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Review of chapter "Chapter One" from dawnshirayuki
Review:
Good for you, its a good story and i liked it.

Dawn.
Comments from author:
Thank you and thx for reading. I'm glad you liked it.
Review By [dawnshirayuki] • Date [9 Jan 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Shadohime
Review:
A rebuttal to a previous post: Kindly go to episode 2 of the anime. Orihime's brother was clearly consumed by a mass of Hollows, and he became one himself. Rukia says that there are two ways for a soul to become a Hollow: They either do it naturally, or they are consumed by Hollows. So, you're still good.
Comments from author:
:D Thanks for such a nice review. :D
Review By [Shadohime] • Date [18 Feb 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Tjin
Review:
*Shrug* interesting concept, but it twists to much... definitely better then the 'There are no demons, Buffy isn't the Slayer and everyone is in collage/band' fics, but massive changes/death's of everyone involved make it hard to see the story for the change.

a more reliable system would be something akin to dopplegangland, Aizen pulls the Soul Reapers from a dark world to his side and then you can go about killing off the originals while still keeping the ones you want.

Just a suggestion.

-Tjin
Review By [Tjin] • Date [15 Feb 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Pikkukala
Review:
Definitely an interesting idea - the idea of Xander being able to see ghosts and eventually becoming an Arrancar is an intriguing one; however your story is let down by a lack of research - namely that a soul doesn't become a hollow by being killed by one; the soul is pernamently destroyed in that situation. It seems like it would have been possible to show him developing into a hollow natually without even having to spend much more effect within the story.

It'd also have been nice to see his time as an Arrancar developed more - at the end you make big statements about how his presence changes the Bleach storyline, but it would have been nice to see more development how this happened instead of just forcing it in. On a separate note - the comment about Grimmjaw and Nel might do better at the start of the fic as the authors note in the middle like that is very distracting.

Still, it'd be nice to see either another chapter/story or a revised/extended version of this with a little more development of his time as an arrancar.
Comments from author:
Thank you for such a great review. It was so much more polite than the last one I got. Well, glad you like it.

Sorry about the soul part. I actually....kinda wrote that part during a class (and yes I know I should of been listening but oh well)...and didn't actually notice that it was still in there. Apparently the version I posted was the old one and not the one I actually wanted. Well, I posted and fixed that one, so its fixed now. Basically, Xan loses his heart and etc. Hope that one is better or at least more correct. Can't promise it is, but oh well. Basically, my version of the bleach universe. don't you love fanfic?

I plan to actually do a bunch of little one-shots that describe a bunch of his time as an Arrancar, killing Buffy (oooo, how I so enjoyed that one!), and much more. Not sure of when I can post it, since its finals time and life is Hell right now. So, thanks for the (polite) review, and thanks for reading my story.
Review By [Pikkukala] • Date [15 Dec 09] • Rating [4 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from xon
Review:
YOU. ARE. HIGH.

Do some research before writing.
Comments from author:
THIS IS MY STORY. IT IS THE WAY THAT I WANT IT TO BE. SINCE IT'S FANFICTION IT DOESN'T HAVE TO BE ACCURATE. I ADMIT THAT I DON'T KNOW SOME OF THE DETAILS OF THE SHOW, BUT AGAIN THIS IS MY STORY. I WROTE IT FOR MY PERSONAL ENJOYMENT, NOT YOURS. I ONLY POSTED IT BECAUSE I WANTED TO, AND NOT FOR ANYOTHER REASON. IT IS MY STORY, AND I DID IT THE WAY I WANTED TO. IF YOU DON'T LIKE IT, OH WELL. I LIKE IT, AND THAT IS ALL THAT IS IMPORTANT. YOU DON'T HAVE TO READ IT. WRITE YOUR OWN STORIES THE WAY YOU WANT TO, BUT DON'T JUDGE OTHER'S STORIES.
Review By [xon] • Date [15 Dec 09] • Rating [2 out of 10]
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