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Review of chapter "Round Two" from (Recent Donor)nerfherder
Review:
Your english needs some work, but the story was fricken awesome! Keep up the good work!
Review By [(Recent Donor)nerfherder] • Date [28 Mar 13] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Round Two" from Bobboky
Review:
sweet
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [30 Sep 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Round Two" from (Recent Donor)Hawklan
Review:
hmm was that the Webb we know from JAG? Hope X hit him hard.
Review By [(Recent Donor)Hawklan] • Date [21 Apr 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Smith's Groove her we come" from (Recent Donor)Hawklan
Review:
1. Chapter One

hmm not watched much of Heroes, but this was a nice start and I will check out a bit
more of this fic.

2. Chapter 2

good Nash's daughter is safe and now Mike Myers..oho.....

03

hmm Michael possessed by something? Hope X finds him.

Chapter 4


hmm a druid cult? not good....

05

not to surprised it was a trap look forward to read more of this fic.
Review By [(Recent Donor)Hawklan] • Date [13 Apr 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Round Two" from Annjeela
Review:
Thanks for finishing this. I quite enjoyed it as I like heroes.

An extremely minor grammar point - when you use a name with the word you as well in conversation you need commas. For example

You Michael are a...

Should be

You, Michael, are a...

Or

Michael are you home?

Should be

Michael, are you home? (this one isn't in your story )

Whenever you can take out the name and still have a sentence you need the comma.

Like I said - minor point in a really enjoyable read.
Review By [Annjeela] • Date [18 Feb 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Round Two" from JediKnight
Review:
Very interesting job on this story, I hope you'll post the next story soon.
Review By [JediKnight] • Date [29 Jan 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Round Two" from RHatch
Review:
good chapter....
Review By [RHatch] • Date [19 Jan 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Smith's Groove her we come" from malchance
Review:
This is only the second Heroes crossover I have read and I can't wait to read more. I am especially looking forward to his interactions with Peter. I hope you update soon.
Review By [malchance] • Date [30 Oct 10] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 4" from goldenspringtime
Review:
Great story I may not know all the stories involved but generally I like it.
Review By [goldenspringtime] • Date [1 Jul 10] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 4" from Maeven
Review:
ummmmm...confoozled here...Xander torched Michael and then this kid Tommy Doyle comes along and says he knows where to find Michael...but isn't Michael already BBQ'd? unless there was a backwards timejump in there that isn't clear?
Comments from author:
Xander has absorbed Hiro's Powers so when he was reading. Michael's File he jumped back to that Halloween Night in 1978 and he fought Michael and the Explosion happened during the movie Halloween 2 Xander jumped foward in time back to the present to avoid the fireball
Review By [Maeven] • Date [29 Jun 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 4" from ktweaver
Review:
Loving this story arc!
Review By [ktweaver] • Date [26 Jun 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 4" from Bobboky
Review:
good
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [24 Jun 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 4" from Morgomir
Review:
Great chapter. Keep up the good work.
Review By [Morgomir] • Date [24 Jun 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Trick Or Treat" from (Current Donor)dogbertcarroll
Review:
A great character and setup to play with.
Review By [(Current Donor)dogbertcarroll] • Date [7 Mar 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Trick Or Treat" from MagnusXXN
Review:
Might want to look into a beta reader. I can see you have a good idea what you want and where your taking this story. I just think the grammer could use some waxing, and maybe a little more depth to the conversations. Or back story.



): )
Review By [MagnusXXN] • Date [6 Mar 10] • Not Rated
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