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Review of chapter "Epilogue" from (Current Donor)NekoHibiki
Review:
How about have Dawn become a brony and create Equestria, Celestia, and Luna... oh yeah!^_^
Comments from author:
Don't know the fandom well enough to write this.
Review By [(Current Donor)NekoHibiki] • Date [11 Oct 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from WebSpyder
Review:
Very interesting. If she was capable of completely remaking the universe, big bang and all, why couldn't she have used inflation to dramatically increase the speed of the bubble's expansion, thereby not unmaking and remaking the universe but finishing what she had unintentionally started?
Comments from author:
She (or rather I) didn't think of it?
Review By [WebSpyder] • Date [18 Sep 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from (Current Donor)deiticlast
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Holy crap, I can't believe how much I love this story! One of the few intellectual pieces that actually had me thinking. Love the temporal philosophy you've added to the end, there. Really, really great!
Comments from author:
As I keep saying, Don Sample is owed most of the credit for the epilogue. Glad you liked it!
Review By [(Current Donor)deiticlast] • Date [9 Jul 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from EnergyBeing
Review:
Well, okay. I didn't expect that. Or anything close to that.

Ideas are now exploding in my head...

Thanks for writing this.
Comments from author:
The original Omphalos theory is so bizarre that any story that uses it has to be VERY strange indeed. Glad you enjoyed it.
Review By [EnergyBeing] • Date [9 Jul 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from Stationary
Review:
ive read this story before but i always forget to review, so im doing it now before i forget again. i really love the whole moral quandary you've got going on here and how dawn finally figures our exactly what she is, if not who. tho i doubt she's done learning about herself.
Comments from author:
Thanks - you should be thanking Don Sample too, he made me realise the epilogue was needed.
Review By [Stationary] • Date [19 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from Zarohk
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This story was a real fun ride. Only as long as it needed to be, and a great (light) investigation into physics and time-travel. I loved that Dawn was forgotten in the new world that she created, like Lain from "Serial Experiments: Lain" and Elain from "Lucifer". This story just felt RIGHT all the way through. Great job!
Comments from author:
Many thanks; it's still one of my favourites, one day I really hope to return to this series.
Review By [Zarohk] • Date [16 Jan 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from (Current Donor)Listener
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This was a really funny (in places) fish out of water story that was all about lampshade-hanging and clever moments. I liked it, but I do feel it wrapped up a bit quick. Not that I can think of any way to have done it differently, though.

On to the sequel...
Comments from author:
Thanks - it was a fun one to write and holds together pretty well.

Hope you'll enjoy Playing Cupid, but it's really just a bit of fluff, not like Omphalos.
Review By [(Current Donor)Listener] • Date [15 Sep 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Omphalos" from (Current Donor)Listener
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Can I just mention that I love the way you lampshaded the translator, and also Ezri's opinion of human religion?

There. Mentioned.
Comments from author:
Thanks - these are both things that bug me a little about the Trek universe.

No machine translation can be that good, there are too many nuances in language and culture. Next Gen mentioned it a couple of times, but even there the problems are virtually ignored.

As fpr religion, things like the Babylon 5 plot about the alien boy who is killed because his religion decides that the doctor's surgery has removed his soul never seem to happen in Star Trek, despite allegedly alien cultures. Realistically, a lot of the things that we would do would strike aliens as very peculiar, and vice versa, it seemed worth mentioning.
Review By [(Current Donor)Listener] • Date [15 Sep 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from Gideon
Review:
Epic.
Comments from author:
Thanks - I've been trying to come up with a way to top it for a sequel for years now, but it really can't be done.
Review By [Gideon] • Date [26 Feb 10] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from (Current Donor)Speakertocustomers
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It's a long time since I read this story. I never liked DS9 and so I read it only with mild interest the first time. I hadn't thought that it had made much of an impression on me. Re-reading it now, however, I realise that it probably sunk into my subconscious and was the inspiration behind the idea of the Key, influenced by the 'camouflage the Key' imperative in the monks' spell, creating an actual physical world of Toril in 'Tabula Avatar'.
Comments from author:
I'm sure I wasn't the first to use this idea - in fact there's something a little like it in Stupid Portal, although the answer turns out to be manipulation of both time lines by an interested party. Whatever, you're entirely welcome.
Review By [(Current Donor)Speakertocustomers] • Date [29 Jan 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from Mistral
Review:
This was very good, and you're right, you needed the Epilogue. We are so used to time travel in Star Trek and thinking of it as a good, fun thing, not thinking through the implications. Thanks for making me think!
Comments from author:
I've been trying to come up with a sequel that solves Voyager's problems for ages, but it just doesn't work - there are so many time paradoxes wrapped around that one, especially the finale, that there is no way for Dawn to interfere without makning things worse.
Review By [Mistral] • Date [18 Jul 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from Dragonelf
Review:
This story was just as good as the last time I read it.


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A story should have a beginning,
a middle, and an end... but not
necessarily in that order.
- Jean-Luc Godard
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Comments from author:
Thanks - sooner or later I'll try to write another in the series.
Review By [Dragonelf] • Date [18 Apr 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from Bobboky
Review:
love this story
Comments from author:
Many thanks - there's a sequel, Playing Cupid, but it's only a bit of fun, I hope to write something a bit more substantial sooner or later.
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [22 Jan 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from (Past Donor)sopchoppy
Review:
Good Story. I stumbled upon your story by searching the recommendations of people who recommended an Author who has written several stories I like.
Comments from author:
Thanks - out of interest, has it been recced somewhere? THis is the second review in 2 or 3 days and it's a pretty old story.
Review By [(Past Donor)sopchoppy] • Date [11 Sep 08] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from inarae
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Disturbing and powerful. I'm impressed. I didn't think it was weak without the epilogue, but I did like the epilogue, because it tied back into that short comment about Oz earlier, and I always like it when stories turn back on themselves that way. Full circle and all that. I have no problem with Sisco's choice, incidently. Transporters essentially kill people and then create perfect clones, memories and all, so I can see why he'd be okay with that. (e=mc2, but I can't help believing that becoming energy is the very definition of death.) Of course, I'm of the opinion that the only problem with being dead is the people you leave behind; as a corpse, you don't care anymore, regardless of whether you go to heaven, become everything, reincarnate, or simply cease to exist. By that logic, since eveyone was only killed temporarilly, the only one Dawn hurt was herself. (Even I have problems with that argument, but I definately don't equate it with mass murderer.)
Anyhow, thanks for writing and sharing.
Comments from author:
It's one of those weird arguments you can take a lot of different ways - this was my best take on it at the time, but if I was writing it now I might have a different answer.
Review By [inarae] • Date [8 Sep 08] • Rating [7 out of 10]
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