grow to reflect the change. I said the earlier chapters are mostly straight forward the Animorphs storyline without any huge differences. Book 18 is when that all changes. I know it may be frustrating that she hasn't changed anything huge, but there is a reason that this chapter is mostly straight forward with the book. Erek need to choose to stay peaceful. Erek may have regretted what he did but another Chee may have not, as an author I know a story not only need conflict but has to be believable. I do not see it as believable that not a single Chee can kill without remorse if given the chance. Then... Story over next chapter.

I also had to bring in how the Key and the Matrix came to earth, and why the Matrix ended where it did when Loren was kidnapped years prior. Since things are changed greatly in later books, to allow for the truths in Buffy to fit the facts in Animorphs. (Meaning the Ellimist Chronicles are not in play in this story. But I need to keep Tobias around, thus the Andalite Chronicles has to play in the same way KA wrote them.)

We are only in book 10 of 58, not counting Visser. Even though a number of them are skipped over, it still leaves a lot. I wanted a story that really follows the heart of both Buffy and Animorphs, a story that inserted Dawn, believably into the Animporhs, just as many write her, or Buffy, or Willow into LOTRs. We are still barely learning about where Dawn fits into the group, her relationships with the other characters, and her connections to the world outside of the supernatural.

What all that means is that this story is going to be LONG . That there are huge changes to come with many of the Buffy cast, but I didn't want a story that gets too unbelievable by moving too fast.
Review By [Chikageko] • Date [7 Jun 10] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Android (Part One)" from AngelBlack
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Ooh! Nicely done! And the Yeerk-ness explains why spike wasn't effected by the chip! And I want more! Now! Please?
Review By [AngelBlack] • Date [2 Apr 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Android (Part One)" from betrayal
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Wow! Am glad that you updated, Please tell me it's not Spike, cause if they have to kill well stake him, I don't think Spike will be able to come back from that. Anyway keep up the great work! Can't wait for the next chapter!
Review By [betrayal] • Date [28 Mar 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Android (Part One)" from (Current Donor)Shieldage
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Cool. Misspelled the chapter title ;) but the rest looks good. Hope life works out well.

Heh, Dawn's a bit distracted - and it's her POV - so no way for the audience to tell if Spike's chip went off or not ;)

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Oooh! Oooh! Electrocute Spike! Crispy fried Yeerk and he could probably survive it :D

Poison works too ;)
Comments from author:
Man, total blonde moment with the chapter title. Thanks for pointing it out.

Yep, a big part of the next part of the chapter is about what a vampire can and can't survive, and how to get a Yeerk out of someone's head...
Review By [(Current Donor)Shieldage] • Date [28 Mar 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Android (Part One)" from MarcusSLazarus
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Well, that would appear to answer the question of if a Yeerk can control a vampire given their technically-deceased status; all that remains is if they can MAINTAIN control, given the superior age of the vampires compared to their usual hosts...

Keep up the great work; I have a feeling that the next chapter is going to be VERY dramatic...
Comments from author:
You are really really close. Think complete control over partial control.
Review By [MarcusSLazarus] • Date [28 Mar 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Android (Part One)" from DarkFaerieYumi
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*screams in fright* OMG! SPIKE'S A CONTROLLER! WTF?! OMG!OMGOMGOMGOMGOMG!NOOOO!
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It really if scary isn't it? Don't worry all will be well in the end. Kind of... I mean, look how the Animorphs ended and know it will be happier than that. Not that it is hard...
Review By [DarkFaerieYumi] • Date [28 Mar 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chater Four- The Alien" from AngelBlack
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Very interesting! Although you sometimes get the POV mixed up.
Comments from author:
The POV thing is one of my biggest problems. Many of the hand written chapters are done in alternating POVs and when I get in the zone with the typing of the story I don't remember that I changed it to be only Dawn's POV. Then proof reading is a pain because it all looks right to me, even if I know it's not. I try to go over the previous chapter every once in a while to fix up things I didn't get.

Thanks for the review it is great to know when people like this story because there isn't a huge Animorph following to draw people in.
Review By [AngelBlack] • Date [12 Feb 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chater Four- The Alien" from betrayal
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Hey! Am glad tha you updated, this was a great chapter! Can't wait for the next chapter! Or to learn about Dawn's time with Sweet! Keep up the great work!
Review By [betrayal] • Date [13 Jan 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chater Four- The Alien" from DarkFaerieYumi
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Woot! Dawn acquired the Vissir! I'm just curious so in this story the Animorphs are on the east coast or something? Cause I know that the Animorphs home was in Cali a few miles from Santa Barbara. Which according to some people, in the Buffyverse is Sunnydale. Or was it Santa Monica? Santa something. LOL But this is so cool! So Dawnie is trying to spill but the others are suffering from Sunnydale syndrome. I really wanna know how it went down with Sweet. I loves Sweet. My favorite big bad other than Spike of course. I can't wait for the next chapter. When does Spike appear? I'm missing my Spikey!
Comments from author:
Yeah I moved the Animorphs to the east coast because I wanted them away from Sunnydale. (Less chance of a rushed crossover) It seemed easier, and more acceptable, to move the Animorphs since it took, like, 50 books for them to say, Hey! We're in California. Unlike Sunnydale, which is mentioned to be in California, like, every three episodes.

Spike is coming in the next chapter. It is a huge part of it. But he does leave. (Just warning you)

And then comes back later. With another very loved, and very hated, Angel character. Wink:: Wink
Review By [DarkFaerieYumi] • Date [13 Jan 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three- The Stranger" from betrayal
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Hey, am glad that you updated, keep up the great work, am glad that Dawn choose to stay, and am glad that Spike is going to help hopefully he isn't turned. Keep up the great work, can't wait for the next chapter!
Review By [betrayal] • Date [3 Jan 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three- The Stranger" from DarkFaerieYumi
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YAY! Buffy gets to stay in heaven! *happy dance* And Tobias and Ax get Supernatural 101! LOL Spikes coming! WHEE! This is awesome! I'm so happy! This will be great! I can't wait! MORE! Soon please? Yes? You rock!
Review By [DarkFaerieYumi] • Date [2 Jan 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two- The Capture" from DarkFaerieYumi
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Hello again! I just had a thought (dangerous non? ^-^) What if the Scoobies paid a visit? At least Spike, Giles or Xander the male figures in Dawn's life. Oh who am I kidding? If one visits they all do! Though Spike would probably sneak off for a visit and be nosy as hell. LOL I can picture Dawn completely spaz at a visit. Tackle any and all male Scoobie to the ground, except Giles of course as he would more than likely brace himself and cling to his youngest daughter and squish her to death as bad as she would him. Spike? Vampire yes but not immune to Dawn glomps. Down to the ground he would go! Same with Xander. I can also picture the guys go all overprotective mode when they meet the other Animorphs i.e. the boys. Maybe let Ripper out to play? The Shovel Speech! LOL Have Marco quiver in fear of the shovel speech! Especially if Willow, better yet TARA delivers it. It would be funny! OMG! I think I just killed myself with that! ROFLMAO! But seriously update soon I'm dying!
Comments from author:
At least one of the guys comes to see Dawn in a few chapters. And everyone comes to stay when the Yeerks find out the Animorphs and their families much later. (Can you see Anya talking to a Hork-Bajir? Or an Andalite? Hahahaha) And I have a big suprise coming with the David Saga.

Two more chapters are typed up on our netbook, but I can't open them on our desk top (Has the internet) until we swap the hard drive in the Desk Top. And buy an OS because there is no way I am letting my husband talk me into ubuntu.
Review By [DarkFaerieYumi] • Date [29 Dec 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two- The Capture" from DarkFaerieYumi
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This is absolutely WICKED!!! I love it! IT's awesome! I love the Animorphs! I grew up on these guys. I would love to see #13 and the David trilogy. Also #33. I need to look at my books again. Just get a refresher on them. But first I gotta find them and unpack em. LOL But I noticed a misspelling. past tense for meet is met.
Review By [DarkFaerieYumi] • Date [16 Dec 09] • Rating [9 out of 10]
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