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Review of chapter "the forged ally" from (Recent Donor)Hawklan
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hmm bringing Andrew in could save a lot of trouble from canon later *g*
Review By [(Recent Donor)Hawklan] • Date [25 Feb 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Recent Donor)Hawklan
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no clue about the background you are using here, but I am curious what happens next
Review By [(Recent Donor)Hawklan] • Date [22 Feb 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "the forged ally" from Vilkath
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Not bad idea or start but I do usualy dislike the 'hidden skills and contacts' that we never heard about before popping up so quickly. I think it would been better have Xander have to build them up in wake of Buffy's absence then have supposively long term friendships with the people that we never heard of before.
Review By [Vilkath] • Date [3 Jan 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "the forged ally" from Dragonelf
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::Gives the plot bunny some Coconut rice::

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The most likely way for the world to be destroyed, most
experts agree, is by accident. That's where we come in;
We're computer professionals. We cause accidents.
- Nathaniel Borenstein
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Review By [Dragonelf] • Date [29 Dec 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "the forged ally" from Bobboky
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sweet
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [28 Dec 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "the forged ally" from Bluesnowman
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good so far.
Review By [Bluesnowman] • Date [28 Dec 09] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "the forged ally" from (Current Donor)SusanAnthony
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Very interesting! I like that Xander went to Andrew for information. He's such an underused character. I look forward to seeing more of this story.
Review By [(Current Donor)SusanAnthony] • Date [28 Dec 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Bobboky
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Cool
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [15 Dec 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from CrystalBlaze
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Andrew can get redeemed from the whole Trio mess as he's evidently an Eberron player.

That translates into local expert on this poor dude.

Given the Hellmouth, a smithy managing to produce a magewright doesn't really surprise me.
Review By [CrystalBlaze] • Date [14 Dec 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Dragonelf
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Interesting start.

::Gives the plot bunny some Lung fung soup (Dragon phoenix soup)::

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There is only one success - to be able
to spend your life in your own way.
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Review By [Dragonelf] • Date [14 Dec 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from ReflectionsOfReality
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It is an alright start for a story.

I don't think Alli should become a Scooby, this is right before Buffy and Willow try to cement Xander into the Zeppo role and try to make him fray adjacent. I would say instead let Xander form his own circle of contacts and support. There are a dozen events of power that could grant Xander or his allies boosts in the next year. Something like if either Xander is able to get Jack's zombie gang on his side (Zeppo episode) or manages to take control of them by claiming the correct fetish from O'Toole. Another might be if Xander is able to make a deal with Ethan either to get training himself in Chaos magic or someone like Jonathan that he is on friendly terms with. An even better possibility is if Xander was able to claim the Glove of Myneghon and get Alli to reforge it into something that he could use himself with a little more control. Then if Xander would get exposed to the telepathic demon blood (diluted either with water or hours old secondary exposure) like if he were cleaning off a weapon or found a small spot of it on a jacket of his , it would round off a new team that could act separately from the Scoobies with maybe being even further in the shadows so the underground would not even really know about them.

It could definitely be even more interesting than just throwing a new unique player into the scoobies and seeing how everyone would react.

Do you like the thoughts?
~Reflections
Comments from author:
Good thoughts, I'm working up a chapter 2 and I am not revising Alli's history. First off, I have plans for her and her family's past. I'm trying to find a place where I can link BTVS and Eberron. The Zeppo will gain power he knows not. I'm probably not going to give him huge powers, but they'll be powerful.
Review By [ReflectionsOfReality] • Date [14 Dec 09] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from nightowl
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interesting. I like it. You could make her a scooby or just make her a secret supplyer of xander's maybe she and her dad teach him things? either way its a great start to a good story
Review By [nightowl] • Date [14 Dec 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from grd
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How about "Tinman" for a name. I think Ali should become a Scoobie. A skilled blacksmith is invaluable.
Review By [grd] • Date [13 Dec 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from ChiVayne
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Well, if Xander is cluing her in to Sunnyhell, than Alli should probably become a Scooby.
Review By [ChiVayne] • Date [13 Dec 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from LFW
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Good start. Buffy comes back bitchy, She could kick Xander out and Ali could help Xander and Giles. If you have a Giles help Xander. thanks
Review By [LFW] • Date [13 Dec 09] • Rating [8 out of 10]
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